All Together Now 2018, Round 2 / Jiko Shi and Capslock & Shift vs. Izanami and Samira Williams

All Together Now 2018, Round 2 — Jiko Shi and Capslock & Shift vs. Izanami and Samira Williams

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yarnwitch
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# 15   Posted: Dec 12 2018, 09:09 AM
I like the story, Fukur0, I like it a lot. I think my only complaint is some slight sameface? There were a few panels where Iza looked a lot like how you've drawn the Fool before, so I had to remind myself. (maybe its just me? if so, feel free to disregard) Other than that, I honestly love everything. Your color choices are always wonderful, and I like that dissociative feel on page 4 you've got going.

Orion
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# 14   Posted: Dec 4 2018, 11:53 PM
. Very tense and emotional wrought on izamumi's part with a hilarious resolution at the end with Samria's reaction and playing the whole situation out. I liked the build up of the scene as it works both with and without knowledge of Jiko's powers. You still feel Izum's doing something immoral and being forced into it but it leaves a humorous situation in which izumi can lash back that while she was capible of the action it didn't have any reproctuons which you could be fun to play with later.

Overall this was an interesting read and the visuals carried we'll despite of parts unfinished. Can't wait for next round!

      Edited Dec 4 2018,  11:54 PM by Orion

Happy December 17th! -Reecer6
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# 13   Posted: Dec 4 2018, 11:37 PM
hah, this was a super inventive way to use your opponents to further iza and samira's struggle! even if i'm still not certain what samira's status as like, a thing, is. like, she isn't corporeal, but she's a totally different incorporeal here than she was the last comic. just a smidge confusing, i guess. the story you're telling so far is awesome!! obviously just wish the bots got a bigger role than an effective cameo, but everything else is gr8.

      Edited Dec 4 2018,  11:40 PM by Happy December 17th! -Reecer6

Astrodile
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# 12   Posted: Dec 4 2018, 10:08 PM
Love the story, love the visuals, and of course I ain't gonna pick on the sketches, I'm glad you decided to leave these in so that we have context of the story's progression regardless of having some unfinished work!
Others have said everything I could've so I only really have good words and appreciation for the writing of the characters, the progression of showing how cruel Samira can be, Jiko's nonchalant attitude, and GOD I hope things turn sunny side up for Iza eventually!!!! As usual I love the color scheme used in this, especially when things begin to take a turn for the worse.

That 3rd panel on page 2 is my absolute favorite haha, it's real cute.

Hellis
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# 11   Posted: Dec 4 2018, 06:26 AM
Writing: That first panel is very moody and the atmosphere is great. Really been digging this storyline so far Fuu. The anti-climax of Izas new murdering ways coming at the hand of one immortal Jiko made me laugh. All in all,  I enjoyed the story of it a lot.

Art: your use of spot blacks is always really nice to see, your style is really heavy and atmospheric.  IT complements the writing of this particular comic very well. . OF what is done, it is topnotch. I'd love to see you push this part more, do more with the color contrasting the darkness.

ArtsandGoodies
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# 10   Posted: Dec 2 2018, 11:54 PM
I really like this story and what you did with this comic even though it was unfinished. My favorite part is the bottom of page 4 with the green effect you used, that was super cool and a great way of showing the mental pain happening. However I would have prefered less colors for more complete inks compared to sketches. Your inks are so good they could look like a complete comic by themselves so when life happens again I would say aim for inking everything first before colors since your inks are so awesome. Also I really liked they're confusion after stabbing Jiko Shi. Great job and I look forward to seeing how this situation is resolved.

      Edited Dec 2 2018,  11:55 PM by ArtsandGoodies

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# 9   Posted: Dec 2 2018, 09:15 AM
Wow I personally loved the border layouting and tightening on scenes! Even with sketches here and there the flow still made sense. Some sketches were a lot harder to read than others but its great you got most pages inked and coloured!

Radji
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# 8   Posted: Dec 1 2018, 05:06 PM
I feel like Jiko is really the ultimate c**k blocker for psycho killers like Samira ^^ poor iza.

thejanman
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# 7   Posted: Dec 1 2018, 04:23 PM
hey new here! really enjoyed your comic fukuro! when the girl got stabbed i was like... oh man i cant watch... but then there was that twist ending! XD im weak

Julz
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# 6   Posted: Nov 29 2018, 08:19 PM
Awesome first panel! Really sets the scene, looks fantastic! I love page 2 panel 3 :O!!! Page 3  is unfinished. I don't know what happened and I can't tell what is going on in the roughs. I dig the effects bottom of pg4. Page 6 panel 3 I really like that panel, great motion and emotion, but the poster behind Jiko is distracting. The reader's eyes are drawn to eyes so it may distract too much and pull away from the message or emotion you are going for, lessening the impact of the comic. The framing of the panels looks very nice by the way. Page 6 panel 4 is AWESOME. Very scary eyes. More Jiko abuse, I can see where this is going. Ending was expected, but still felt good youknow? Page 7 wasn't as seamless as I'd have liked though going from color to stark black and white. Awesome content though!

Camel
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# 5   Posted: Nov 29 2018, 06:40 PM
This was a really great comic, albeit being unfinished. The colors here are really pleasant, with the dark fall palette shifting into that sickly, otherworldly green. Framing and panels are good all around too, although personally on page 6, i would have cramped the panels and reduced the viewable gutter space to make the page more frantic. Writing wise, the dramatic irony with Samiza goin for jikos neck when we know that aint gonna phase her was fun. Really do wish u incorporated caps and shift more. Ultimately, this posession angle is still so interesting. Good luck!

      Edited Nov 29 2018,  11:22 PM by Camel

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# 4   Posted: Nov 29 2018, 03:17 PM
I like what's here! You don't need me to tell you it seems incomplete, but that's an unfortunate reality of... reality. Would've liked to see Caps somewhere in here, but I get that you were pressed for time. Anyways, I really dig the effect at the end of page 4. It's spooky. I guess all I can recommend is, next time try to get all the lines done before coloring, some of these smaller figures and action scene sketches are kind of hard to read. Can't wait to see what you come up with for the finals!

fukur0
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# 3   Posted: Nov 27 2018, 11:57 PM
So kind of same ordeal as last time. Thanksgiving time with the family, got sick (again), just out of energy overall. Comic had an actual proper ending but unfortunately had to cut it abrupt just so I'd get something in. Hopefully you enjoy ¯\_༼ ಥ ‿ ಥ ༽_/¯

JCee
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# 2   Posted: Nov 13 2018, 07:15 PM
OH MAN OH MAN

fukur0
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# 1   Posted: Nov 13 2018, 03:34 PM
oh shit

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