Jaret vs. teal
Critiques & Comments
# 11
Posted:
May 15 2006, 10:37 AM
Thanks a lot for all the comments. I\'m taking the \'more action\' part into consideration for my next comic, and I think I\'m going to stay away from the american-british language difference from now on D: But I\'d just like to say that I\'m not homophoebic in ANY way whatsoever.
# 10
Posted:
May 10 2006, 11:17 PM
Hmm... Both were pretty good for starter fights... I wish there could be a little more inventiveness going on. BK\'s fight ending in the tried old TMNT \"throw a sewer cap\" technique and tb\'s \"angry anime girl who WTFPWNS the stupid guy\" are kinda generic approaches to fights.
I do like BK\'s color style but I wish his backgrounds were a little better laid out and filled with... People, lol. Same with tb\'s.
Of course there\'s other little things like panel layout and pacing but your characters were enjoyable at least. I can\'t wait to see where you guys go next.
I do like BK\'s color style but I wish his backgrounds were a little better laid out and filled with... People, lol. Same with tb\'s.
Of course there\'s other little things like panel layout and pacing but your characters were enjoyable at least. I can\'t wait to see where you guys go next.
# 9
Posted:
May 10 2006, 08:33 PM
BlackKrystal, it was rather difficult to see the action in your comics because you don\'t use any motion lines.
You don\'t show Teal actually attacking Jaret, and he just teleports into those garbage cans. Or the sewer lid leaps out of Teal\'s head (Though you use motion lines for the lids movement AWAY from her head for some reason.)
And I really have no idea what\'s going on in the bottome two panels of page 1.
You don\'t show Teal actually attacking Jaret, and he just teleports into those garbage cans. Or the sewer lid leaps out of Teal\'s head (Though you use motion lines for the lids movement AWAY from her head for some reason.)
And I really have no idea what\'s going on in the bottome two panels of page 1.
# 8
Posted:
May 10 2006, 12:29 PM
Jaret, though the color was nice you could stand a bit more work with movement and backgrounds (so could I).
Teal I thought your battle was pretty well drawn out. The action was confusing in a couple panels but not bad at all.
Teal I thought your battle was pretty well drawn out. The action was confusing in a couple panels but not bad at all.
# 7
Posted:
May 10 2006, 01:13 AM
HOSHIT....I seme to be good at inadvertantly starting memes.
You both did pretty good. o: Jaret could work on backgrounds, but then- so could I. XD; The story was kinda...eeh. I guess it was the whole \"fag\" thing- I\'m not a fan of that word when used in a certain sense.
Teal\'s comic had some good action sequences. o: Liked the movement and motion lines. Could use some more varied inking, but in all it was nice.
Good job you two. ^^
You both did pretty good. o: Jaret could work on backgrounds, but then- so could I. XD; The story was kinda...eeh. I guess it was the whole \"fag\" thing- I\'m not a fan of that word when used in a certain sense.
Teal\'s comic had some good action sequences. o: Liked the movement and motion lines. Could use some more varied inking, but in all it was nice.
Good job you two. ^^
# 6
Posted:
May 9 2006, 11:24 PM
BlackKrystal - wow. No backgrounds, superflous violence, and just a sprinkle of homophobia to boot! How wonderfully special. I didn\'t mind your comic buddeh, but the art was just kind of so-so despite the colouring, and your movement still needs a lot of work.
teal-belle - Welps that wasn\'t bad! I can tell you used a tablet for it (something I also do constantly!) and I\'m impressed with your clean lines, good job there. I need to know where/how you do those speedlines, I NEEEED TO KNOOOOW!! Make sure you continue to practice perspective, because though I really like that you\'re trying, you still need to focus there.
Good job both you, I hope to see more from you both!!
teal-belle - Welps that wasn\'t bad! I can tell you used a tablet for it (something I also do constantly!) and I\'m impressed with your clean lines, good job there. I need to know where/how you do those speedlines, I NEEEED TO KNOOOOW!! Make sure you continue to practice perspective, because though I really like that you\'re trying, you still need to focus there.
Good job both you, I hope to see more from you both!!
# 5
Posted:
May 9 2006, 10:53 PM
BlackKrystal\'s comic kind of lost me, I\'m not entirely sure what happened in it.
I must say though, that this fight between the two of you is one of the most entertaining fights up at the moment, one of the few I could read without going into a coma, so congratulations on that!
Artwise, my biggest gripe applies to both, large undetailed spaces and lack of backgrounds. The shading was at times a bit too austere in Teal-belle\'s comic too, but it was still a good comic to make your entry into void with.
I must say though, that this fight between the two of you is one of the most entertaining fights up at the moment, one of the few I could read without going into a coma, so congratulations on that!
Artwise, my biggest gripe applies to both, large undetailed spaces and lack of backgrounds. The shading was at times a bit too austere in Teal-belle\'s comic too, but it was still a good comic to make your entry into void with.
# 4
Posted:
May 8 2006, 01:45 PM
Gah, uploaded, and not a minute too soon. I wanted to do a cover but I think my eyes probably would have burned out of their socket. Bit I guess that\'s what I get for procrastonating, eh?
Best of luck Teal, can\'t wait to see your battle >:3
Best of luck Teal, can\'t wait to see your battle >:3
# 3
Posted:
May 1 2006, 04:37 PM
Teal\'s BAAAAAAAAAAAAACK!! WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!! Rock Jarets sox!
# 2
Posted:
May 1 2006, 01:36 PM
Wow, I didnt realize you guys had so much time to do these, they better rock! Good luck you two, just one more week to go! *swig*
# 1
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 12:36 PM
Will do Teal
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BK, yours was really good, though the humor was a tad trite at the time. Seeing Jaret using his mad street skillz woulda been awesome. I noticed he hadn\'t used his street skillz in the battle against _arc_ either =/
Teal, excellent use of proportions and action! Really smooth! Sometimes the anatomy was a leeeetle off, but it was still impressive! Good job!