@Hats: It's really awesome to see how much your art has grown as well as your writing. The story was fun and entertaining imo. The prison info-video was cute. You're very good at drawing expressions, it really does it's job of delivering the feelings of the characters. I can feel what are experiencing. The paneling also looks good and makes the story flow well, but personally I am not a fan of the thin lines for gutters. They make the art look more cluttered than it really is. The first page is a good example of this, the first few panels become hard to read with all the vertical lines. Other than that though, I don't see many other problems I have with this. Excellent work.
@Bobo: Interesting idea! I like that Tiffany drained the magic/energy of all other magic users, but I feel like I needed more by the end. It was a good read, either way. Moving on to the art, I THINK... you need to work on your line work more. The line widths were really inconsistent. Your last battle had cleaner line work for sure, but it still had the same issues in terms of the line widths. Sometimes the line art in some panels feel too thin compared to other panels surrounding it, or too thick. That's currently my only suggestion on what to look towards improving. Good stuff though.
Magic Mayhem, Final Round / Wizzie Belles vs. Tiffany
Critiques & Comments
# 11
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Jul 9 2018, 12:23 AM
# 10
Posted:
Jul 6 2018, 11:53 PM
HOLY GUACAMOLE. Hats, I wanna commend you for busting out one of the most stellar comics I've seen yet. Every scene was fun, creative, and exciting. I don't feel this entertained reading pro comics, so bravo! Bobo, you've clearly had to rush, and many scenes are clunky as a result. The comic seems to lack excitement even when clearly exciting things are going on.. Maybe the panels could've been organized better so that action flowed more smoothly. Also, keep working on improving anatomy and poses! Your arms have a tendency to change sizes very frequently, and character bodies change size too. Good on you for finishing, though, and being a great sport about the challenging project!
# 9
Posted:
Jul 6 2018, 03:43 PM
@Astro: OH SHIT I left out a line of dialogue! That definitely explains why that line didn't make sense haha. Shit, that was such a key line, too XD Also, Talon is supposed to be wearing gloves, but I forgot about that until pretty late in the game XD
This comic was rushed compared to the last two, so I apologize for the drop on quality. I felt like I had to get super ambitious to go up against Hats, but that ended up just shooting myself in the foot because I got overwhelmed haha. I'm glad at least some people enjoyed it, though!
This comic was rushed compared to the last two, so I apologize for the drop on quality. I felt like I had to get super ambitious to go up against Hats, but that ended up just shooting myself in the foot because I got overwhelmed haha. I'm glad at least some people enjoyed it, though!
# 8
Posted:
Jul 5 2018, 08:06 PM
I don't really have much to say here but i loved both of these comics and they both did a great job this was a really awesome finale for both of you and both of you. I don't really have anymore to expand on there really isn't much that needs to be expanded on beyond the fact you both were great in this tourney and this final battle.
# 7
Posted:
Jul 5 2018, 04:59 PM
Hats: This is one of my favorite comics from you, if only because of how expertly used the gags were throughout, from all the "-matic" machines to Tiffany's undead slapstick to the actual literal eyeball cameras. I think the reason some people have trouble recognizing Tiffany (aside from the situation with the prison garbs and shaved heads) is that Tiffany up to this point has been a very cute looking character, while your interpretation of her--though still cute--had a bit more of this lil ghoulish gremlin take, with the skeletal nose and beady irises (though I think the skeletal arm should tip off people earlier). It's a small issue though for a solid chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next
Bobo: Sadly this one doesn't have the same polish as your last comic, line width and definition suffering is mostly my biggest gripe here, I otherwise liked it.
congrats to both of you for getting it this far and i can't wait to see more from both of you
Bobo: Sadly this one doesn't have the same polish as your last comic, line width and definition suffering is mostly my biggest gripe here, I otherwise liked it.
congrats to both of you for getting it this far and i can't wait to see more from both of you
# 6
Posted:
Jul 3 2018, 08:08 AM
Well, I probably shouldn't be biased either way and judge this properly, and I will do that and vote properly in a bit...
...but...
...I would really like hats to win so we can have Mahou Shoujo Wizzie Belles.
...but...
...I would really like hats to win so we can have Mahou Shoujo Wizzie Belles.
# 5
Posted:
Jul 2 2018, 07:55 PM
OKAY FIRST GETTING IT OUT OF THE WAY I LOVED BOTH COMICS
Hats: It's really neat to see how many interesting liberties you take with story, and the crazy stuff you do! Your writing is honestly super something to admire and like yeah!!! Honestly I feel like I'm not a fan though of how you stylized Tiffany, I feel like your art is amazing, but there's this weird thing where when you stylize some characters, you can't even tell who they are at that point? But even if thats the case, you do amazing and put in very entertaining characterization.
Bobo: wELL YOU KNOW I LOVE YOUR COMIC, I particularly think its great how overly chaotic it is with all the characters you had fit in, tho it is slightly confusing, BUT STILL GREAT, AND THAT JOKE YOU OPENED ON IS AMAZING AND CRAP TIFFANY HAS A HAND NOW I GUESS SOMEHOW THAT LOOKS REALLY WEIRD ON HER
Hats: It's really neat to see how many interesting liberties you take with story, and the crazy stuff you do! Your writing is honestly super something to admire and like yeah!!! Honestly I feel like I'm not a fan though of how you stylized Tiffany, I feel like your art is amazing, but there's this weird thing where when you stylize some characters, you can't even tell who they are at that point? But even if thats the case, you do amazing and put in very entertaining characterization.
Bobo: wELL YOU KNOW I LOVE YOUR COMIC, I particularly think its great how overly chaotic it is with all the characters you had fit in, tho it is slightly confusing, BUT STILL GREAT, AND THAT JOKE YOU OPENED ON IS AMAZING AND CRAP TIFFANY HAS A HAND NOW I GUESS SOMEHOW THAT LOOKS REALLY WEIRD ON HER
# 4
Posted:
Jun 30 2018, 02:21 PM
Uploaded, thumbs emailed and ready to rumble! Good luck Bobo!
# 3
Posted:
Jun 18 2018, 01:43 PM
CAN'T WAIT TO SEE HOW THIS GOES!!
GOOD LUCK GUYS
GOOD LUCK GUYS
# 2
Posted:
Jun 18 2018, 01:24 PM
THIS IS GONNA BE GOOD
# 1
Posted:
Jun 18 2018, 11:31 AM
I'LL BE GOING DOWN SWINGING
Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
2 weeks
Ended:
Jul 8th, 2018
Votes Cast:
26
Page Views:
2267
Winner:
MyHatsEatPeople
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You turned Tiffany into the character I hoped and cranked up her obsession with Lily to 100% like jailable offense dedication. It made her funny, it made her likable and a nice foil to Wizzie's consternation throughout. Tiffany's chatterbox angle made me cackle. Like, full on giggle at seeing Wizzie at her wits end.
The great thing I like about your character and storylines is that you have a real talent for providing actual stakes. Too often I wonder how Wiz will get out of a jam, or actually doubt she's gonna make it out. I like those stakes. I like not knowing a win is guarantee. But lo! the magic wand appears in her cell! What's gonna happen now? I', so excited for more and belatedly congratulate you on an entertaining win! I couldn't of asked for a better turnout on my first mini tourney
BOBO- Way to go making it to the finals! Tiffany in your and all the other magic mayhem entries has been a total hoot. It's so neat to see what lengths you and others have taken such a unique character. I'm sorry to hear things got away from you in the end because I was really enjoying the look and quality of your previous rounds (this squishy chibi style is too cute), but it seems both in story and quality this took a dip.
The one bit I wish carried throughout your rounds was her desire for a real arm. It would've been a great schtick. Or at least explained the grab for a conveniently placed werewolf arm just laying about in a dungeon. Even a quick reaction take would've driven home the fact we as readers should care along with her. As it stands, it seems like a such a "well I guess i'll pick this up too."
I am thrilled with seeing Tiffany in this magic mayhem tourney and the hijinks we got to follow with her. Also will she ever see lilyfeather again?? Don't leave me hanging, I gotta see this reunion!