This girl seems like she's gonna be fun in fights.
I'll be looking forward to more KFG stuff.
Oh, and like everyone else has said, your inks are great. Nice job!
Intro Story / Lang Zhujiang
Critiques & Comments
# 5
Posted:
Jul 7 2017, 01:44 PM
# 4
Posted:
Jul 2 2017, 08:05 AM
I'm basically reiterating what Pitafish said, but the only thing that didn't sit well with me was the direction of the kick compared to the previous panels. The inks were great, and I am interested to see where you take this character!
# 3
Posted:
Jul 1 2017, 11:13 AM
Inks were nicely done, and I like the air of arrogance this tall lady exudes.
But that kick felt clunky. She's facing her opponent when the fighter strikes, but the kick shot looks like she's either striking from behind her or performed a clockwise turn before kicking. And then the pose right after as the opponent falls looks like a recover from kicking in a counter-clockwise turn.
I can add a visual guide if this wording is confusing, but the gist of this is that the skill that's being displayed here isn't smoothly executed, and that's definitely something to plan out if the intent of this character is to be a melee fighter. The action shots need to stick, and this felt like there was some fumbling to get the comic done in a certain amount of time.
But that kick felt clunky. She's facing her opponent when the fighter strikes, but the kick shot looks like she's either striking from behind her or performed a clockwise turn before kicking. And then the pose right after as the opponent falls looks like a recover from kicking in a counter-clockwise turn.
I can add a visual guide if this wording is confusing, but the gist of this is that the skill that's being displayed here isn't smoothly executed, and that's definitely something to plan out if the intent of this character is to be a melee fighter. The action shots need to stick, and this felt like there was some fumbling to get the comic done in a certain amount of time.
# 2
Posted:
Jun 30 2017, 10:11 PM
Yass for more kickass ladies!! Glad to see you seem more comfortable with digital inks, your lines feel more solid here compared to previous comics. I enjoyed how short and simple this intro was too, I think you did a good job conveying the type of character you're going for. Also I'm loving those legs. Legs for daaayys
Looking forward to seeing her in battle!
Looking forward to seeing her in battle!
# 1
Posted:
Jun 30 2017, 08:42 PM
Glad to see another member of KFG appear and join. Can't wait to see what you all have planned!
Also, I love your inks so muuuucch. *w*
Also, I love your inks so muuuucch. *w*
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Your panel layouts flow well, and your backgrounds appear and drop out in a way that makes your pages nicely readable.
EDIT: Woops. I actually just noticed her portrait is in fact the blonde woman. So yeah, definitely needed to establish who these two characters were a little better, because I really thought the scrappy underdog girl was our protagonist here.