Fern: for your first showing, this was ok. I like how you use dialouge, sounds pretty natural to me! The fish were something curious, and since i haven't read Lophii's bio, I hope you go more into what they are in your future comics. They caught my attention and i know they could be interesting. I liked how you threw Akantha in there, that comic relief was nice heehee You really need to tighten up your backgrounds. They were good for what was actually THERE ( like the objects that were used ), but if the lines were a bit more tidy and straighted, they would have been a lot stronger. For the most part your faces are fine, but a lot of times you have them with the same expression. Try varying it up! Because even when people are doing nothing, their faces are always slightly changing. And for some reason, i like your side view faces haha Overall this was good and I'm looking forward to seeing how you grow!
Pi-e: I loved where this was going, you really impressed me with the backgrounds ( hell, with everything overall! ) oh please please please even if you don't feel like finishing it up, I'd wanna see the whole thing you had still.
Lophii Formes vs. Aja Reiche
Critiques & Comments
# 11
Posted:
Jul 6 2009, 09:38 AM
# 10
Posted:
Jul 6 2009, 04:24 AM
Thanks William!
I like bizzare perspective. Sometimes. And with lines i'll prob try different stuff next time.
I was quite happy wih my comic till I saw P-ie's that looks just purely amazing
I like bizzare perspective. Sometimes. And with lines i'll prob try different stuff next time.
I was quite happy wih my comic till I saw P-ie's that looks just purely amazing
# 9
Posted:
Jul 2 2009, 01:51 PM
Fern, good first outing I think. I liked it and it had decent background and composition. My issue was with the perspective every now and then, like when she was leaving the room and was shocked by Akantha, I feel like the pperspective is a bit wonky there. Also your lines are a bit inconsistent and could stand to be stronger. Play with line width too.
Pi-e I would love to see a finished version, this was interesting.
Pi-e I would love to see a finished version, this was interesting.
# 8
Posted:
Jun 30 2009, 09:03 PM
Ran Pi-e's entry by Toast first. Because the fish is meant to be a dream version of Lophii and also represents her powers it is within the rules.
# 7
Posted:
Jun 30 2009, 08:10 PM
pi-e, it's fine. I won't cry. Probably.
It's funny how 2 weeks turned into 2 days... and then I panicked a bit, but I have it all finished and uploaded now!
(sorry about the beyond battle mess thing )
It's funny how 2 weeks turned into 2 days... and then I panicked a bit, but I have it all finished and uploaded now!
(sorry about the beyond battle mess thing )
# 6
Posted:
Jun 27 2009, 09:59 AM
I have to leave on short-notice to WA tomorrow morning so i'm gonna try my damnedest to get something coherent in the time I have left... Sorry if it's incomplete, Fern u__u;;
# 5
Posted:
Jun 18 2009, 07:13 AM
oh cool
# 4
Posted:
Jun 16 2009, 10:13 PM
oh SWEET!
# 3
Posted:
Jun 16 2009, 10:09 PM
Yay - Good luck to both of you (and on your first battle Fern)
# 2
Posted:
Jun 16 2009, 09:50 PM
Very cool. Good luck guys!
# 1
Posted:
Jun 16 2009, 09:44 PM
Go Aja gooooo!
Regular Match
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2 weeks
Ended:
Jul 7th, 2009
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32
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pi-e
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I enjoy Lophii's personality, keep up the good work!
pi-e, this was REALLY awesome art, just too bad there wasn't more I hope to see the rest someday!