2016 Invitational: Round 3 / Tsung vs. Click Lyric
Critiques & Comments
# 7
Posted:
Jul 27 2016, 06:18 PM
@Pyras Yeah this whole thing was me throwing myself outta my comfort zone as hard as I could! i certainly learned some things, but I definitely slacked on narrative to focus on polish. I actually noticed the moon dimness and debated for awhile whether or not to change it, but ultimately decided to stick with the extremely limited palette I'd chosen, for better or worse.
# 6
Posted:
Jul 27 2016, 05:54 PM
Tenbu: Having a round on the same week that you need to draw 80 storyboards is the definition of hard mode, it's a miracle you were able to sketch out as many pages as you did, so kudos for doing your best to deliver something. As i've told you before, 4th wall meta jokes can sometimes be very subjective and hit/miss. I'm not entirely sure how much your gag helps this comic (especially as that's a page that could have been used for more click/tsung fun) Can't add much more cause it's unfinished, but it's really nice sketches as usual
technicolor: Yay a more completed comic! The encounter is a little on the passive side especially for a click lyric comic, and while it's still nice, it's not quite as strong as your previous narratives. Looks clear that you're more comfortable in longer form stories and I bet with longer deadlines you'll make some amazing work! I think there is a wasted opportunity in this forest to use some beautiful hilights for streaks of sunlight or moonlight, and hitting the figures, some good shadows, etc, and the moon in the final page is extremely dim, it doesn't help the serenity you're trying to convey, it causes the pages to feel muted rather than peaceful.
Keep on rocking guys
technicolor: Yay a more completed comic! The encounter is a little on the passive side especially for a click lyric comic, and while it's still nice, it's not quite as strong as your previous narratives. Looks clear that you're more comfortable in longer form stories and I bet with longer deadlines you'll make some amazing work! I think there is a wasted opportunity in this forest to use some beautiful hilights for streaks of sunlight or moonlight, and hitting the figures, some good shadows, etc, and the moon in the final page is extremely dim, it doesn't help the serenity you're trying to convey, it causes the pages to feel muted rather than peaceful.
Keep on rocking guys
# 5
Posted:
Jul 27 2016, 01:31 PM
Tenbu: I personally liked how Click got out of his pannel to yell at Tsung. I thought it was a nice detail.
Technicolor-yawn: It's really great to see improvement from your last comic. Good job.
Technicolor-yawn: It's really great to see improvement from your last comic. Good job.
# 4
Posted:
Jul 27 2016, 09:03 AM
Tenbu: that one BIG 4th wall break
Tech: yeah lyric, there's wisdom in chillin'
Tech: yeah lyric, there's wisdom in chillin'
# 3
Posted:
Jul 27 2016, 08:59 AM
@Tenbu I'm sorry you couldnt finish your comic, man. But, from what you do have, this is hilariiooouus!! Page 4 really had me rollin! hahahaha. I really want that "To Be continued" to happen! That adventure would be so awesome!!
@Technicolor looove the mood set by the colors! You can really sense the chill that Click is feeling this day. And that ending... wisdom, for us all!
@Technicolor looove the mood set by the colors! You can really sense the chill that Click is feeling this day. And that ending... wisdom, for us all!
# 2
Posted:
Jul 26 2016, 09:04 PM
Alright, she's up! Tried alotta new things this round, including actually posting a finished comic, haha!
# 1
Posted:
Jul 20 2016, 10:28 AM
Just a heads up, this might be tough for me to get stuff in for this round due to schoolwork (gotta draw like 80 storyboards by next Monday). If I turn anything in, it might not be finished. Regardless, I'm looking forward to this match!
Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Aug 2nd, 2016
Votes Cast:
33
Page Views:
1999
Winner:
Technicolor-yawn
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@Technicolor-Yawn Man, really just nailin it on all fronts! Rad colors, rad movement, overall pretty rad. I've only really just got nitpicks, but here we go: Line weight, I'm totally into what you're doing now, and the uniform lines really look great, but maybe just a slightly larger brush for the characters would make em instantly pop out. By the same stroke, you can try some light gradients in the background, with solid colors for the characters. Not like, gradients galore, but just enough to great a little contrast. Either way, keep it up!