Hiemie: Amazing. It's hard to give any critique here. Not that you're working on some impossible level, but because you've got a very good hold on what makes your stuff work. Your posing and people were honestly better than ever in this comic. The expressions, the movements, everything just worked here. Of course, it's funny, but you deserve to know more than that. You deserve to know that I can't say that this is your best effort, but it's without a doubt one of your best and a new favorite of mine. If this critique seems short compared to others, it's only because I can hardly find fault with everything you already know or do. Fantastic work.

Nachte: This is a tremendous effort and it really sells the space feeling well. Again, it's hard to comment against anything here, everything feels great. I think maybe the worst/only criticism I can give here is that it feels like we didn't get enough interaction between the two characters? It wasn't like they didn't meet at all or whatever, but I kind of wish they got to talk more than they did. It's hard to deny it, but maybe some more hints that Mr. Sun was explosive or soon to be explosive? I also am not sure why he did what he did, I guess I would have liked dialogue here, too. Just like Hiemie, I can hardly find fault in my evaluation of your work and so this critique isn't super long. All in all, fantastic work.

Both of you, just fantastic comics.

HIEMIE- Omigosh back and with hilarious vengeance.
I'll be honest, I know little of Nachte's character, but if he's anything like he is in your comic, then he's my new favorite fighter. I'll admit, your half was less action packed, but you more than made up for it in dialogue and character interaction. I couldn't get enough of Mr. Sun just popping up from hell via elevator. And leader just vogue-ing whenever he reminded people he just turned 18 is just glorious. That bitchhole though, DAT BITCH HOLE


NACHTE- So danged pretty. I love the greyscale with subtle gradation of colors. It really makes those moments where you go for full color intensity on the little things like eye gleams or alarms that much more impactful. You went for a full scale epic right out the gate which I think really packs a punch. Also can I just say, your Mr. Sun SO EFFIN CUTE. I can't get over how you drew him. Adorably cranky even, haha! Akso the reveal at the end- I don't wanna spoil it for those reading critique before the comic (like ,really who does that?), but that was pretty cool. Really, I have nothing else for you but the contentment of a reader who just enjoyed a good comic. You should be proud.

Both your comics appealed to very specific things for me, and while I wanna root for my homeboy, this is definitely a conflicting vote. Still, best of luck to you both!

Hiemie: I look forward to seeing you abuse one of my characters some day.

Nachte:  I really dig the color palette here, and I love the tone of your comic.  I'll echo Qyzex though, whatever you're doing to make your pages all blurry is not easy on the eyes.

Hiemie,
All the body langiuage and interaction is great.
I know the bendy, unlevel borders do sort of play to your chaotic anarchic feel that makes your work so distinct, so I'm a bit torn up as to whether you should tidy it all up a bit.
Also, I see you've done your work traditionally and then probably amped the saturation up somewhat. I think to make the characters more distinct from the backgrounds you could drop the saturation of some of the more distant elements. This may make it feel more of a consistent 'real' world. It will be quite a process to do through photoshop though so whatever you feel.

It was really fun!


Naachte,
I understand the harsh time limit and what you have achieved in such a short space of time is incredible. Given that you HAVE achieved so much I would say you can afford to split your time up rather differently.

I would aim on lowering your page count and spending more time really thumbnailing out something that is clearer, because the storytelling was a bit confusing at times.
In the first 7 pages it was often hard to tell who was speaking, and at first it was hard to tell who the 'thought boxes' or whatever you call them were coming from.
It wasn't bad, AT ALL, its just it didn't come all together in the first read through. A lot of comics don't, but I just think it will improve yours overall.

Really think about the dummies like me!

Either way the story was really engaging, I'm gonna go and check out your other stuff.

Joe.

Oof, this is tough. Apples and Oranges.

Hiemie: You fuck. I laughed really hard at this comic. There's not much to say about anything that needs to be fixed. Maybe just more solid blacks.

nachte: Ashley!   Good job on keeping the quality up all the way through! I will say, though, sometimes I had to look away or blink, because it looked like i was trying to look at something meant to be 3d, without 3d glasses. It was a nice plot, and a fun read

Uploaded and done!! Making sixtem go take me to buy hummus as reward.

I THINK I just uploaded my comic. I'm done, if there's problems, get a hold of me.

Have fun, fuckers, haha.

This is some high octane bullshit.

This is gonna be a good one! Can't wait! Good luck!

Mr. Sun goes to Prison.