@wei Yeah I've seen that a few times and it breaks my heart :C I like the harshest criticism! Give it to me straight or don't at all! (If you're gonna get wet go swimming etc)

jba: NP...I can totally sympathize with other stuff getting in the way....everybody has it happen from time to time....learning that, allowing for it and taking steps to work around it is just part of getting better

and this is exactly what I hope we can provide for people...I think a lot of people lose sight of that

@Wei- Yeah I ended up losing a pretty significant amount of time due to home stuff, but I def see you're point. There was still a lot of flying from the seat of my pants in terms of scripting, which is a thing I really need to work on P: And thanks btw
@Shen, Evi, thank you for noticing B] You guys/this site are really my only access to real feedback on my stuff so any improvement you see is all thanks to you! @ ~@

Hobbit: you are still flying too loose with your drawing although there is better results with using blacks instead of empty backgrounds...remember it isn't just about the characters and what they are saying it is also about what they are doing and where they are.
            you also still need to pay much more attention to story structure....it always feels like there are parts missing or I have come in halfway thru

JBA: feels like you didn't have as much time as you would have liked or to do what you set out to on this...first three pages were great....next two fell apart....bigger panels...different layout and less of that background....then too many tight shots after that...you could have had the same story told in half the pages or less....so maybe spend more time planning and plotting up front so you can get more work done later on.....nice linework throughout tho

Hobbit: I think this is the first black and white comic I've seen from you and I quite like it! You've got a nice balance of filled-in blacks and line widths that I feel worked really well. It seems you've made a nice effort with the backgrounds this time round too also your expressions are the best, my faves has to be page 2.

JBA: It's great to see how much you've improved through battles, your lines have become so much cleaner and confident now woah. I really enjoyed the parallel setup you had for the first few pages, I was almost expecting them to switch bodies haha! I can tell you lost some time near the end and your colours got more rushed but it's still a good effort looking forward to the conclusion in your part two!

Shen- OMG that leg drawing is seriously causing problems for me! No you're totally right, it should- I forgot to add that detail @_@ Ahhh I'm so glad you liked it though!

Hobbit, I love the expression and gesture in this, so lively! I love the shapes too, everything is so bubbly and round and extra cute! Im a bit confused by the story, why would Bunny bring Boom and Meredith over to the house to prove the gems are for arts and crafts but also admit that they stole them? lol and is Duck Girl a Playboy costume type? XD Not that I'm to complain because now we can see Duck and Bunny in playboy costumes lol! (though on that note the leg on page 7, if it belongs to one of the Animal Girls, shouldnt it have fishnet?) Nice comic, very funny!

JBA- (haha thanks for the cameo!!) Every comic of yours seems better than the last! The anatomy in this is improved, mainly in that this time the girls actually seem their age lol. Theres a really good sense of weight and proportion, everything seems heavy where it should be, and the coilouring is really nice, if a bit sloppy towards the end (which we can forgive). I really like Bunny throwing water at Meredith XD This is a tried-but-true premise, and I'm super excited to see your guys' collab finish!

@Pyras- ty
@Gregsmith- Hmmm so like the anatomy of the two? I'm gonna have to keep a better eye on that!

Gregly- OH THAT'S A GOOD POINT! I should have added a "ta-da" or something yeah. Thanks so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it

Hobbitastic this is a really good showing, I like how the only color is in the word bubbles and your really strong blacks throughout! I was a little confused at page seven and thought it was merediths leg at first, maybe if there was a word bubble like 'so...' Just for the color so it was easier to tell which character it was. Good punchline too!

Jba good stuff as usual but certain people look weird sometimes... Like duck girl on page two and bunny girl hurling the bucket of water on page seven. The dialogue all feels pretty natural but watch those typos! Excited to see what you guys do for part two!

hobbittastic, this is the best anatomy i've seen from you so far, especially in that it's pretty consistent throughout the whole comic! Congratulations you level-upper!

jba, great work with your colors and parallel narrative, and happy to hear this story's gonna continue

Great job you two should be proud!

XD XD XD "Butthurt" I lol'd
Also uuuugh I hate re-reading my stuff and finding all the typos ;____;

YAAY! Yeah JBA and I are gunna do a collab!!
Dude don't feel bad I uploaded at the last min trying to punch stuff up!
Can't wait to see these ahhh!

Submitted! This was such a rough month for me at home, so I really only had the last like, week to work on a majority of the chapter.
ALSO I rushed like a madman at the very end because I didn't realize the deadline timer is set to PST and not EST D:
I'll finish them correctly and put em up somewhere for anyone that wants to see.
ALSO x 2: Excited to be doing Part Two of this as a collab with Hobbit!!
~Justin

SOON.

Ahhhh @_@ I know I have a huge comic due but your last comic was so good and it's about time our girls met.

I'm just so excited to finally have a reason to work on stuff; nobody reads my solo comics and I'm just generally bad about promoting them, so this is it for me!
Hobb; after my prelim sketches of your ladies, I'm so dang pumped for this!

This had to be done.

JBA, you are on a comic makin' ROLL. Keep the good times comin'

hell yes this is going to be adorable!!