Virtua vs. Egg Dealer

Virtua vs. Egg Dealer

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Pennydox
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# 13   Posted: May 9 2019, 11:31 PM
Both of these comics are so silly and entertaining XD
I can see you both put a lot of effort into your work, and you should keep at it! It really shows!

MRPR1993: I'm just browsing random comics, and this character is legit my favorite one of all the stuff I've read all day. She's got a hilarious personality, a goal in life, and sexy muscles that make her personality more amusing that serious for comedic effect. I think your writing is really great, and your ability to establish unique personality for both characters was very well done in this piece.  I think if you want to give the muscle lady more 'oomph', you should practice on making some of her motions have more impact on the environment and other things around her. For example, broken debris flying out and a cracked wall when she punches, or when she swings something, it's more obvious the wind around her is moving as well. Stuff like that.
 
BOOGIDIBZDO: Since your character is the egg guy, I think in the future, you should follow MRPR's idea of making egg puns for your character. Or at least consider it in future comics as a running gag, since he's so obsessed with eggs. I know it was difficult for this particular comic to show more than just the characters themselves, but in future comics, you'll need to work on establishing how much of this character you want to show in the panel vs. the other characters and background. It'll be a hard decision sometimes, but it's just something to consider in the future. You have a character with a lot of potential to be a lot of different things right now. I think shaping his personality (aside from his egg powers and egg obsession) would make him seem more entertaining for future battles with other voiders. Right now, it seems like he's a lot of different personalities, but nothing too specific yet.

      Edited May 9 2019,  11:31 PM by Pennydox

MrPr1993
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# 12   Posted: Mar 18 2019, 12:28 AM
Good fight Boog! Hope to see more of egg boi. He is so much fun! And thanks everyone

BoogidiBzdo
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# 11   Posted: Mar 18 2019, 12:25 AM
Thank you everyone! This was a really fun one for me. I’ll work on getting better and better.
Congrats MrPr and thank you for battling me.

Radji
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# 10   Posted: Mar 17 2019, 04:12 PM
MrPr :I feel like Virtua needs some more love from you so that you can draw her better in more various poses and angles

BOOGi: ....everyday we stray further far from the lord XDDDD  Eggy's new body shape is funny yes but sometimes it gets too confusing (especially in close ups)

ArtsandGoodies
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# 9   Posted: Mar 14 2019, 06:45 PM
MrPr: I will first say i like that you're trying to push your backgrounds and do stuff like a warehouse, With your backgrounds when adding more stuff you should also work on having a bit more overlap as well to make it feel a bit more natural cause even stuff stacked in warehouses isn't all perfectly straight.
It's good to see you use more tones but I think you need to work on it some more. When adding tones the lighter parts are where the veiwers eye will go to and the darker more muted tones will fade into the background, so keep this in mind when you put your tones down. I think Egg dealer needed some more tones in this comic so whenever we see him we could focus on the pure white parts like maybe the eggs or his face.
I do like that you used the plot element of the polyclops, the story in general was good having a nice amount of humor as well as actual story.

Boogidi: I see you using that word bubble tool and that's good and a much need improvement, they still do need work and make sure when story boarding to put the places your word bubbles will be before you end up accidentally covering the art with them. For your action shots I do want to see you pull out a bit more since most of the time I can't tell where characters are or exactly what they're doing. Like on page 10 the first panel could have been a smaller reaction but having a panel showing the whole scene with Virtua doing nothing to Egg Dealers body was important for this. Also we don't see the actual throw on page 7 so we don't get to feel its impact. However the close up actions you have are good it's just wee need some ones pulled out further so we can get a full bearing on what's happening.

yarnwitch
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# 8   Posted: Mar 12 2019, 02:52 PM
I just
I
I can't
Please
Help

Heathen
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295 comments
# 7   Posted: Mar 11 2019, 01:10 PM
MrPr: This was one of your more coherent comics in your camera movement and environments.

Boogidibzdo: This comic is obviously eggshit insane, but I really like how you draw Virtua in action. Her closeups tend toward the hideous, but she looks really badass in full and mid shots, and I really like how you’re doing these poses and angles that don’t necessarily have the clearest silhouette, but they work, and have a kinetic energy to them remiscent of a good animated action scene. Kind of reminded me of LaSean Thomas, in some way.

MrPr1993
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# 6   Posted: Mar 9 2019, 03:43 PM
I'm gonna finish my bit, but I have bad news:

My PC won't work for some time. I won't have time to polish it well the entry >->;

It's fortunate that I have my remaining pages stashed tho, so I'm using a not-so-good PC laptop as backup to finish and post. However, the remaining pages I missed won't be all good. ;-;

      Edited Mar 9 2019,  03:44 PM by MrPr1993

Kozispoon
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1006 comments
# 5   Posted: Feb 19 2019, 11:50 PM
Whose gonna outfetish who? STAY TUNED

Heathen
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295 comments
# 4   Posted: Feb 18 2019, 05:50 PM
Take me to MS Paint hell.

Desichan
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179 comments
# 3   Posted: Feb 17 2019, 10:15 PM
It's beginning to smell a lot like eggssss
everywhere you go,
And the rancid smell will be, down the lane and down the tree
and on Virtua's burgerrrrr

Shen
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1267 comments
# 2   Posted: Feb 17 2019, 09:42 PM
oh dear god

MrPr1993
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67 comments
# 1   Posted: Feb 17 2019, 01:21 PM
Awww ye

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Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Mar 17th, 2019
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