Rofl, I'm just blown away with how much you got done in one week. I could say that there's a little bit of roughness in your linework and maybe a few spots of coloring, but that would just be nitpicking. I lost a little bit of entertainment because I don't know the characters very well and there seemed to be a lot of continuity leading into your comic. Other than that, though, all I can say is that this was AWESOME!
TODK: It's really too bad that you couldn't submit anything! Your work is awesome! I hope we get to see more from you one way or another!
Speed Resurrection Tournament 2015: Round 2 / Dr. Fabulous vs. Juliet Miller
Critiques & Comments
# 26
Posted:
Jun 30 2015, 07:48 PM
# 25
Posted:
Jun 30 2015, 06:35 AM
Thank you everyone for the nice comments and critique, I hope to perform better next round and try to improve on your expectations and address the problems you all stated.
Just a small word, I'm going to pause on my Round 2.5 right now. I had to do a lot this week and since my goal is to perform well and with high quality, I have no intent of uploading shoddy work or rushing on it. It'll be addressed in Round 3, so ideally there will be no confusion in the story or whatever.
Just a small word, I'm going to pause on my Round 2.5 right now. I had to do a lot this week and since my goal is to perform well and with high quality, I have no intent of uploading shoddy work or rushing on it. It'll be addressed in Round 3, so ideally there will be no confusion in the story or whatever.
# 24
Posted:
Jun 28 2015, 11:46 PM
ROLFQU- God, how do you even have the time in the day to do all of this? This plot gives me a lot of vibes from The Venture Bros "I Know Why the Caged Bird Kills" episode which is a very good plus for it (two men driving unexpectedly to "crazy" blonde lady at a hotel and one of the men is a man-child and the lady is super strong and wants revenge from the man-child character). I dig all your color choices and your inks are always great. I'm pretty sure we'll talk more on Skype about this comic and your future ones. Great job!!
# 23
Posted:
Jun 28 2015, 06:24 PM
TODK: Totally understandable. Plus, you got a webcomic to father now so at least that'll keep you on your heels for awhile!
Eric: I want to first say you've come a long way from when you first introduced Dr. Fabulous. Since round one you've worked really hard and put forth extra effort to make Dr Fab and Morty shine like the diamonds they really are.
In terms of critique, I've only noticed a few small bits that could be improved upon in later comics. Granted, some of these can be considered minor nitpicks;
- Page two in the panel where Juliet is carrying Cupcake. I think showing more of the outer part of her back and torso would help establish her anatomy more. Right now it kind of looks like she's all arms and leg here.
- After Juliet punches Morty in the face, there is no indication of injury on where she hit him. Drawing a bump on the side of his face or at least making a slight red or gray discoloration mark would've given a good idea on how hard of a hit it was. (I imagine that shit is going to leave a nice goose egg later.)
- If the very last page wasn't colored, I think I would've confused Eli with Juliet since they almost have the same facial structure and long hair style. The best solution to something like this would've been to shown Eli transforming in front of Dr Fabulous before Morty got to him.
- Your word bubbles are getting much better, but I also think that giving them a thin black outline would help them pop out more. You should also consider practicing/playing with kerning so it'll help with bubble real estate.
That said, this was beautifully done. The colors were dynamic and mood-setting, inks were varied and easy to read, but most of all the story was absolutely solid. I enjoyed how the prison was linked to Dr. Fabulous's previous investments along with Juliet's desire for vengeance.
You're cranking out some wonderful material here, so please continue putting forth your best! I look forward to round 3!
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Eric: I want to first say you've come a long way from when you first introduced Dr. Fabulous. Since round one you've worked really hard and put forth extra effort to make Dr Fab and Morty shine like the diamonds they really are.
In terms of critique, I've only noticed a few small bits that could be improved upon in later comics. Granted, some of these can be considered minor nitpicks;
- Page two in the panel where Juliet is carrying Cupcake. I think showing more of the outer part of her back and torso would help establish her anatomy more. Right now it kind of looks like she's all arms and leg here.
- After Juliet punches Morty in the face, there is no indication of injury on where she hit him. Drawing a bump on the side of his face or at least making a slight red or gray discoloration mark would've given a good idea on how hard of a hit it was. (I imagine that shit is going to leave a nice goose egg later.)
- If the very last page wasn't colored, I think I would've confused Eli with Juliet since they almost have the same facial structure and long hair style. The best solution to something like this would've been to shown Eli transforming in front of Dr Fabulous before Morty got to him.
- Your word bubbles are getting much better, but I also think that giving them a thin black outline would help them pop out more. You should also consider practicing/playing with kerning so it'll help with bubble real estate.
That said, this was beautifully done. The colors were dynamic and mood-setting, inks were varied and easy to read, but most of all the story was absolutely solid. I enjoyed how the prison was linked to Dr. Fabulous's previous investments along with Juliet's desire for vengeance.
You're cranking out some wonderful material here, so please continue putting forth your best! I look forward to round 3!
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# 22
Posted:
Jun 28 2015, 08:38 AM
ROFL: I feel I have to second Shen's comment on how fast you work on these pages. It's pretty impressive. Also thanks for the Nightmare Fuel Eli. I do appreciate when dicks look like that.
Looking forward for the next part of this. And your Round 3. Good luck!
TODK: A shame you couldn't do your part. You see, I am sort of a Newbie around VOID so I know nothing about all these dead characters and Juliet looked so cool! So, there's hoping you'll be around for MoTD or the next SRT. c:
Looking forward for the next part of this. And your Round 3. Good luck!
TODK: A shame you couldn't do your part. You see, I am sort of a Newbie around VOID so I know nothing about all these dead characters and Juliet looked so cool! So, there's hoping you'll be around for MoTD or the next SRT. c:
# 21
Posted:
Jun 27 2015, 11:26 PM
ROFL- Gosh where do I begin? I've been following your little SDT journey from your excitable story ideas, near all nighters, internet blackouts, and self imposed isolation to get this all done. Its the behind the scenes business we as readers never really get to see-which, when you boil it down is a huge sign of dedication to your craft and this tournament. Talk about a real labor of love!
Its great you took inspiration from your new opponent and used the space station like it totally was meant to fit seamlessly with Mexico. In a crazy way upon reading it makes perfect sense. That alone is a feat in storytelling and a sign we as voiders have seen some weird, shizz hahaha! As always the wee animations are always enjoyable and Dr. Fabulous' dialogue is the bees knees. I totally hear his flamboyant accented voice whenever I read his word bubbles and the slightly off English really helps with that. As or hiccups, I think Fabulous' backwards hand has been pointed out to death, but I did wanna touch on your own writing. Namely the song lyrics playing at the back of Fab and Morty's car on page 4 panel 1. I don't know if it was the size you were working with, but the end of that lyric gets a little muddled. It's especially evident next to all your crisp clean computer font. I'll also second the critique you got in the flashback with Juliets reflection on Fabs photograph. I honestly didnt really get what I was looking at unless I read through the comments. I do get going subtle with a lowered opacity Juliet wouldnt of really matched with your heavy ink style, so I'm none too certain how you would resolve that.
Not to sound all sadistic, but I am in love with your impact panels. The use of your colors on Morty getting popped in the face is just great. Not to mention the stomp of Juliets sneaker on his poor glasses. I'm a little bummed there was no space and/or time for a sight gag. Or maybe Morty doesnt really need those glasses? IDK. All in all though, another dazzling display, man. Whoever is up against you next better be shaking in their boots.
Its great you took inspiration from your new opponent and used the space station like it totally was meant to fit seamlessly with Mexico. In a crazy way upon reading it makes perfect sense. That alone is a feat in storytelling and a sign we as voiders have seen some weird, shizz hahaha! As always the wee animations are always enjoyable and Dr. Fabulous' dialogue is the bees knees. I totally hear his flamboyant accented voice whenever I read his word bubbles and the slightly off English really helps with that. As or hiccups, I think Fabulous' backwards hand has been pointed out to death, but I did wanna touch on your own writing. Namely the song lyrics playing at the back of Fab and Morty's car on page 4 panel 1. I don't know if it was the size you were working with, but the end of that lyric gets a little muddled. It's especially evident next to all your crisp clean computer font. I'll also second the critique you got in the flashback with Juliets reflection on Fabs photograph. I honestly didnt really get what I was looking at unless I read through the comments. I do get going subtle with a lowered opacity Juliet wouldnt of really matched with your heavy ink style, so I'm none too certain how you would resolve that.
Not to sound all sadistic, but I am in love with your impact panels. The use of your colors on Morty getting popped in the face is just great. Not to mention the stomp of Juliets sneaker on his poor glasses. I'm a little bummed there was no space and/or time for a sight gag. Or maybe Morty doesnt really need those glasses? IDK. All in all though, another dazzling display, man. Whoever is up against you next better be shaking in their boots.
# 20
Posted:
Jun 27 2015, 07:53 PM
man, the stuff you do in one week I dont think I could pull off in 3, Rofl! how do you do it? this is another great comic! though the story is a bit incomplete youve got a great and entertaining setup, with a horrifying ending! what a scary Eli! I look forward to seeing what you do from here in r3! Great job, man!
# 19
Posted:
Jun 25 2015, 01:38 PM
The One Dark Knight: Stuff's really good Eric!
Sorry for the default guys. I went to Korea for three nights and had to go drink with my work (Japanese job) so there was absolutely no way in hell I was finishing anything. I regret nothing. I watched Mad Max.
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Mad Max in Korean?
# 18
Posted:
Jun 25 2015, 12:30 AM
Stuff's really good Eric!
Sorry for the default guys. I went to Korea for three nights and had to go drink with my work (Japanese job) so there was absolutely no way in hell I was finishing anything. I regret nothing. I watched Mad Max.
Sorry for the default guys. I went to Korea for three nights and had to go drink with my work (Japanese job) so there was absolutely no way in hell I was finishing anything. I regret nothing. I watched Mad Max.
# 17
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 07:23 PM
RoflQu, I am in awe that you manage to crank out this many pages with such quality in a week. Your writing here is really enjoyable too. Hope to see more from you next week!
# 16
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 06:27 PM
ROFLQU, you're 2 for 2, and upping the ante. I was super disappointed to see a no-show from Dark Knight, but your comic gave me all the Juliet Miller goodness I could hope for. Just awesome.
# 15
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 05:58 PM
Yeah not much Ican say, I love how you lead the eye in the first panel.
nice gif, hope to see more.
nice gif, hope to see more.
# 14
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 05:51 PM
justarhymes: That backwards hand is fucking with my mind, man.
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Dr. Fabulous had complained of a sore hand, so I got a hand-double to step in for that scene. Unfortunately, he put in the wrong arm in the hole.
I totally didn't notice it when making the thing, that's pretty funny though.
Also, yes, that's Eli.
# 13
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 05:47 PM
That backwards hand is fucking with my mind, man.
# 12
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 04:20 PM
Man Rofl the fact that you've churned out two really full, complete, coloured comics 2 rounds straight so far is pretty nuts. I think I definitely liked this comic more than the first round though I am confused by the ending if it is a new character or not (tho looking in the tags I guess its Eli? Its just not clear since he looks so similar to Juliet).
Anyway interested in seeing where you go next and the dick mouth part on the monster made me laugh.
Anyway interested in seeing where you go next and the dick mouth part on the monster made me laugh.
# 11
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 03:55 PM
not bad at all! the art is very consistant throughout which is nice. I'm not a fan of the font you're using though, and while not bad, the speech bubbles don't seem to mesh well with the art, if that makes sense. they definitely feel like another layer on top, maybe due to lack of outline. the flashback to the fabulous portrait was hard to read at first too, it took me a while to parse what was going on with the reflection. anyway this is basically all nitpicky stuff so good job! see you next round fella!
# 10
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 12:55 PM
@roflqu: I have little complaints with these comics. Overall I am very pleased with Fabulous's resurrection thus far. Great opening, foreshadowing, action- what can else can be said? Fabulous's hand is backwards though 5th page, 1st panel. So there's that.
# 9
Posted:
Jun 24 2015, 09:26 AM
As always, I'm enthused to hear your critiques, complaints, compliments, and comments. This was a fun round and while it's too bad Tom had to default, I'm feeling pretty good about this comic.
EDIT: Pages fixed, thanks guys!
EDIT: Pages fixed, thanks guys!
# 8
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 12:42 PM
Oh man Fabulous gay space opera with blood and guts. BRING IT ONN
# 7
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 11:57 AM
WHOAAA INTENSE!
# 6
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 10:14 AM
FABULOUS IS A MILLER KILLER
# 5
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 09:22 AM
that said your ass is mine
# 4
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 09:22 AM
advance warning I'm going to korea for 3 days this weekend results may vary
# 3
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 09:09 AM
I AM GOING TO JULIENNE JULIET MILLER AND TOAST TOM
# 2
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 08:08 AM
lol
# 1
Posted:
Jun 16 2015, 08:00 AM
ahahaha, you're both fucked
Speed Resurrection Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jun 30th, 2015
Votes Cast:
26
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2407
Winner:
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