stylo- the way you do comics leads to really solid foundations even when in better foundations. Make sure to take care of yourself and don't let this weigh you down
sean: your inks and backgrounds are amazing and your inks are great. I do also like how you build up the relationship between the two characters. I will say the while the final dialogue is good i think it needed a bit more flavor, right now i don't feel like it has enough of Harvey's individual voice in it, since he's also drunk at this point I would imagine there being some mess ups in words and stuff but i don't have much drunk experience and he could just be buzzed. Still a realy solid comic overall.
Bootcamp Round Robin: Set 2 / Croco vs. Harvey
Critiques & Comments
# 8
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Jun 1 2019, 06:01 PM
# 7
Posted:
May 31 2019, 07:04 PM
Stylo- I love the mood your comic has- the dark colors are great and I always love seeing your painterly style. I hope you’re feeling better!!
Astrosean- Your inks are fantastic, especially on that first page- it feels populated and dense but still focused, it just looks great! I do agree with g.lo that there could be some more transition at the beginning of the second page, and transitions right before the final page, which does feel a bit sudden. I can’t think of much else to add on though, this is pretty solid and I love that bar interior!
Astrosean- Your inks are fantastic, especially on that first page- it feels populated and dense but still focused, it just looks great! I do agree with g.lo that there could be some more transition at the beginning of the second page, and transitions right before the final page, which does feel a bit sudden. I can’t think of much else to add on though, this is pretty solid and I love that bar interior!
# 6
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May 30 2019, 12:03 AM
Stylo: Really wish we'd gotten to see this finished, cuz man I bet it would've been badass. Even at the stage it's at now, there's already an intense feeling of atmosphere and emotion that's coming through. Also, man. Croco looks badass in a lot of these panels, with the lighting and everything.
Astro: Man that is a killer first page! so much going on, yet somehow it's not overwhelming or confusing. Just a lot of small details that make you kinda just want to stare for a while to pick out all the details. I do wish the same level of detail had carried through all the way to the end; it does crop up in a couple of panels, but I feel like the very last panel, on the last page, could use that same level of detail as a sort of bookend. Also, I feel like Harvey kinda went from zero to 100 real quick there; a bit more buildup would've made Harvey's final words have a lot more impact. As is, even though I do love that final page, it does kind of feel like it comes out of left field. Still, great comic overall!
Astro: Man that is a killer first page! so much going on, yet somehow it's not overwhelming or confusing. Just a lot of small details that make you kinda just want to stare for a while to pick out all the details. I do wish the same level of detail had carried through all the way to the end; it does crop up in a couple of panels, but I feel like the very last panel, on the last page, could use that same level of detail as a sort of bookend. Also, I feel like Harvey kinda went from zero to 100 real quick there; a bit more buildup would've made Harvey's final words have a lot more impact. As is, even though I do love that final page, it does kind of feel like it comes out of left field. Still, great comic overall!
# 5
Posted:
May 28 2019, 08:31 AM
Croco:
Although this isn't finished, it's really cool to see the beginnings of how you build up shapes and render things. I admire your painterly approach! I agree with Astro, the way you painted the explosion was awesome and I loved the light fallout!
Astro:
The details of your inks are GORGEOUS. I love all the texturing inside the bar and especially on the first page in the outside environment. I think a teeny weeny transition of Croco noticing Harvey in the bar before plopping down next to him would have been nice. I definitely feel where Harvey is coming from tho - there is a major need to be drunk when the mayor of your town is a legitimate murderer and so are many of the city's inhabitants. I would have liked to have seen their encounter play out a little longer- obviously Harv has a LOT of pent up emotion that could lead to disaster!
Either way, great job working through these deadlines!
Although this isn't finished, it's really cool to see the beginnings of how you build up shapes and render things. I admire your painterly approach! I agree with Astro, the way you painted the explosion was awesome and I loved the light fallout!
Astro:
The details of your inks are GORGEOUS. I love all the texturing inside the bar and especially on the first page in the outside environment. I think a teeny weeny transition of Croco noticing Harvey in the bar before plopping down next to him would have been nice. I definitely feel where Harvey is coming from tho - there is a major need to be drunk when the mayor of your town is a legitimate murderer and so are many of the city's inhabitants. I would have liked to have seen their encounter play out a little longer- obviously Harv has a LOT of pent up emotion that could lead to disaster!
Either way, great job working through these deadlines!
# 4
Posted:
May 27 2019, 08:54 AM
Stylo, my dude, I am so glad I got to battle you again and this time my dumb ass didn't default. I think your side of this battle is great, its a shame it's unfinished, but sometimes life gets the best of you and that's totally okay! I really appreciate what you did submit! Your painters style is so unique for comics and I really can't wait for your next comic! That painted explosion was absolutely amazing.
# 3
Posted:
May 26 2019, 01:27 PM
Croco Crocodile Rock: You got a good hand on blocking out your scenes, and you're one of a few artists I see on this site who approach their visuals through painting technique--Monday being a notable other.
Harvey Here Comes the Boom: That last page is like a punch in the gut and I felt it. Way to call me out for any future characters I have in the wings, haha. But he has a point, the mayor of Void is an Actual Real Life Criminal and the common people gotta do something to improve their quality of life. Plant a community garden. Volunteer at your local shelter. Donate food to banks, that sort of thing.
But that's kind of ironic reading this come out the mouth of a wanted terrorist, even if his crimes are by accident.
Harvey Here Comes the Boom: That last page is like a punch in the gut and I felt it. Way to call me out for any future characters I have in the wings, haha. But he has a point, the mayor of Void is an Actual Real Life Criminal and the common people gotta do something to improve their quality of life. Plant a community garden. Volunteer at your local shelter. Donate food to banks, that sort of thing.
But that's kind of ironic reading this come out the mouth of a wanted terrorist, even if his crimes are by accident.
# 2
Posted:
May 12 2019, 04:22 PM
GET EM HARV! CROC HIS SOCKS, CROCO!
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May 12 2019, 01:12 PM
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