Halloween Collab: Kindred Spirits / Vicente Scordato and Cadenza

Halloween Collab: Kindred Spirits — Vicente Scordato and Cadenza


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Viperchief
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# 10   Posted: Feb 7 2019, 12:02 PM
Beautiful clean lines in this one!  Interesting encounter between the two characters though I was looking for a payoff that never arrived.  With all the white and light colors in the backgrounds, I would have liked to have darker outlines around the speech bubbles, it distracted me a bit from the dialogue.  Beautifully drawn piece, can definitely tell ya'll took your time!

Alouisse Ver
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# 9   Posted: Feb 5 2019, 10:56 AM
I want to make this little comment to say thank you all for the constructive critiques! I’m eagerly awaiting for voting to end so I can look at all the critiques and apply them to not only this comic, but future ones as well.

Hellis
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# 8   Posted: Feb 5 2019, 08:27 AM

Most of my crits in regards to the comic has been phrased and made better by Will and Heathen. The story ends in something of a  non ending, in that it seems like there is supposed to be a final fourth page. I'd go so far to say that the ending of page 3 should be the first half of a page four. To let it stand up a little more and lead into some sort of final acknowledgment between the two. As to cap off/trade on the fact that they work well together.

Artwise: Just gonna echo everyone about how nice your charachters look, hey are expressive, well detailed and just generally pleasant to look at.

  The comics very uniform blue and I would have seen some less pastel colors. Pastels tend to help with making things pop, but I feel that's not the case here due to the white/blue combo both characters are rocking aa well as every background set piece. And it gives a kinda sterile coolness that is at odds with the mood of the pacing and comic, especially that last page performance. Some complimentary colors to make it pop might work in future works.

All in all its a solid comic! You two work well together and have some serious chops, I hope to see me more collabs between the two of you in the future!

      Edited Feb 5 2019,  08:30 AM by Hellis

ArtsandGoodies
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# 7   Posted: Feb 5 2019, 12:11 AM
You two make a good combination and it's nice to see you took your time with this collar and made a nice small interaction. I really love the color palette for this comic. My only crit would be for panels 4 and 5 on page two, these are about Cadenza remembering that she can't play instruments anymore because of her damaged hands, yet the hands aren't even fully in either frame. I think these panels should have been more zoomed in on her hands than her expression realizing her situation again. that being said that's a minor gripe and this is a nice interaction.
I'm really interested to see more of them interacting considering what Vicente does is he just pretending to be friendly so he can get her on the show and does he often do this to metas, or is he just genuinely nice because he respects class. I wanna know more and also just more Vicente is something I wanna see

William_Duel
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# 6   Posted: Feb 2 2019, 05:22 AM
This was a cool collab and it definitely looks nice.  I echo Heathen's comments though.  For a ball or party there should be more of a sense of space.  The panels are rather crowded as we're just focusing on Vicente and Cadenza.  A few more zoomed out shots would have been nice.  

And yeah be wary of your reading order.  The stacked panels are a bit awkward.  I frequently make that mistake myself and often get stuck trying to fix it.  But it's a good thing to catch early.  I figure it might be because of all the manga I've read and perhaps that's true for you as well.  So like Heathen said, try to keep things moving in a Z pattern.

Cadenza's anatomy is a little off.  She's thick.  And not in a thicc way.  Her neck is often so pronounced that she reaches bodybuilder type proportions.  There are times when she seems thicker than Vicente.  So I'd be a bit more careful about that and work with maybe some reference.  

And a final echo, yeah this needed one last page to top it off.

      Edited Feb 2 2019,  05:22 AM by William_Duel

Heathen
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# 5   Posted: Feb 1 2019, 10:50 PM
I agree it would have been nice to have one more page, it sort of ends abruptly. The characters look great, but I don’t like the backgrounds so much, or the pastel color palette. Some blacks and a more sultry color scheme would have really helped the mood and atmosphere.

Also, this is a common mistake, but really try not to stack panels on the left side of the page, as it confuses the reading order in English language comics, which read left to right in a Z pattern.

      Edited Feb 1 2019,  10:53 PM by Heathen

Shen
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# 4   Posted: Feb 1 2019, 02:49 PM
First of all how dare you deny Ghost's incredible class and sophistication, look at him over there, boogying hard with his fancy cape. Well youve caught his attention now with this little performance so look forward to the fallout of that~
Anyways, this is a nice piece! Taking your time with it made for some gorgeous lines and colours. I wish it had lasted one more page- I know it was meant to be part of a collaboration, but even in that context, seeing an epilogue to her performance would have been nice. My only real complaint is that Cadenza looks so "mature" here- like, physically. Smaller eyes, pointed face, tall and robust, not quite herself. But she looks great next to Vicente! i didnt know they were friends~ I'd love to know more about that! Gorgeous little story, excellent backgrounds, nice pastel colours. good collab!

Alouisse Ver
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# 3   Posted: Jan 31 2019, 11:54 PM
Y'all are too KIND. q v q

Little short and sweet Halloween collab between Linclair and myself! This was supposed to go along with the Halloween collab from last year, but we decided to not rush and finish it on our own time. This comic takes place after the events of Magic Mayhem: http://entervoid.com/comic/6412

Credits:
Script: Linclair
Pencils: Alouisse Ver
Lineart: Linclair
Edits: Alouisse Ver
Colors: Alouisse Ver
Lettering: Alouisse Ver

Thank you for reading!

Shen
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# 2   Posted: Jan 24 2019, 04:15 PM
oh shit whats this

JCee
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# 1   Posted: Jan 24 2019, 03:39 PM
Can't waaaaait!

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