Invitational Tournament 2019: Round 1 / Craven vs. Richard Lee Keynes
Critiques & Comments
# 5
Posted:
Jun 17 2019, 03:23 PM
HOLY SHIT DUDE! How are you this good? The art and story were both great! The only gripe I have is that you have a lot of typos and minor grammatical mistakes. Make sure to proofread (when you have time anyways!) and maybe have someone else look it over if you're not sure you've got everything right. Also, the pages were a bit big on my screen, but that just happens sometimes nbd. I cannot WAIT for round 2! I want to know what happens next!
# 4
Posted:
Jun 17 2019, 10:20 AM
Cab: Really amazing job getting this out in just one week, holy cow. I can't imagine what you'd be able to do in a longer time frame! For me, the biggest problem was with the design of the Captain. Though there were a few differences, like the fact that he was balding and didn't have the goatee, at a glance his design is so similar to Richard's that I kept getting the two mixed up. I think you could've fixed that by giving him either a different style mustache, or hair that wasn't in a ponytail. Other than that... I think it would've been nice to have seen Craven be colored in blue throughout the comic. Still, great job!! The story was clear and easy to follow and very entertaining
Dregogg: Better luck next time my dude!
Dregogg: Better luck next time my dude!
# 3
Posted:
Jun 13 2019, 06:33 PM
Cab: Oooh, those are some strong forms and lines! The drawings are great, and I like how the blue, ghost fire, and blood stand out against it, but it does look a little empty without something else to further separate things. The bits of tone helped in the pages where you put them, but I think this is more a job for more spot blacks and line hierarchy. Craven probably could have used some fills, since his blue lines against white were a little hard to read. The writing was a lot of fun, too. You gave Keynes such a strong open that I forgot that this comic was technically about someone else!
Dregogg: Hopefully we'll see a comic from you in the future!
Dregogg: Hopefully we'll see a comic from you in the future!
# 2
Posted:
Jun 11 2019, 11:38 PM
Cab: This is a great first void comic. You did so much great inks in one week. I love the light screen tone thing you do for armor, and your backgrounds are awesome. The story was super solid and I love the hook you did at the end of this, it's a really good way to lead into your next battle if you choose to do that, and I hope you do cause it would be cool to see where the story goes from here. Also the dialogue for your characters is good and each person feels like they have their own voice.
Dregg: its unfortunate you weren't able to get anything in but 1 week can be a cruel timeline and I look forward to seeing you do future stuff for void.
Dregg: its unfortunate you weren't able to get anything in but 1 week can be a cruel timeline and I look forward to seeing you do future stuff for void.
# 1
Posted:
Jun 11 2019, 11:52 AM
Awwww, Dregogg wasn't able to finish their entry, I see! It's okay, it was quite the challenge...! Meanwhile Cab... How do you do ALL OF THAT in a week?! It's crazy! And very entertaining too. I'm blown away! Also the dialogue is absolutely amazing!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jun 17th, 2019
Votes Cast:
31
Page Views:
1425
Winner:
Cab
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