Intro Story / Keito
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# 10
Posted:
Jan 4 2018, 09:16 PM
You've got some slick coloring tricks and an attractive fun character! I look forward to seeing your skills tighten and develop on Void, and looking forward to more comics to come!
# 9
Posted:
Jan 1 2018, 01:50 PM
Fearn: This is drawn pretty well! As far as an intro story I guess it is okay. Like nothing really happens in the comic and I suppose the point of the intro story is that it shows what the character is about and how they deal with I dunno, interactions with other people and situations? Here there is like, kinda nothing much storywise. It is an intro, but not really a story. I suppose it is enough for now, I mean I would have wanted to know a bit more about motivations of Keito or at least how he got there - but upon consulting the about page I find that he doesn't have any. This is I suppose good in the sense that now you have quite a lot to play with and you can develop him in the upcoming comics, but at the same time it is a bit bland. I would hope to see some more character development in the future tho, as this is not really enough for people to c a r e about this dude and what he's up to. Good luck
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Honestly, I'm inclined to agree with you. This isn't the first idea I had, and it isn't the best, but it's the one that I thought could get the point across in the smallest amount of time. And I know that doesn't sound good but I've been getting on myself about getting a character up on VOID for the last few months and my time is a bit limited at the moment. For the greater amount of time I spent coming up with Ideas I was caught in the trap of trying to figure out how to cram as much information about the character into it as humanly possible and I couldn't find any ideas that really felt good that way and it was just taking a lot of time with no real results so I deigned to make a more simple comic like this so I could at least get it done and show more of his character later, if that makes sense. Rest assured that the intros I have planned for my other characters are more in depth.
Pita: This guy looks like a load of fun!
Only thing I will advise for the next strip is to maybe look into other fonts. F's and T's look familiar in the current one, so "more fun this way" looks like "more tun this way".
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I did notice that, actually. I might have to use a program other than Mediabang to ad the text because it MB's text tool was giving me quite a few problems. Like it wouldn't work unless I was connected to the network and my computer disconnects constantly.
yarnwitch: I love this already! As is good void greeting: "fight me!"
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Will has first dibs, but after that I'm game.
# 8
Posted:
Jan 1 2018, 10:27 AM
This is drawn pretty well! As far as an intro story I guess it is okay. Like nothing really happens in the comic and I suppose the point of the intro story is that it shows what the character is about and how they deal with I dunno, interactions with other people and situations? Here there is like, kinda nothing much storywise. It is an intro, but not really a story. I suppose it is enough for now, I mean I would have wanted to know a bit more about motivations of Keito or at least how he got there - but upon consulting the about page I find that he doesn't have any. This is I suppose good in the sense that now you have quite a lot to play with and you can develop him in the upcoming comics, but at the same time it is a bit bland. I would hope to see some more character development in the future tho, as this is not really enough for people to c a r e about this dude and what he's up to. Good luck 
# 7
Posted:
Jan 1 2018, 09:02 AM
This is a cool comic and it looks great, Id love to see the character more in and interacting with the environments that you are building a lot of these shots feel very close to him.
# 6
Posted:
Dec 29 2017, 05:16 PM
This is so rad and that cityscape at the bottom of page 1 is very cool and ambitious! I can't wait to see more robot action!! 
# 5
Posted:
Dec 28 2017, 03:20 PM
Very simple, but it's nice to have a character that's just cool and easy-going for the sake of being cool! What a rad robot!!
# 4
Posted:
Dec 28 2017, 12:45 PM
.... I FEEL THREATENED
MY ROBOT SON IS THREATENED
ONLY ONE SHALL REMAIN
lookin froward to fight that one lol
MY ROBOT SON IS THREATENED
ONLY ONE SHALL REMAIN
lookin froward to fight that one lol
# 3
Posted:
Dec 28 2017, 12:12 PM
This guy looks like a load of fun!
Only thing I will advise for the next strip is to maybe look into other fonts. F's and T's look familiar in the current one, so "more fun this way" looks like "more tun this way".
Only thing I will advise for the next strip is to maybe look into other fonts. F's and T's look familiar in the current one, so "more fun this way" looks like "more tun this way".
# 2
Posted:
Dec 28 2017, 09:16 AM
I love this already! As is good void greeting: "fight me!"
# 1
Posted:
Dec 28 2017, 09:01 AM
Congrats on getting in! Great comic, and neat character, just make sure to double check your page sizes next time, y'know?
I can't wait to see more from this character!
I can't wait to see more from this character!
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