Kizuato: Pff. Happy sun . You're getting there with visibility. You're also varying the line weight a little, which is good. I think you can work on that some more.
Tirie, you have the beginnings of some really cool inks there (too bad you couldn't get to doing more!), but those images... They're photos, aren't they? I guess you weren't able to get to a scanner in time or get good lighting for your photos? You know, the mobile versions of Medibang Paint have tools for processing photographed artwork. Maybe look into that if your phone can handle it.
2016 Invitational: Round 2 / Tod Mutel vs. Kepi
Critiques & Comments
# 11
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Jul 14 2016, 03:28 PM
# 10
Posted:
Jul 14 2016, 02:15 PM
Kizuato - I'd love to see you ink your next comic. It will definitely make it pop and draw more attention to details. I also wanna see a couple more interesting perspectives and fun backgrounds. Also, putting some negative space between your panels will help from keeping your comic jumbled up and busy! Good work and I can't wait to read more!
Tirie - It's a shame you couldn't finish this, but I love the tradition work! I hope to see more from you in the future!
Tirie - It's a shame you couldn't finish this, but I love the tradition work! I hope to see more from you in the future!
# 9
Posted:
Jul 13 2016, 04:19 PM
as for the unfinished look i did this in 4 hours after i woke up that morning because i thought my trip to wisconsin was within the week. I know now that i head off tomorrow morning. one of these matches i will eventually get it right
# 8
Posted:
Jul 13 2016, 04:16 PM
oh btw Tod thought Kepi was looking for one of his weapons of mass destruction
# 7
Posted:
Jul 13 2016, 02:25 PM
Hmm both of these are fairly incomplete-looking and had some serious scanning issues. If you need assistance getting your scans to look better don't hesitate to ask any of us, even us full-digital artists have had to work with scanning back in the day so we know a thing or two about the right settings and polishing needed to get your lines looking nicer.
Don't give up, try again!
Don't give up, try again!
# 6
Posted:
Jul 13 2016, 02:05 PM
Pretty good, it's a shame you couldn't finish it. I'm glad you remembered Tod covers his face like that, though I doubt he would go after someone without being provoked...
# 5
Posted:
Jul 12 2016, 10:18 PM
I submitted! But it alas it was unfinished... life happened as it always does, I plan on finishing this though!
# 4
Posted:
Jul 10 2016, 01:28 PM
...so plans have changed and I won't have to go to wisconsin until about a week from now...after reading my comic through I realise that an important point wasn't explained, I might add one more page
# 3
Posted:
Jul 7 2016, 11:46 AM
Kizuato: after spending 4 straight hours on it I have it drawn and inked so I wont have to do it while in Wisconsin
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Jeebus! that's impressive, I'm still thumbnailing XD I guess I better get on it then... *scrurries off*
# 2
Posted:
Jul 7 2016, 09:08 AM
after spending 4 straight hours on it I have it drawn and inked so I wont have to do it while in Wisconsin
# 1
Posted:
Jul 6 2016, 12:26 PM
This is gonna be a fun match up
Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jul 19th, 2016
Votes Cast:
32
Page Views:
1788
Winner:
Kizuato
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I would normally separate these critiques, but you two shared similar drawbacks. There wasn't much polish to these comics (due to time constraints of course), but also I was having a time with the legibility on both sides. I liked the momentum of events Kizuato had going, but I found it harder and harder to follow the smaller the text got panel, to panel. Don't be afraid to let your scenes breathe and dedicate page to only four of five panels. That first page alone could've been a great establishing shot of the junkyard but you rammed it into such a small square.
Tirie, you definitely took full advantage of the space by making your panels big and building that suspense with intense blacks and shadows on your first page, but where I struggled was there you ran outta time and yourp ages turned pencil.