Ten Dead Kings: This comic made me chuckle. I liked the writing. While reading it, it sort of reminded me of Futurama dialogue for some reason (not the content so much, but more the WAY everyone spoke, and always out loud), and that's a good thing. "Cock Feathers" made me laugh out loud, that was great. One suggestion I would make would be, if it is only line art, to maybe vary the line widths a little bit more than they are, maybe a bolder outline around the characters to help them pop more. Pretty good showing though, I liked it a lot. One of my favorite things was on page 4, panel 7. The "Cute" word balloon placement.... priceless! :-)
Squidney: A long time ago, I did a comic in a similar style to this one, so I can appreciate what you were going for. I liked what you were going for, especially with the white lines on the black background. I think with a little more polish, this could really work for you. I think for this outing in particular though, that it gets a little bit jumbled, especially with the low-res look to the whole thing. I think if the lines were smoother, and the lettering was more uniform, you'd really have something here, so I'd like to see you experiment more with this style (if you want to that is). As is though, it was a bit hard to follow, and sort of came off as one random encounter, or one scene from a comic, but not a complete comic story as a whole. Keep it up though! I want to see where you go with this style.
Meridia Oricon vs. Hyena Girl
Critiques & Comments
# 8
Posted:
Oct 16 2014, 10:33 PM
# 7
Posted:
Oct 12 2014, 09:01 PM
funny comic, tdk! I liked the foreshortening on page 3, as well as the joke haha. I think you did a great job with Mountain Queen, her movements are perfect and I like how her hair is always tangling around anything. on the last page I think you used the word "there" too many times in Meridia's first word bubble but thats my biggest complaint, funny, reads smoothly, good comic.
squidney, like Elyan said this looks a bit rushed and hard to follow, and then it stops sort of abruptly. where is Hyena Girl taking Mountain Queen? why does she look like she fainted? plus theres like no encounter at all with Meridia. I like white on black but its a little rushed looking. i dunno i think you can do better but i am interested to see where the story goes with these two!
squidney, like Elyan said this looks a bit rushed and hard to follow, and then it stops sort of abruptly. where is Hyena Girl taking Mountain Queen? why does she look like she fainted? plus theres like no encounter at all with Meridia. I like white on black but its a little rushed looking. i dunno i think you can do better but i am interested to see where the story goes with these two!
# 6
Posted:
Oct 12 2014, 12:09 PM
TDK: phallica bourbona... cock feathers ... glad you like the ring of it.
i feel like you got a very good grasp on hyena girl and the queen. it felt very in character and the story was entertaining as well. well done.
artwise i think you could have done a little better use of the blacks. 8 pages is alot i think and your lines are great so maybe you just didnt have time but still some decent "shading on characters and background could have helped the mood.
squidney: i cant really say anything concrete about your entry. it feels very rushed and to be honest i dont get what is happening. at least its an intersting experiment
i feel like you got a very good grasp on hyena girl and the queen. it felt very in character and the story was entertaining as well. well done.
artwise i think you could have done a little better use of the blacks. 8 pages is alot i think and your lines are great so maybe you just didnt have time but still some decent "shading on characters and background could have helped the mood.
squidney: i cant really say anything concrete about your entry. it feels very rushed and to be honest i dont get what is happening. at least its an intersting experiment
# 5
Posted:
Oct 11 2014, 01:47 PM
Trying a pretty different style with this one. Hope u guys like.
# 4
Posted:
Oct 11 2014, 09:33 AM
Uploaded. Did like 95% of the work in the first two weeks, so yeah, QUALITY.
Looking forward to see yours, Squidney!
Looking forward to see yours, Squidney!
# 3
Posted:
Oct 6 2014, 06:52 PM
oooh, intriguing match up- also, kudos on keeping that comic battle momentum going, Squidney!
# 2
Posted:
Oct 6 2014, 08:44 AM
I was like WHY IS DIS NOT UP YET and now I see... II expect even greater things now
# 1
Posted:
Sep 26 2014, 04:16 AM
I'm looking forward to this one.
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
2 weeks + 1
Ended:
Oct 18th, 2014
Votes Cast:
17
Page Views:
1770
Winner:
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Squid. I am not gonna repeat what other said but i get similar impression. I think this is the weakest comic you did so far andits a bit of a shame, but man - you were doing a battle after a battle and everyone gets burned out sometime. I guess. I want to battle u real bad too