Bootcamp Round Robin: Set 1 / Harvey vs. Miwesa

Bootcamp Round Robin: Set 1 — Harvey vs. Miwesa

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Astrodile
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# 10   Posted: May 10 2019, 02:45 PM
Sean:
It's always a pleasure to see your work when you share it, and its especially a delight to see you try your hand at these vertically-oriented style comics! I really love how throughout this coimc, and especially I do enjoy your inclusion of a song in the comic itself. Although it is not a major part of the comic, there's something about the way you use it that really adds to the atmosphere of the comic itself. I don't know the song, and thusly I haven't heard it so imagining its tune is a task I couldn't do on my first read, but it doesn't confuse/detract me and adds a distant chime to the haunting/lone atmosphere that you establish within Harvey's setting, both in the imaginative world and in his actual reality. Of course it's always nice to see more of Harvey as well, and this comic angles the reading into his daily life: That beyond the explosion powers, he's a normal dude who isn't exactly trying to live out a criminal life. And while that does show how miserable his life can be because of the current struggles he's facing, this comic feels as though its a peer into the more quieter parts of his life, even if still miserable, if that makes sense.  All in all, I enjoy this comic and I enoy your work, please keep it up!

In the topic of critiques, I feel as though a common issue that I will bring up once again when it comes to utilizing vertically emphasized comics and the stretch that one is willing to go to when shoving (x) amount of visuals into one very long page: The utilization of the scrolling down when reading, and how that coincides with the utilization of panel spacing/pacing. I feel as though in the latter half of the comic you take this into better account (Ex. When Miwesa is melting), but in previous panels the spacing/styling of the panels could have been  used to emphasize the strangeness of the situation that Harvey is in, allowing the reader to absorb the environment itself, even the empty/desolate atmosphere and the oddity of Miwesa's existence/actions in this comic (Such as in Panel 17, I feel as though this panel is COULD have been one of the strongest in this comic due to the detailing of the backgrounds and yet it doesn't necessarily fill in that belief due to how small this panel is compared to other panels that were either zoom ins/half-bodies/etc.). So definitely experiment more with panelling m'dude, you've got strong potential here! I would also really love to see you use more fullbodies in your work as well, but thats just a side note I wanted to throw out there.

But regardless, it always makes me happy to see your comics up and running, and congrats on getting done what you could for this bootcamp because I certainly enjoyed it! Can't wait to see more from you!!

Yarn:
I have no idea how to say this properly, but I think this is actually my favorite comic from you yet. This method you took to the visuals here, the colors here, it's all very wonderful and warm and I cannot deny the fact that this comic is all in all: Fuckin' great. Those first three pages, and that third page overall, are the best of this comic here. It makes me happy to see Miwesa and the development that you're taking to here, and I have high hopes for what you'll be doing with her in the future. Please, keep up the great work!

For critiques, I feel as though visually pages 4 and 5 are the weakest despite how ramped up these situations are, perhaps because the action that's happening here is a bit confusing to me/not as anatomically intense? These more simpler color schemes happening here can certainly work when the linework makes up for it, but the blobbing of character silhouettes happening here, as well as the lack of dynamic angling that could have emphasized weight and energy, do not succeed for me. I would to see how your skills are utilized when focusing on backgrounds/environments as well, even though they were not really all too important here, I just want to see your stylization when it comes to personalizing an environment/etc.
In terms of color scheme as well for those last two pages, they feel a bit too soft/pastel-esque to suit the rampant tension that's happening here. I'd love to see you use more brazen colors that have more saturation to them-- Maybe even using color palettes that aren't analagous?

In summary though, great comic! With Miwesas development, certainly consider me hooked, I'm hoping to see more in the future!

TheCydork
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# 9   Posted: May 9 2019, 04:28 AM
Honestly I don’t have anything to say, these were both great comics! I’m also super impressed with you both: Astro for finishing despite freaking bronchitis, and Yarn for physically painting 5 pages in 2 weeks!

Radji
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# 8   Posted: May 8 2019, 01:47 PM
waow that was very good

Astro you giave us a good solid short comic
Yarn your watercolor is improving. I see that you experimented ! continue

Hellis
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# 7   Posted: May 8 2019, 10:12 AM
Holy crap, super good job both. I'll have a proper critique for you later.

Desichan
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# 6   Posted: May 8 2019, 09:27 AM
Heck these comics are both so beautiful, and also hecka sad, v/good work you guys wow!!!

Kozispoon
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# 5   Posted: May 7 2019, 08:57 PM
SO EXCITED! Bring it and bring it hard, you two!

yarnwitch
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# 4   Posted: May 7 2019, 11:32 AM
Astro Sean: because I'm gonna murder you!
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Astro Sean
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# 3   Posted: Apr 25 2019, 11:47 AM
Yarn, the only thing you are kicking is the fucking bucket, because I'm gonna murder you!

yarnwitch
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276 comments
# 2   Posted: Apr 25 2019, 10:35 AM
IM GONNA KICK YOUR BUTT SEAN

kubo
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# 1   Posted: Apr 25 2019, 05:06 AM
This is an exciting matchup! I believe in both of you! You can do it!!!

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