ORION- Welp =/
SHEN- The spot blacks doe! hot damn! This black and white style I think was a great move. Really gave us a cavernous and spooky atmosphere to pair with your sewers.
I'll be the first to admit that after your lovechild visual feast, this, shockingly was kinda wavering here and there by way of quality, but considering how much you packed onto your plate, this is a shockingly impressive turnout.
You're really finding your feet with story and narrative, and I think your biggest strength is when you have characters just talking. The slow doubt Greece plants in David while they're in the sewers was a fun read. By the end even I was like"yo, uncle murph....are you a bad dude??"
David Birch vs. Sovereign Greece
Critiques & Comments
# 6
Posted:
May 7 2018, 12:26 PM
# 5
Posted:
May 3 2018, 07:26 AM
OH-OH-OH-OH-RION:
Seconding yarn, I could sorta understand where things were going until the last page with Arena, making the conclusion hard to get. I'm guessing David Birch lead the police to Greece? I wish you had also blocked out the spot blacks (im guessing where you've placed the Xs) it would've helped make the comic feel more finished.
SHREK:
I can't believe you did all this in one week wtf. I need your work ethic. I really like this comic, both artwise and writing; I can tell that it was super rushed though, some of the inks are sloppy and I spotted a few typos here and there. The use of spotblacks is excellent but I think it would have really come together more if you used some more crosshatching. Overall, it's a super enjoyable read, especially the bit referencing Mario.
Seconding yarn, I could sorta understand where things were going until the last page with Arena, making the conclusion hard to get. I'm guessing David Birch lead the police to Greece? I wish you had also blocked out the spot blacks (im guessing where you've placed the Xs) it would've helped make the comic feel more finished.
SHREK:
I can't believe you did all this in one week wtf. I need your work ethic. I really like this comic, both artwise and writing; I can tell that it was super rushed though, some of the inks are sloppy and I spotted a few typos here and there. The use of spotblacks is excellent but I think it would have really come together more if you used some more crosshatching. Overall, it's a super enjoyable read, especially the bit referencing Mario.
# 4
Posted:
May 2 2018, 04:44 AM
Overall, i think this was a good battle. i did have some trouble following orion's, BUT only at the very end. I was on board for most of the comic, even without words, and that's pretty impressive cause i'm kinda dense. When Arena showed up, thats where i got lost.
Shen, dude. THIS black and white? You're really strong in this. I want to see more of this from you, personally. And that's some great writing! Good job!
Shen, dude. THIS black and white? You're really strong in this. I want to see more of this from you, personally. And that's some great writing! Good job!
# 3
Posted:
May 1 2018, 01:07 PM
Shen your comic was really fun and a pleasure to read thank you for this opportunity.
Despite the extension I still had a lot of trouble with this comic and very much bit off more then I could chew. Having dragged it out to a full month I wish I had given myself a better outcome but in the end I ended up with something less then standard passable. I hope next time with my next comic I will take a better approach.
Also, really liked the Uncle Murphy joke.
Despite the extension I still had a lot of trouble with this comic and very much bit off more then I could chew. Having dragged it out to a full month I wish I had given myself a better outcome but in the end I ended up with something less then standard passable. I hope next time with my next comic I will take a better approach.
Also, really liked the Uncle Murphy joke.
# 2
Posted:
Apr 2 2018, 01:12 PM
RETRIBUTION!
# 1
Posted:
Apr 2 2018, 12:55 PM
Retribution! >=D
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
3 weeks + 1
Ended:
May 7th, 2018
Votes Cast:
19
Page Views:
1715
Winner:
Animeshen
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