Wintertime Interlude / Zoey

Wintertime Interlude — Zoey

by Pita


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Heathen
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# 9   Posted: Dec 31 2018, 01:40 AM
Everything I was going to say was pretty much said by Kozi and G.Lo. A quiet moment lacking a few touches to make it work just right, but a nice moment, nonetheless.

TheRealBirbBlitz
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# 8   Posted: Dec 30 2018, 01:56 PM
This was short and sweet!, I really loved the warm feel of like being inside the house while it’s cold outside, it’s a really nifty feeling!! The colors and soft shading compliment each other very nicely, all in all this is a neat excersize.

FoolsEnigma
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# 7   Posted: Dec 27 2018, 04:53 PM
This is supremely, supremely cute! I love the color contrast between the cold and dark outside and the warm cozy inside of the house. A couple people have mentioned the dresser, and i think the problem is just that you tried to curve the top row of drawers a little to much, so now the top drawers get wider as they get closer while the bottom ones get smaller. Its a very small thing.
This is a very nice one page comic!

Kozispoon
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# 6   Posted: Dec 27 2018, 09:49 AM
One bootiful page that really got some TLC over the course of the week. Not really sure how this ties in, furthers plot or generally weaves into Zoey's narrative, but I feel this was more of a personal artist challenge and study than anything.


That said, its clear you really wanted to give this your best shot in establishing mood and setting. While I think your establishing shot is great, I wish there was more transition on color scheme when it comes to the next panels. The cool  tones of the exterior shot stand out and almost look incongruous on the page when you put it all together. Perhaps a warm glow from the fire filtering through the window and falling into the snow, or an additional panel, giving us a closer look at the window before we go in would've eased that color switch.

I feel the items within the little egg house tell a story of the inhabitants, but there seem to be some missed connections. It would've been great if the snowshoe footprints had been in the snow outside, of that the adult snoozing in the chair had some battle scars to reflect that perhaps he had a history with all those fancy weapons on the wall.  You're getting that knack for setting a tone with this nice quiet moment, it just needs that sliiiiiight narrative tweak for me.

G.Lo
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# 5   Posted: Dec 26 2018, 09:14 AM
This was really adorable and cute critique practice! I feel like you nailed it with the first panel - it’s dark and those trees, though stylistically cute, kind of give an ominous feel to the outside. But there doesn’t seem to be an scary places when your home in the arms of your loved ones.

I agree with Yarn in that the second panel the dresser looks off; I think it might be because you gave the rest of the furniture in the room many curves, soft rounded edges etc where as the dresser is predominately hard edges with the knobs being the only round bits. Also I think for panel 2, you could have pulled out a bit to include the chair that Pop’s and Zoey are on so you not only get an idea of where in the room they are, but more coziness in rhe scene.

All in all, cute experiment! Way to take dem critiques into consideration!

yarnwitch
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# 4   Posted: Dec 26 2018, 07:29 AM
Very cute! Something I want to point out, is that in your second panel, everything is really nice and well done, except the dresser in the bottom right of that panel somehow. The perspective seems a bit wonky, even if i understand the room is egg-shaped. I wish I had a better way to articulate why it seems off to me, but as I look at it, i think its mostly the drawers. I'll try to find a better way to phrase this, I hope.
I have to say its a lovely comic and it gave me the serious good feels though. Your color schemes are quite nice. I hope you continue to work in color! I know time doesn't always permit it, but you have a good color selection. (i'd be a slight bit more careful with the shading and modeling on the clothing folds though, like panel 3, your lines are telling me there's folds, but the shading is telling me the fabric is mostly straight.)

ArtsandGoodies
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# 3   Posted: Dec 25 2018, 10:44 PM
This was a cute look interlude. I really like the colors in this in particular. also I think you did a good job with the backgrounds in this. a cute little fuzzy holiday comic.

Pita
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# 2   Posted: Dec 24 2018, 05:35 PM
My one page is uploaded!  You read that right--one page.

This was meant to be an exercise and a challenge.  I took the crit about my backgrounds seriously, so I decided that I was going to limit my work to only one page for this and focus on those backgrounds.

There really isn't a story with this.  I wanted to portray a quiet moment of comfort between Zoey and her now revealed but still unnamed adopted dad.  And I realized that as of this submission that Zoey has been on VOID for two years.  Good on ya, girl!

We'll get back to the Howling Chasm in January.  Until then, have a happy holiday, all of you.
-Pita

      Edited Dec 26 2018,  07:23 AM by Pita

Pita
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# 1   Posted: Dec 17 2018, 10:18 AM
A memory of a quieter time

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