The monochromatic color scheme is working in your favor here, it does a much better job of conveying the mood, but I think you could push the colors more.. The last page also should have more purple on Soldat's skin I think, since to give her that solid white all over is going to diminish the impacts of your lightest areas, when she's already the highest brightness you can go. Also, I think you used too much of the 'lightest red' in spots and you could have pushed the reds more in spots. Just keep that in mind.
Page 2 has some of the best faces I've seen from you, ever. If you can overcome your size issues, you'd have no problems whatsoever. However, keep watch on the hands. You don't want to keep them the same finger length, but I only saw one instance of this on the first page, but a lot of times the hands were on the small size. You want to be generous with your hand proportions. Also, make sure you keep your line widths varied up, a flat size isn't good with the style you're going with right now.
I like the start of this story and I'm excited to see your All-Together Now! entry.
Red Rabbit Returns / Red Rabbit
Critiques & Comments
# 14
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Oct 19 2010, 04:16 PM
# 13
Posted:
Oct 19 2010, 10:10 AM
Will this is coming along really nicely, you've definitely improved
# 12
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Oct 18 2010, 08:31 PM
Super-sexcited about the last page reveal. I think you've really developed your style, Will, and the colors and highlights are working well for you. Please give us more!
# 11
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Oct 18 2010, 06:39 PM
Glad to hear it Will, well not that you've been going through stuff, but that you're sticking with comics
# 10
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Oct 18 2010, 04:37 PM
So I've had the whole day to think and I was a tad bit hasty. I just have some family issues to deal with and I have to sort out my priorities. So while I've found the root of my problem(s) and I'm a bit calmer about it now, it doesn't mean they've disappeared. So I am taking a tentative break to sort myself out, problem solve, and figure out my priorities. You know, I'll always think I'm garbage as far as it comes to drawing but one step at a time. I can't promise that I'll be able to hand something in for the first round of ATN, but I'll see where I stand in a week.
# 9
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Oct 18 2010, 11:28 AM
Yeah Will the colour really added some extra oomph to the artwork there dude !
I would comment more but I gotta run to class now!
I would comment more but I gotta run to class now!
# 8
Posted:
Oct 18 2010, 11:21 AM
Okay Will what's all this crap about you saying you can't do comics? This looked very nice! It looks like you're getting a lot more comfortable with your inking and I think doing something in color really brought a lot to your work. One thing that would have helped is on page 2 showing her using the retina scanner since it took me a second to get.
I don't really know the whole story behind why you wanted to give up on comics but if it's what I think it is remember this:
There is nothing anyone can say to you that is worth giving up comics for.
If you're stopping because you in your heart just don't want to draw them, I can't stop you from quitting. But if it's because someone said something to you, it's just not worth it. Words are only as powerful as you allow them to be.
I don't really know the whole story behind why you wanted to give up on comics but if it's what I think it is remember this:
There is nothing anyone can say to you that is worth giving up comics for.
If you're stopping because you in your heart just don't want to draw them, I can't stop you from quitting. But if it's because someone said something to you, it's just not worth it. Words are only as powerful as you allow them to be.
# 7
Posted:
Oct 17 2010, 10:09 PM
I'm done.
# 6
Posted:
Oct 15 2010, 07:16 AM
Ooh! I'll be glad to see this!
# 5
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Oct 13 2010, 10:53 PM
AHH THE RABBITS ARE ALL RED AND RETURNING. Can't wait to see this bro
# 4
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Oct 13 2010, 09:40 PM
yay!
# 3
Posted:
Oct 13 2010, 08:03 PM
gassssppppp!!!!
# 2
Posted:
Oct 13 2010, 07:24 PM
Oh man! An All-Together Now! prequel? How exciting!
# 1
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Oct 13 2010, 05:17 PM
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