Bobo: @ranzombie: great work! Your comic could have used a bit of touch-up to make your line art look completely black, but your style is so refined! It was a pleasure to look at. My only real problem with your comic is the way you handled speech bubbles. It wasn't always clear at first who was speaking. Be sure to use balloon tails to point to the speaker (in the general direction if their mouth, if you don't have room for the speech bubble right next to their head) instead of quotation marks. Quotation marks are generally used in comics to convey a person from a previous page continuing a thought while the action shifts to a new scene, so seeing quotation marks makes it feel like someone other than the characters on the page is speaking. Not really a big deal, but since your work is so good overall, I had to nitpick a bit
@pizzaman: love me some black and white and red comics! I don't know if the lack of anti-aliasing was intended or not, but it was kind of distracting. If it wasn't intentional, feel free to hit me up if you'd like help figuring it out. I think this was just a fun little comic that gave me a chuckle, and hope to see more from you soon!
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Thanks a lot for the criticism, Bobo! All the comments that I've received so far have been a ton of help in really finding out what are the areas I need to work on. As such, I actually have one question regarding speech bubbles which hopefully you might be able to give me some additional feedback on.
In the comic everyone's speech bubbles, except Count Burmeister, did have balloon tails (though I should've probably also added a stroke to make em clearer). The reason Burmeister lacked those is mainly because he communicates telepathically rather than actually speaking. So with that in mind, the approach I took was to not add a balloon tail, but instead have all his comments come between asterisks like *this*.
This is obviously an improvised solution and I can understand perfectly how it can cause some confusion to the reader. As such, do you have any suggestions on how I should approach characters with that sort of specialized communication form? Should I just stick with speech bubbles and balloon tails when not making string emphasis on the characters telepathic communication abilities or is there clearer way of conveying this?
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