@kent: What a great advancement on upheaval continuum! Without sounding too biased-- i love how you integrated the death of Jones Jr to affect the competitive tension between Blonde and Jones Sr. while maintaining the storyline you already had going since your previous battle- even including Hiemium as a hot topic within Void politics. I'm particularly impressed with your ability to write entertaining drama with comedy while keeping it serious enough to be compelling.
Amazing panel work, though the radial panels that move counter-clockwise is something that confused me in the 3rd page. You pulled it off much better in the 10th page with "thinner" panels that have slightly less dramatic angles to their boxes. I think with radial panels, it becomes harder to read it in the proper sequence once you include the "last" panel of the sequence, as it goes downwards in a 90' degree drop, confusing readers, since the eyes want to go both downwards and to the side simultaneously. I think the reading of the sequence would be less confusing if you eliminated that 90' degree angle of the last radial panel of the sequence. The 6th page was a bit bland in comparison to your other compositions. Other than that, good job!
@LeFred: I will always applaud your sense of humor and creative approaches to engaging with the reader. In this comic, the use of streaming clips, television sets and newspapers gave me a sense of passive participation within the election storyline- but the approach also gave me weird feelings of observing myself as a consumer of mass media, as an ingestor of political propaganda. I think i can attribute this out-of-body experience by your use of using different kinds of television brands, thus giving the impression of participating as a plurality of viewers in their own space, rather than any specific observer, thus you become the "mass". The humor was geared towards satirizing publicity tactics one might find in a kickstarter or in a youtube channel. Everything debated is trivial, trite and over the meaning of phrases and words- there is lack of substance in this politically correct arena.
I think your hand-writing leaves a lot to be desired however. Other than that, i really love this comic and found no other issues from your method. Great work!
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# 9
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Apr 25 2014, 07:08 PM
# 8
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Apr 25 2014, 03:21 PM
Great read both of ya, here are my nitpicks:
Kent: I feel like Lady Luck's emotional state shifted too quickly from the beginning of the conversation to the next. It might just be my interpretation of what I've seen le Fred write but she doesn't seem the type to show when she's upset like that. Also for some reason I really don't like this cliffhanger, but it's probably because I want MORE.
Le Fred: I'm not digging the hand writing, I feel like it was hard to read at first and in the end I kinda got sick of it. I can't remember if you do your own handwriting like this for each comic before, maybe it's worn out its welcome for me the way Arena's handwriting text did for other readers. Also the story feels really small-scale; outside of laying down the positions of each candidate, nothing else happens.
Not sure why neither of you decided to have your comic end with an elected official, as that's kinda what it felt like it was hyping with your title and all. Can't wait to see how either story ends in later comics though.
Still a great read from both~
Kent: I feel like Lady Luck's emotional state shifted too quickly from the beginning of the conversation to the next. It might just be my interpretation of what I've seen le Fred write but she doesn't seem the type to show when she's upset like that. Also for some reason I really don't like this cliffhanger, but it's probably because I want MORE.
Le Fred: I'm not digging the hand writing, I feel like it was hard to read at first and in the end I kinda got sick of it. I can't remember if you do your own handwriting like this for each comic before, maybe it's worn out its welcome for me the way Arena's handwriting text did for other readers. Also the story feels really small-scale; outside of laying down the positions of each candidate, nothing else happens.
Not sure why neither of you decided to have your comic end with an elected official, as that's kinda what it felt like it was hyping with your title and all. Can't wait to see how either story ends in later comics though.
Still a great read from both~
# 7
Posted:
Apr 25 2014, 02:05 PM
Good reads for both of em =) I really like that with Le Fred's had different media outlets for the panels 8D That was awesome!
# 6
Posted:
Apr 25 2014, 09:28 AM
FUCK I fucked up the you're/your in the last page -- confiscate my Writing degree :/
I likewise wish I had done more
LE FRED YOU BEAUTIFUL ELF ~ I loved your take on Jane! I like how we both happened to add a third candidate with multiple limbs/tentacles I will surely use the Octopus God in the future. Also I forgot to cameo Viv's ass--I am shame.
I likewise wish I had done more
LE FRED YOU BEAUTIFUL ELF ~ I loved your take on Jane! I like how we both happened to add a third candidate with multiple limbs/tentacles I will surely use the Octopus God in the future. Also I forgot to cameo Viv's ass--I am shame.
# 5
Posted:
Apr 25 2014, 09:08 AM
Kent, you rock me hard!
I really wish I'd done more.
I really wish I'd done more.
# 4
Posted:
Mar 27 2014, 05:09 PM
OOOOOOOHH YEAAAAAAAH
# 3
Posted:
Mar 27 2014, 04:37 PM
ooooooOOOOO can't waiiiiiiit, get some stuff going for void city!
# 2
Posted:
Mar 27 2014, 02:04 PM
BOSS.
# 1
Posted:
Mar 27 2014, 01:47 PM
Let's get political, baby!
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Kent: I think everyone loved the ending as much as I did. I'd really enjoy if you add her secret identity outfit to your character design sheet though, it would be fun to use some day. I cant wait for the next installment of meta-Jane blonde!
LeFred: You drew a lot of television screens. A lot of the panels go from medium/close up and then to far, and back and forth. might want to make it less consistent, so it won't give off such a hypnotic feeling.