Thank you everyone for your words and critique, I will take what I've learned here and last match to the next round.
Berto: when I first arrived in entervoid you were among the artists I admired most, struck first by your comic of Ponbiki vs Chia Hui, and that love continued on through the All Together Now tournament where you took Ponbiki and Estrella D'Muerte to the finals. I was trembling at the thought of facing you and it's been an honor and a privilege for me to share this match with you. In alot of ways I guess this comic was my personal expression of how I felt about your work. Thanks for the early years inspiration, and for this wonderful comic you produced with our characters
2016 Heavyweight Tournament: Round 2 / GIGARA vs. Kaisho Ponbiki
Critiques & Comments
# 12
Posted:
Jun 23 2016, 12:25 PM
# 11
Posted:
Jun 20 2016, 01:54 PM
First of to Pyras thanks for the awesome fight I'm truly happy to have lost to you in such an amazing and fun way.
(I enjoyed your rendition of Ponbiki I think that was my old design so maybe I'll go back to it.)
Second thank you everyone for your critics and praises, I'm glad to see I have earned new fans in void. Especially since I'm an old fart from the past. It's fun reading the critics and learning that you like and are a big fan now. That always makes me happy. I'll take everything I've heard here and put it to good use.
I always thought of void as a cool school for our love of comics and experimenting on our comics till we find something that works for us. I'll tell you this even though I've been doing this for a long time now you never stop learning, and that's OK there's always room for improvement. So please don't get angry on hurt when someone critics your work I would say most people are looking out for you to improve. And yes their are jerk out there but don't mind them, they either jelly or just want to mess with you which will hold you back if you let it bother you.
Back in the day my main critic was that my comics had bad spelling and grammar I always try to work on it no matter what, I didn't give up comics just because I can't write. I was happy to see that in my last 2 battle no one really pointed out any bad spelling or grammar issues,(maybe out of being nice they didn't) or its has improved a bit. Now the critics were how the word need to fit in a bubbles better which I will work on for sure that a whole new thing that I have to practice on which is OK. It's all a learning experience.
And that's why Void is such a especial place You can't work for marvel or dc or anyone else and try to experiment with there characters they would hate that. Trust me I have learned that the hard way I've had to redraw entire pages or panel because I decided to experiment with something new or just wanting to do something new for fun.
So use Void for fun don't take it so serious, it's a place for learning and experimenting take advantage of it.
I'll be around more now that I graduated and still looking for work. Hopefully I can try my hands on doing some fully colored battles to help me improve on my coloring speed and any other thing I want to try out.
Thank you all for the wonderful comments and advise.
(I enjoyed your rendition of Ponbiki I think that was my old design so maybe I'll go back to it.)
Second thank you everyone for your critics and praises, I'm glad to see I have earned new fans in void. Especially since I'm an old fart from the past. It's fun reading the critics and learning that you like and are a big fan now. That always makes me happy. I'll take everything I've heard here and put it to good use.
I always thought of void as a cool school for our love of comics and experimenting on our comics till we find something that works for us. I'll tell you this even though I've been doing this for a long time now you never stop learning, and that's OK there's always room for improvement. So please don't get angry on hurt when someone critics your work I would say most people are looking out for you to improve. And yes their are jerk out there but don't mind them, they either jelly or just want to mess with you which will hold you back if you let it bother you.
Back in the day my main critic was that my comics had bad spelling and grammar I always try to work on it no matter what, I didn't give up comics just because I can't write. I was happy to see that in my last 2 battle no one really pointed out any bad spelling or grammar issues,(maybe out of being nice they didn't) or its has improved a bit. Now the critics were how the word need to fit in a bubbles better which I will work on for sure that a whole new thing that I have to practice on which is OK. It's all a learning experience.
And that's why Void is such a especial place You can't work for marvel or dc or anyone else and try to experiment with there characters they would hate that. Trust me I have learned that the hard way I've had to redraw entire pages or panel because I decided to experiment with something new or just wanting to do something new for fun.
So use Void for fun don't take it so serious, it's a place for learning and experimenting take advantage of it.
I'll be around more now that I graduated and still looking for work. Hopefully I can try my hands on doing some fully colored battles to help me improve on my coloring speed and any other thing I want to try out.
Thank you all for the wonderful comments and advise.
# 10
Posted:
Jun 20 2016, 11:06 AM
Pyras: It was so adorable! That lineless style looks so damn good! And it was really funny too! I loved it!
Berto: What a greatly paced, action-packed story this was! The rough style really fits the heavy ammounts of destruction going on! And the perspectives and the hugeness of Gigara and the wreckage! Great work!
Berto: What a greatly paced, action-packed story this was! The rough style really fits the heavy ammounts of destruction going on! And the perspectives and the hugeness of Gigara and the wreckage! Great work!
# 9
Posted:
Jun 20 2016, 12:05 AM
PYRAS- Ya dun got me. and ya got me good. I was smirking and cackling throughout this ride. The fact that you have such a tried and true trope for void depicted here and turned it on its head is great. I loved the monster mcnasty being called out on his tired villanous plot. I loved Park just full on fangirling when Ponbiki came onto the scene. Honestly, all the breaks in 'protocol' when it comes to a serious beat em up comic totally appealed to me. It made an otherwise 'fight monster and win' trope delightfully entertaining.
BERTO- Your side totally felt like a throwback to old school void. Just a straightforward mess em up monster brawl with a happy ending. I seriously loved the gritty messy inks on this. It really lended itself well to the scenes of explosions and worms mucking things up in the city. I'm surprised I'm saying this, but I feel your static character panels should've been less detailed and rendered. You have such an overall loosey goosey style with the action going on, that those moments where it appears you have time to show some TLC to say, a close up of Ponbiki really stands out in a jarring way. But hey, that's just me.
BERTO- Your side totally felt like a throwback to old school void. Just a straightforward mess em up monster brawl with a happy ending. I seriously loved the gritty messy inks on this. It really lended itself well to the scenes of explosions and worms mucking things up in the city. I'm surprised I'm saying this, but I feel your static character panels should've been less detailed and rendered. You have such an overall loosey goosey style with the action going on, that those moments where it appears you have time to show some TLC to say, a close up of Ponbiki really stands out in a jarring way. But hey, that's just me.
# 8
Posted:
Jun 20 2016, 12:01 AM
Berto- I loved the scale of yours! When Ponbiki was climbing Gigary and standing on her nose and when he blew a hole through the clouds, everything felt so epically proportioned! the page sizes were kinda big though which made it a lil tough to take the whole thing in since you had some big panels. also didnt quite catch the boobies on my first glance lol had to look again but that IS a funny gag, i like how light and simple a character Ponbiki is! Im a big fan!
pyras- youre getting super good at lineless colouring and your effects are so great, I love that swirling vortex on the last page! i think you may want to consider the colour palettes a little, for a lot of interiors you use sort of "brown" like "this is a wall" and i feel like theres other colours you could use to enhance the mood more. The character interaction is great though, i love how you write Ponbiki and im getting a little more attached to this new version of Park and her story!
pyras- youre getting super good at lineless colouring and your effects are so great, I love that swirling vortex on the last page! i think you may want to consider the colour palettes a little, for a lot of interiors you use sort of "brown" like "this is a wall" and i feel like theres other colours you could use to enhance the mood more. The character interaction is great though, i love how you write Ponbiki and im getting a little more attached to this new version of Park and her story!
# 7
Posted:
Jun 15 2016, 02:41 PM
Pyras: I'll echo Minteh that your lineless style is really looking better and better with each battle! It really shines on your characters, but I think your backgrounds could use a little more love to fit into your style better. There's a lack of detail in the backgrounds that doesn't compliment the relatively simple characters as well as it could. I recommend experimenting with somewhat more detailed or painterly backgrounds to see if that additional level of interest can make your characters pop that much more. As for your story, I loved how Park was a fan of Ponbiki, especially as someone who was around a long time ago when he was newer. It's always fun to see a vet return, and I like that you threw that into your comic! I haven't been following Park's story, so I got a little lost with the metaplot, but I enjoyed this little slice of the story and it makes me want to read more, so I think you did your job!
Berto: Your comic was fun! It feels like there are so many heavy comics going on right now, so it's a breath of fresh air to have a more lighthearted comic. I love Ponbiki just from this comic alone! I think my favorite part was when Ponbiki was jumping onto Gigara's horn, where you had to put a panel just around him so we could find him in the middle of this ENORMOUS monster. The contrast of scale between the two was amazing, and really drove home the enormity of what the characters were facing. My main critique for you is to watch out for keeping consistency in your inking and panel density. There were some panels that felt much more finely inked than others, and some that felt like they had really empty backgrounds compared to others. I assume that's just because of the time constraints you were up against, but either way just keep an eye out for that.
Berto: Your comic was fun! It feels like there are so many heavy comics going on right now, so it's a breath of fresh air to have a more lighthearted comic. I love Ponbiki just from this comic alone! I think my favorite part was when Ponbiki was jumping onto Gigara's horn, where you had to put a panel just around him so we could find him in the middle of this ENORMOUS monster. The contrast of scale between the two was amazing, and really drove home the enormity of what the characters were facing. My main critique for you is to watch out for keeping consistency in your inking and panel density. There were some panels that felt much more finely inked than others, and some that felt like they had really empty backgrounds compared to others. I assume that's just because of the time constraints you were up against, but either way just keep an eye out for that.
# 6
Posted:
Jun 15 2016, 08:52 AM
Pyras: I'm becoming more and more of a fan of this line less style you're developing. As you keep using it I feel like you're really refining it and making it something really special. Some of the problems I've had with it in your past comics are basically non-existent here. The story you told was also really up there for me, it was a fun interaction between all characters and an interesting set-up for upcoming comics. It's making me pretty excited!
Berto: I love Ponbiki and I love how you use him, your style is super raw and energetic and just breathes so much life into what you make. The only criticism I have here is that I wasn't 100% sure where the blood came from on your last panel. After it hit me I definitely thought 'wow I should've figured that out sooner', but I think the actual censoring of the boobs is the reason, I didn't make the connection right away haha.
Berto: I love Ponbiki and I love how you use him, your style is super raw and energetic and just breathes so much life into what you make. The only criticism I have here is that I wasn't 100% sure where the blood came from on your last panel. After it hit me I definitely thought 'wow I should've figured that out sooner', but I think the actual censoring of the boobs is the reason, I didn't make the connection right away haha.
# 5
Posted:
Jun 13 2016, 07:02 PM
AHHH YEAAAAHHH!
Pyras This is soo AWESOME! The whole team up thing is great. The entry is pretty much amazing the colors and less textures is very welcomed. The way you wrote Pon is great hes so laid back and enjoying life to the fullest so cool. teaming him up with Park is awesome. I was going for that but ran out of time. Sorry for showing Parks boobs. I just thought it be the only time I can use the nose bleed gag. My favorite void fight so far for real! It's kind of funny how close our story lines touched with the friendship and the team up and helping each other out. great minds think alike. Good Luck!
Pyras This is soo AWESOME! The whole team up thing is great. The entry is pretty much amazing the colors and less textures is very welcomed. The way you wrote Pon is great hes so laid back and enjoying life to the fullest so cool. teaming him up with Park is awesome. I was going for that but ran out of time. Sorry for showing Parks boobs. I just thought it be the only time I can use the nose bleed gag. My favorite void fight so far for real! It's kind of funny how close our story lines touched with the friendship and the team up and helping each other out. great minds think alike. Good Luck!
# 4
Posted:
Jun 12 2016, 09:16 PM
uploaded my pages.
# 3
Posted:
May 30 2016, 11:14 PM
@_@
# 2
Posted:
May 30 2016, 05:07 PM
Ooh Snap!
# 1
Posted:
May 30 2016, 07:30 AM
This is gonna be awesome
Tournament Match
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Ended:
Jun 20th, 2016
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