I'm really into this start, I think you've got a great set up and I love that she's just thinking about this stuff in her head instead of actually doing it when she stabs her ex-boyfriend (I imagine). You've gotten a lot of great comments, but my main issues are actually your first page. It's set up okay, but this dude that walks up to her in the 2nd, 3rd, 4th, and 5th panels just stares out at the street and isn't turning to face her at all until the 'exorcist' page. I feel like you should rework some of these panels to show him walking to her or staring at her before looking at her to talk. Maybe even if he had hopped up on the bricks next to her or whatever to talk, it would have been more natural, but it just looks very awkward in terms of body language done.
Your art looks real great based on that design sheet, so I hope you don't make your pages weaker by not addressing that in some way. It's okay if he turns around or looks on the 'where are your parents/what are you looking at pages', but he should be looking at her in the other pages. Maybe a different angle entirely would work better, if you wanna keep the single camera effect you're working with, but I think you should consider doing something about that simple body language/posing issue. Overall, this is great start, so I hope to see you do more work on it.
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Colbitzer
@ 3:32 PM Apr 17th