It seems like you guys make a good team in terms of storytelling and art.  But there's a few things here.  You guys avoid backgrounds a lot.  Not entirely but when they're missing it's noticeable.  To be fair, not a lot of porny comics really concentrate on something like background but to compensate they go for really dynamic angles and poses especially during the sex scenes.  It's when you should really bump up your compositions and then the lack of backgrounds would be an afterthought.  I'm also not a fan of those 'pages' where it's Kao5 telling the story.   There's no reason why they need to be standalone like that and could easily be incorporated as part of the pages.  Especially because they don't add anything visually interesting and the graphic design side of it leaves some to be desired.  

Such hardcore comics might not be popular on Void but I appreciate their existence as something to add diversity to the sort of comics made here.  That said if you're going to make more of this sort of content then keep hammering out the basics.

hoo boy, this isnt usually my, ah, particular cup of tea lol but you guys do collab well together! They really are a cute pair. I enjoyed Harlow exploring more and more of his, hmm, "personal" side and i really liked the ending where Kao5 is so utterly unused to the idea of an actual date he basically needs it dictionary defined lol. I feel like theres more creative ways you could have done the title card text to incorporate it into the art itself, even just as a narration box, it didnt seem to need an entire page to itself. As for the story, i understand a sexy comic is sometimes just that but I feel like more could have been done with it. For example, as Harlow gets more comfortable in bed, does he get bolder in any other aspects of his life? Does Kao5 even WANT to go on a date? Does he HAVE affection for Harlow, or is Harlow just another high priority client, like he made it sound like at the start of the comic? How does Harlow change Kao5? Lastly, Just to mix it up, I think sometime I'd love to see a Kao5 comic where he does more than fuck, lol. He needs more emotional or personal growth besides the satisfaction he brings to other characters. But cute comic, it looks like you guys had fun making this! Cheers on finishing!

ok i just overflew this so i could give a fair vote for the actual content isn´t for me.

Critique wise its a nice setup i guess? I really like the twist in the end and the really convincing emotional distraught. I think the overall setup could have been better. This were 10 pages of content and 10+ text lines you could have included into the pages if you experimented a little. I must admit expecting 20 pages and getting only 10 is a little of a let down.

The art is overall clean enough. My primary advice would be to get in some practice on facial anatomy and expressiveness. The text delivers enough emotion but the drawings dont support them equally sadly.

Its good you finished this in the end.

this collab has been in the works for around a year a lot of the work on it is slightly old but we finally got around to finishing the 10 main pages and the little chat segways between them. I did the sketches and flat colors, Fox did the inks and shading. We both worked on the writting.