I feel blessed by Conway's return. I love this dude.
Really enjoyed the jokes in this one and I can't wait for more shenanigans!
Conway Convict / Conway
Critiques & Comments
# 7
Posted:
Dec 15 2018, 10:26 PM
# 6
Posted:
Dec 15 2018, 11:01 AM
Okey-doke! So first of all, I just wanna mention I love your work, the expressiveness you bring to characters is top notch and I absolutely adore your stylization, and your storytelling is a definite treat. (Also I'm really glad to see your return to void, and im hype to see what you create moving forward!)
However a thing I really wanna say is that i feel like the backgrounds could use a lot more love. Looking at them, it feels pretty rushed, there's a few places you've created texture so to say, but it feels like a lot of things are too empty. I think it does make sense in some places since this is a jail, but in a number of senses, adding clutter of some sort could be beneficial For example in the cells, there could be things like spiders, stains, cracks in the wall, even more of that wall peeling effect. A big key I've been learning about backgrounds, is if things feel empty, think about how to fill that space, unless you're going for a specific effect where you want it to feel empty!
Overall though I love this comic, I love the dialogue, I really enjoyed the side characters, and all the dialogue was super fun! I hope the bits of critique are helpful, and overall I'm really hype to see things you make moving forward! Good job on such a great beyond battle!!!
However a thing I really wanna say is that i feel like the backgrounds could use a lot more love. Looking at them, it feels pretty rushed, there's a few places you've created texture so to say, but it feels like a lot of things are too empty. I think it does make sense in some places since this is a jail, but in a number of senses, adding clutter of some sort could be beneficial For example in the cells, there could be things like spiders, stains, cracks in the wall, even more of that wall peeling effect. A big key I've been learning about backgrounds, is if things feel empty, think about how to fill that space, unless you're going for a specific effect where you want it to feel empty!
Overall though I love this comic, I love the dialogue, I really enjoyed the side characters, and all the dialogue was super fun! I hope the bits of critique are helpful, and overall I'm really hype to see things you make moving forward! Good job on such a great beyond battle!!!
# 5
Posted:
Dec 13 2018, 09:27 AM
It is good to see you back Karma I really enjoyed this comic, I feel it was very consistent and fun to read good job!
# 4
Posted:
Dec 12 2018, 11:46 AM
Great, fun comic Karma!
Here is my crit, feel free to disregard any of my comments, for these are only my opinions :]
First impression, the dialogue is very witty and natural! The font doesn't really fit the style very well though. Not that it doesn't work, but it looks like something I'd see in a custom email or cellphone font. You may want to add more space in your balloons as well. The rule is that you should be able to fit an "O" between any word and the edge of the balloon minimum. Page 3 panel 2 is ripe with tangents: both his pointing hand and the phone intersect or are continuous with another line. Just a tip XD.
An you could have pushed the color/shading a bit more. Using deeper, contrasted tones for the shadows can really accentuate a comic and bring it to life. If the colors of the shadows are too close to the original color, or only a slightly darker version of that color, it begins to look rather flat and washed out. Maybe that's what you're going for though, because of the tone of the comic being jail.
Your backgrounds look nice, but the perspective is wonky. Use of more straight edges and guiding lines may do the trick, but page 6 panel 1's food trays just look lazy XD. I love the story and I love all these gags, they are very humorous! I like the perspective in the last panel of pg8! Great shot! I wonder what that giraffe is in for...
Here is my crit, feel free to disregard any of my comments, for these are only my opinions :]
First impression, the dialogue is very witty and natural! The font doesn't really fit the style very well though. Not that it doesn't work, but it looks like something I'd see in a custom email or cellphone font. You may want to add more space in your balloons as well. The rule is that you should be able to fit an "O" between any word and the edge of the balloon minimum. Page 3 panel 2 is ripe with tangents: both his pointing hand and the phone intersect or are continuous with another line. Just a tip XD.
An you could have pushed the color/shading a bit more. Using deeper, contrasted tones for the shadows can really accentuate a comic and bring it to life. If the colors of the shadows are too close to the original color, or only a slightly darker version of that color, it begins to look rather flat and washed out. Maybe that's what you're going for though, because of the tone of the comic being jail.
Your backgrounds look nice, but the perspective is wonky. Use of more straight edges and guiding lines may do the trick, but page 6 panel 1's food trays just look lazy XD. I love the story and I love all these gags, they are very humorous! I like the perspective in the last panel of pg8! Great shot! I wonder what that giraffe is in for...
# 3
Posted:
Dec 12 2018, 12:29 AM
Very very fun! Good read! I love how the plot went about and I had no struggles with reading anything or pacing.
# 2
Posted:
Dec 10 2018, 09:26 PM
This was a really cool story and a good way to learn about the Conway since i haven't really seen him before. I also like the story and the idea of the other prisoners working together to make it seem like Conway is on good behavior, i guess one mild plot hole is how would that plan work if the prison had any cameras? but that's mild and I didn't think about that while reading it and it didn't ruin my entertainment of the story. also I relaly like how every background character is unique good job with all the designs for those characters. welcome back to void and I look forward to seeing more of your stuff.
# 1
Posted:
Dec 9 2018, 11:23 AM
Damn conway. Back and fresh. Your former cellmates are very much regretting everything ever hahahaha
Beyond Battle
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Dec 15th, 2018
Votes Cast:
20
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Now that the dust has settled, its so exciting to see a toon make his way back to the muck of void. This lil guy has been missed fo sho. Right off the bat, the first few pages left me pleasantly surprised we were going to get a glimpse of a toon in the clink and his effect. I think its totally appropriate the regular humans and metas would want that level of wackiness out of there, but I'll admit I was kind of thrown with the way it went about. From the onset, Conways celmate comes off as a friend. His reactions and behavior towards Conway, while anxious does not give me the impression of someone at their wits end, much less willing to go through this bombastic plan to get him paroled. I'll admit I was surprised by the outcome as it felt like more of a build up for a buddy adventure behind bars.
You gave me a hint over the page of Conway trying to catch up with his fellow toon denizens, but I didn't think it'd hit me as it did. You did a nice job of showing they moved on. Or have they forgotten him? Either way, I got a little heartstring tug. Makes me wonder with no one in void to lean on, what's a Conman to do next?