Heathen, i couldn't tell what the heck was going on the whole time, but i LOVED it. I like the drawings and experimentalness a LOT.

Bent one, your pencil renderings were so nice!

and it was so great to see two artists who shook hands and said 'lets do some stuff they tell you not to do, but at the same time so neither of us get in trouble.'

then you both banged out such visually interesting stories. very inspiring!

“The NVCPD extends it’s condolences to the families of all the brave men and women of our SWAT unit who gave their lives in this opperation. A great evil have been taken off the streets of our city.”

Good fight, Bent! That 3-panel sequence on page 1 is just sick, man, grats on the win.

Next we meet, I’ll bring my A-game. These bars won’t hold me for long.

This has been the closest battle I have ever seen on the site, voting wise. I just want to thank everyone for the critiques and comments even though both of us didn’t deliver on what our original visions were for this battle. I learned a lot about time management and believing in yourself. Stay tuned for the future adventures of The Beast...

Bent:  Nice pencils, though it took me another read to figure out what Beast was doing to Smile (skinning half his arm and face off).

Heathen:  May the 4th wall rest in peace.  That was way too funny.

Bent: You're pencils are amazing and also the scar you gave Smile was super brutal and awesome. In terms of clarity the the panel at bottom 2 is a bit confusiong and i'm not sure how it got from there to panel 3 but if it was change to something showing more clarity it would make the whole comic more smooth. Overall really good for the limited time you had.

Heathen: This is one of my favorite unfinished comics I have seen on void. I love that you were able to adapt and when you realized you didn't have time for your original plan you went with a completly fun off the rails idea. I gave a bunch of creativity for this since most people would just continue with their idea or even prefer the idea of defaulting than submitting something incomplete. but you changed your idea and worked with it to make your unfinished comic feel more complete in a sense, which is also why I enjoyed it a bunch.

Oh, and without going fully into a whole “this is the comic I had intended to make but didn’t” spiel, I would like to note that the “halo” Saint refers to is a head bomb. The original idea was that the beast of Void brings Vilelinko to Saint Corp, they strap him with a bomb and make him work for them. Something, something, mistake.

Honestly the Beast is so much fun to draw, I won’t rule out a rematch down the line where I can do good on the plot I had for this battle.

Addressing Desi’s confusion on my first (second) page, just in case anyone else is scratching their head, I replaced all the dialogue with bullshit comedic dialogue at the last minute because when I went to letter the page, I realized I had made the panels too small to comfortably fit the dialogue I had written. The only page that has the original dialog on it is page 2 (3) in the Saint Corp medical bay.

Thanks to those who have taken the time and energy to write up critiques. I know it’s hard to really critique an unfinished comic, or one that goes this far off the rails, as the case may be, but I welcome everyone to go hard on the two pages here that contain story, especially page 1 (2). If that sequence isn’t clear without having to read the dialogue, I’d love to know what doesn’t work about it, I’m really trying to improve my storytelling clarity and layouts the most.

TheBentOne:
Okay this is an amazing comic, especially for two days. I will agree with others that its a bit of a mess, but despite that I found it immensely well made. One thing I do wonder is whaaaat the heck happened in page 3. So looking up your chara more I see his arm does things, but there's barely any clarity here on what the heck just happened, and this part left me confused and I keep looking at it unsure what to think. Alongside this I have no clue how this affected Smile in a way to become that disfigured but that may be because I have no clue what exactly is wrong with him, else than parts of his body are super disfigured. Your first two pages are the strongest in my eyes, but overall this comic is very entertaining, and I love how you portrayed your opponent, he looks so cool in your comic, and overall this comic was neato

Heathen:

Haha, I'm just gonna say I didn't expect this, i mean I expected the rednose because weeeeeeell lemme just say thumbnails are your friend when you have such a notable surprise in your comic. I'm gonna echo Hellis and say that yeah the cover is definitely the most impressive part of this comic which is kinda sad to say. Imma start with I have ZERO clue what happened on the first page (or shall I say second page cuz there's a comic cover) I just assumed this was comic making advice but I have literally no clue. After that however i find it great how you just descended into complete and utter madness with a very meta comic, I don't think Smile is the character I expected this from. Looking back at your last Smile comic on Void, Imma just say even though this is super rough you can see amazing amounts of improvement so kudos, man. The way you drew your characters is amazing, though I only wish there were some backgrounds to highlight this. All in all, good job, and also if you win, Beast of Void may end up being Beast of Rudolph the Red-Nosed Reindeer. XD


Good job both of ya!

Heathen: That cover is beyond dope. Unfortunately, I have to wonder if you had spent less time on a cover, and more time on a more clean and finished comic, I would have given you the edge here. Your first page is pretty dope, the use of spotblacks lends it a heavy, oldschool feel. The second page has a good, interesting flow. Third follows recently well.But then I ma just lost, and the pace is essentially conveying nothing with the end being that of a clown nose?

Beast: I would have loved to see this more clear and easy to read. What i see I like though, and I enjoed the cutaway to smiles in a prison cell. A neat little comic,.

I do these thumbnails all in the same small page layout. I find that working at this size gives me good control over the gesture and composition. I can do the same thing digitally, of course, but I find that doing the thumbs traditionally keeps me focused on the size and the use of space of the page.

I agree that this needed extra panels, or even 2 additional pages to fully tell the story. It would go like this:

-Page 1.5: Beast waiting outside warehouse. Barcus on coms with him. Internal infrared spectrum vision in Beast’s visor showing The Smile standing over the dead bodies. Beast drops in through the skylight.

-Page 3.5: Smile is laying on the ground with a ruined arm. Beast shrinks back down. Barcus stands over him as he slowely gets back up. NVCPD medics treating Smile. Helecopter back to HQ.

I can tell you I’ve learned a good lesson about what my capabilities are in a pinch, and I think I can apply that to my next battle.

Fuck yeah, Bent. I know we both ran into some production problems on this one, but you knocked out a killer little quickie here! Unless the wind shifts, I will bear that scar with pride.

Proud a’ you, boy.

Got my pages submitted. Hoo boy, this might have been the one month of the entire year I should not have done a comic. I only had the weekend to work on this. Before you read it, please know it is supposed to be a silent comic.

I look forward to my new scar.

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