Intro Story / Hyena Girl
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# 5
Posted:
May 14 2014, 05:59 PM
So awesome! Nice style! I likethat you go away from mainstream art! beautiful! Wanna see more!
# 4
Posted:
May 14 2014, 02:26 PM
ooooh, i like these style choices, this is great to look at! I love how fluid and expressive the Mountain Queen is, and the Hyena and adorabe! I think you may want to be a liiiitle careful having a brown hyena on brown paper so that she doesnt get lost- the Mountain Queen definitely stands out way more. But I can definitely read your handwriting now that you made it into a font so thats great! Awesome intro, can't wait to see you battle!
# 3
Posted:
May 14 2014, 10:26 AM
Really interesting style with an odd tone. The characters are funny too. Lol, i like that the Hyena Is the straight man.
# 2
Posted:
May 13 2014, 09:08 PM
Oh.
Uh.
UMMM.
I want to fight you.
Your style is adorable and I dunno, I've never been a fan of handwritten dialogue, but just like it was said in the Incubator thread, it complements your drawings grandly.
Hmmng. Hyenas.
Uh.
UMMM.
I want to fight you.
Your style is adorable and I dunno, I've never been a fan of handwritten dialogue, but just like it was said in the Incubator thread, it complements your drawings grandly.
Hmmng. Hyenas.
# 1
Posted:
May 13 2014, 08:53 PM
I really love the style and designs you've got going and the simple colors work nicely to just make things look clear. Good job, can't wait to see more!
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Regarding the story: The lack of line variation does not help the impact of some parts of the comic (like the pulling of the hair). You kinda got it down on the top three panels of the same page though; although the lack of grey contrast doesn't really push the leaves forward enough to realize what was happening until the third panel. I think it's hard to tell the story on the first read just because of the lack of emphasis on the borders of the speech bubbles.
Hmm...other than that, good luck with your future battles!