Intro Story / El Catador

Intro Story — El Catador


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ArtsandGoodies
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# 8   Posted: May 4 2019, 01:29 PM
Thanks for all the crits. the stabs were an experiment to try and show how quickly his stabs were almost from out of nowhere. It's good to try and Catador will be great practice for action which is something i need.

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# 7   Posted: May 3 2019, 07:12 AM
I'll echo what others have said. My only major issue with this comic is the disconnected action from panel to panel. Other than that, I love the writing and what's actually happening in the comic. Glorious intro.

dejitaruu
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# 6   Posted: May 2 2019, 12:38 PM
*cracks knuckles*
I haven’t done a crit yet but arts you wanted this from me so here we go haha-

The storytelling and pacing is really nice here - my favourite thing about it is that it is short and sweet and we get a great sense of Catador’s character here whether it be fighting style, motivation, and even that cocky attitude we all love. I adored his little “Nya” and the purring at the end! I was definitely intrigued the whole way through! :))

Art wise, holy moly my friend you are getting better daily! Looking at Harlow’s intro and then to this one it’s like night and day - the poses are so much more fluid, the background is great and has a solid atmosphere, the perspectives you played around with look awesome, and the colours are really stand out! I’m always weak for big crowded Stadium battles ;00 I want morreeeeee.

And w/ critiques I’m gonna agree with the others on the action lines following through; I also had a hard time figuring out exactly where the rapier came from on page 2 there.  I’d also recommend studying some more muscle anatomy - specifically on page 3 with Catador’s opponent - like man back muscles are so hard so figure out but I feel some practice will really benefit you with future opponents in the future as well being able to convey Catador’s similar muscle structure. But I’m not gonna be too hard on that one, anatomy is really difficult - practice makes perfect and if you ever need help with it there is always tons of references and the of course the entire Void community :))

Keep going experimenting and improving, Arts! Can’t wait to battle this fine showman someday!!!

Badger
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# 5   Posted: May 1 2019, 10:12 PM
Love him!! His expression on pg2 panel 1 is great, and I agree with Cydork that the purring in the last panel is a nice touch. I'm excited to see him in some fights!

TheFrigginPizzaMan
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# 4   Posted: Apr 28 2019, 11:54 PM
*deep breath* I LOVE THIS GUY! Whenever I get the time to create my character we should fight! :3c

G.Lo
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# 3   Posted: Apr 26 2019, 08:18 AM
Oooh a showman!

This was a really nice look into this character's personality - we get a pretty good feel for what he values, and what he'll do for it.

I think the biggest things Cydork has a already mentioned. And I second on the action lines being a too thick. I think actually showing the punch or the foot in motion in color with just the speed lines as opposed to the blocked white would have conveyed better. I also think the blotted shadow on the last page, panel 2 was a little distracting not being filled in and what have upped the drama if the silhouette was more defined.

Can't wait to see this kitty in action!

Radji
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# 2   Posted: Apr 26 2019, 07:04 AM
Balrog from StreetFighter shaggeed a Khajiit
This is their son.

Good potential with such a colorful character

TheCydork
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# 1   Posted: Apr 26 2019, 01:37 AM
I love Catador’s expressions and dramatic poses! Cocky characters are pretty common but they’re still a favourite of mine (not to mention puns), and I think you convey his personality very well. I also really like the last panel, how he purrs at his opponents death. The juxtaposition of that soft contented sound with literally killing someone is great.

Something that bothered me about the comic though is that the actions don’t seem to follow through, for example in the 2nd page Catador flourishes his cape and then stabs his opponent, when he wasn’t even shown holding the rapier in prior panels. In addition, imo the passage of time could be indicated more clearly between the 3rd and 4th pages, and the action lines should be less solid.

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