Munchkin's a lot of fun, and has a more D&D kind of feel to its gameplay.  There's another game you should check out called Story War, which is essentially the same exact concept as Enter Void's battles, except for improvisational storytelling, rather than sequential art. 

3DS FC: 1779-2938-6428

The only game I own right now is MH4.

Well, if you're only gonna have one...

Hitlisted.

Decided to hand letter this, and photograph it instead of scanning, to try and preserve the grey tones.  Unfortunately, this method allows a little too much to be visible, so you can also see where I've pasted in text or erased a heavy pencil line here and there.  I'll let you be the judge if that detracts from the comic or not.

Anyway, I'm wondering if page 1 needs any text added to it.  I hadn't initially planned to have dialogue or narration here, but page 2 has so much that it feels a little lopsided.  I want to avoid internal monologue or a Narrator here, but I also want the page to read well.  And yeah, I realize I'm probably way overthinking this, and could just submit this intro as-is, but if this is going to be the first thing anyone ever sees of my character for the rest of eternity, his debut comic, I want it to be as good as it can be.  Because why not?

Thanks, guys!  I went to the store earlier and picked up a bottle of white ink to make some touch ups, and I took a grey Copic to that first panel on page 1 to give it more depth.  I plan on having this thing finished and submitted tomorrow.  For now, I gotta get a few hours of sleep before work. 

Stay tuned!

I was giving her the benefit of the doubt, and assuming she was a little person.

Thanks, Fern!  I didn't end up having a chance to work on this yesterday, but got a few panels done this morning, here's a quick update.

Hey, thanks Stefan!  Here's a little preview of the finished first page.  More tomorrow.

Aww, we lost our yellow masked marauder. I has a sad.

I love that guy, but he was giving me a bad case of writer's block.  But fret not, I don't scrap anything, I'm just exploring options, drawing the ideas that I do have at the moment.

Since it seems like he's struck a chord, I'll spend today brainstorming an intro scene for Ol' Smiley and see if I can't scratch that itch.

I sure learned something!

4 'pages' is the maximum but you could also double stack your pages or submit 4 pages as your intro and then when and if you get in submit the remainder or even the full comic as a Beyond Battle

please properly size your images however...these last few images are far far too big...Standard Image size for Design Sheet and Intro is suggested to be 1000x1000 and 800x1000....there is no reason for sketches and thumbnails to be as big as you have them

you should also get in the habit of including script and balloons as part of the thumbnail process-they are just as much a part of the final visual....and slapping them on half-assedly at the end is almost always a bad idea

Thanks for the tips and info, Wei.  Since I don't have a scanner, what I do is I take a picture of the page with my iPad, and then import that into an app called Procreate, which is sort of like PhotoShop Lite.  I've been using the default page size of 1536x2048 because that's the resolution of the iPad's retina display.  I'll make sure to keep future pages within the 1000x1000 range from now on.

Here's the previously posted WIP resized, and with SFX added:

Pages on the way.

This is some cool composition and nice blacks you've got going on here but like Fern said.... its gotta be 2-4 pages, I'm afraid I'm pretty sure you'll get rejected if its more than that ^^;

Thanks for the feedback, guys.  I didn't realize 4 pages was the maximum, I thought it was just a suggestion, with at least 2 required. 

Well, I guess I'll spill the beans on where I was going with this, then.  Basically, Warlock is not the character I'm introducing.  After getting wrecked and crashing into the church, he wakes up in an underground science facility/holy shrine beneath the cathedral.  The scientists and priests there tell him that they've encased his broken body in a new suit of "holy armor", and he is to be the champion of their religion (i.e. a pawn in their pursuit of power over the city).

The suit is covered in small emitters, capable of projecting beams of some sort of light energy that can take various shapes - sword, shield, spear, whip, etc. - by channeling and filtering his innate dark energies into something more radiant.

Needless to say, he's not keen on their intentions, but they brainwash him and force him to do their bidding.

The C-list superhero, Warlock, becomes Cherub, the Light's Hand.

A page from my notebook:



As I said before, I think the page count could be condensed on the actual art boards, since my thumbnails aren't to scale.  But having looked at some other intros for reference, it seems like most people have 2-4 pages of "I'm [insert name], and I'm gonna [insert goal] in Void City!"  *pose!* 

I don't think I could really boil everything I want down into 4 pages, so what do you guys think might be a better intro for Cherub?  I can do this particular origin story as a BB or something later on, if need be.

Or hell, I could table this one and do some totally different character.  I was thinking it'd be fun to do a masked slasher killer or something.  I think I saw somebody had a character that looks like Alice Cooper who's supposed to be a serial killer, or at least that's how he was depicted in one comic, but Void City could always use another one of those guys lurkin' around, right?