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Monday - Absolutely ludicrous. Honestly, I don't know if this will keep up, but this is the highest level of quality you've given yet. The clouds look absolutely beautiful, and the action was dramatic and intense. Frighteningly well done. You are a force to be reckoned with. Enough ass-pattery, I do think that you still need to be careful about faces, head sizes, and poses, but they're all way better from when you first started.
Kotori - A great deal lighter than Monday's entry, I appreciate the collab-ing that went on here. Negative space can be really tricky to work with, I think you can do it with more practice. The noir shot of Black in the bottom of page 4 is brilliant though, and should definitely be applauded. I am looking forward to where the story is headed next.
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Kotori, like you're linework. It's pretty clean and solid. At some points it could have more black (no, not the agent) here and there, but hey two weeks isn't much time when you got other stuff going on.
I like the dressing part followed up by that unexpected shot. Raw!
I really dig how you drew that gun, it has the proper details..unlike the ones i do where i hide em with ink. The panel with the reflection of the eye, you're opponent in the shadows...fukking attention attraction. I love it.
Since your fight with Dee you got me more curious as to where you're taking miss LaDiablo with this.
Two weeks? You guys rock.
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Monday- Even before I'd registered, I've been a fan of your works. The new style that you have in this new comic is awesome, being so much more neater than your traditional media style. But like many others before me have said, the digital art robbed your style of that messiness and insanity that your traditional art portrayed so well. As always, I'm in love with your dialogue and the detail you put into your art. Your body proportion has also improved rapidly ever since I've started reading your comics. Overall, a real nice job!
Kotori- I haven't really read up on Kotori Ky LaDiablo's story plot, and after this battle, I intend to! She seems to have a very complex, maybe even a little overdone plot, but I'll try to follow it.(Hopefully...) The only thing is the blank white spaces used for backrounds. I like the detail put into the characters, and how they seem to be a focal point, but I'd love more attention to detail in the backround.
Both artists did a great job, but I'm sorry to say that Monday gets a little more here because of the detail. Monday has always been great in backrounds, and in this battle, it's just more kickass. :)
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Monday-chankun Hime: I've always been in love with you...
Oh, and your comic, I guess.
But fo realz here, your style is always so fine. "Messy", yeah, but in the most absolutely wonderful way. I adored the mount of red you spilled in some of your panels, and the way you portray Agent Black just makes him a lot more sexier than anyone is allowed to be. Your Dialogues has always been one of the major key points that makes your comic enjoyable for the reader, especially when Black answered Kotori Ky's question with a "no", winking. Sigh. Agent Black. He so fine<3
The only thing I found problem in your comic (though I have even worse problem at this) is that, sometime, I have hard time understanding what's going on. But nothing too bad, and I know how that can't be helped sometimes, even if you're the pro of the pros. I guess this just depends on how retarded a reader can be.
Kotorin: I have been looking forward to this since you mentioned about battling Monday. It even made me nervous. Your art has always been increasing with greatness with each comics you work on, and this has definately been a treat. One thing I also enjoy from this and the earlier comic with Kotori is the use of your coloring on few key elements, like her jewel. Your story was also wonderful, as it had a good cliff hanger.
Good luck on both of you. I can't wait to see the next battles.
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Monday, DAMN man... I love your style. it's messy, a bit confusing during the fight scene but it look SO good and moody. that was a blast to read.
Kotori, Every time you do a comic you seem to improve a bit. and that is a good thing. your characters realy seem to take form. now, please work on your backgrond. this mostliy look as a fight in the loading romme of the matrix
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And I don't actually claim to remember anything about Kotori Ky's background story. I've read the bio twice, and you've got to admit, it's kind of a lot to keep track of, ya know? ^^;
Thank you for taking my evil, evil critique so well.
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Kotori-I know time wise you didn't get to do all you wanted but what you did do looked pretty nice. In the last panel on the second page it might have been neat to have the blood pouring out of her be red to keep with the hints of color you have here and there. I was kind of confused about the layout and the order of the panels on that last page, perhaps having the page just be longer and having the panels be longer with her internal thoughts between each horizontally long panel? I hope that made sense heh it would have maybe helped get what was going on across a bit better.
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Ms. Ladiablo - I think you said somewhere this is a big plot point for your character? I don't know much about your character, so I am judging it based just on the content of the comic. I think the thing that bothered me the most in your comic was the font. Tacky and hard to read! I can't say I am a fan of how you left the panels borderless on pages 3-4. It makes it look very unorganized, like it's just a bunch of sketches on a piece of paper rather than a sequence I guess. Although it's interesting to see both fighters do the same story, it's more like Monday's comic did the fighting part and your comic is just what she was thinking during the battle. It just lacks action and is less interesting.
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Hopefully my future battles with Kotori will reassure you that she's not going cliche or 'dull' in this move. It has always been my intention to work with the Seal and her bloodline, and since her entire reason for coming to VOID was to deal with this very issue, I don't think I'm doing anything unexpected. Thanks for the crit. I will work harder at making the work more interesting.
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Mr. Monday: Gorgeous as always. The new style is real slick. However, it kind of loses something somehow. I like the creepy disjointed blotchiness of your pen-and-ink works, I think it actually worked better. I liked your dialogue, "a bfthox fthilled with fmelancholy" and "we're gangsta like that" in particular. A fun read, even though it was hard to tell what was going on.
Miss Ky: I like your character a whole lot. I really do. But you're taking her in a very uninteresting direction. Kotori Ky ISN'T fun because she can control ice and has an ancient demon sealed in her blood and multiple personalities and is from another planet with four dominant races and her mother sacrificed her life a long time ago in a great war that destroyed the universe and burnt all the toast. Kotori Ky IS fun because she's out here in an unfamiliar environment, dealing with strange new customs and people, yet she still maintains her haughty ice-queen status. I enjoy watching her striding along the street, looking down her nose at the rest of us, and gracefully slapping around any poor sucker who mispronounces her name. I DON'T enjoy watching her sit back as some obscure part of her overdone history comes to the surface. I'm not saying that obscure overdone histories are a BAD thing, just do it with some personality! Kotori really didn't have much of a presence in this battle, which made it pretty dull for me.
Also, you put Kotori Ky on Void. Which means she's going to be poked, prodded, manhandled, and (mis)interpreted by other people, and they are free to do that. It was really painful watching you go off on Leeman like that in the comments. A gentle reminder would have done, you didn't have to lay it on so thick. That's bad sportsmanship. D:
....wow, this came out a lot meaner than I intended it to...
Anyway. What I DID like was on page 6, the lower-right panel. The mystery-wintery-girl-lady's look gave me the chills, and the flowing hair was gorgeous! <3 Also, the layout was a bit rigid, but it was very easy to read. The part about how Kotori "dressed like us" and came to our "hunting grounds" was cute, too - it was showing a bit of her vulnerable side, I just wished she would have showed more personality after that. The only thing about the backgrounds (I know you didn't have much time to do them) is when Kotori was talking to whatever that ice lady is supposed to be, I had no idea where they were! I'm guessing they were in her subconscious or something?
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Real critique in a minute.
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I have always enjoyed of both of these characters. I adore the team work when it comes to the story, you guys just keep on blasting surprices in our face. Monday your style is amazing, but I got a little bit confused towards the end ith some of the fast actions, then again the effects were pretty cool and makes it up.
Kotori, you said you had to simplify her story for VOID? Wow. I repeat, great plot writing skills you both, made them look real badass too!
*first comment is crap no jutsu*
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Monday, you blow me away. Every battle. You did a fantastic job and I'm still incredibly greatful that you agreed to fight me for this plot point of Kotori's. Thank you. <3
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very nice battle both of you. . .
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TIME FOR A BOLSHEVIK DANCE
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i was just under the impression she was "somehow" demonic.
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oh...woops
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/pulls out hair
Geh. I sometimes hate you people for not reading bios. >_< I know it's fucking long but give me a break.
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Thanks for the match, Monday.
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