Tsumi vs. Jane Blonde

Tsumi vs. Jane Blonde

47.7%
327 points
Page 1Page 2Page 3

Crit level: No preference

52.3%
359 points
Page 1Page 2Page 3

Crit level: No preference



Critiques & Comments
Please register or log in to comment


yarnwitch
Think Tank
icon
277 comments
# 8   Posted: Nov 16 2017, 11:06 AM
I don't really have any good feedback, but i really enjoyed these! Good job you two!

Happy July 19th! -Reecer6
Artist
icon
250 comments
# 7   Posted: Nov 14 2017, 08:40 AM
Tay: Split parallelism like this is always a super novel and interesting way of developing a story, and the way you've depicted Jane is really fun! But something really doesn't feel impactful about it. The first two and a half pages are pretty slow and light build-up to some sort of conflict between the two—they're going in opposite directions, after all, with entirely opposite viewpoints about their duty—and then the final panel is basically just telling me "and then they did the thing and it went okay." I'm not sure what about it is making me feel that way, but it just isn't satisfying to me. And I guess in that way, it didn't feel like anything happened?

Kent: I really do like how much storyline and development you can push into so few pages, even so much that you kind of had room to spare in your last page; that sort of density is something I'm a fan of. The plot itself is pretty smart, having Tsumi's whole character in mind. Something about Jane's first line in page 2 panel 6 is really entertaining. It's just really solid, and I'd like to see what happens after Tsumi leaves her lupine friends IN THE DUST to head to VARIOUS EXOTIC LOCALES AROUND THE WORLD!

otakutaylor
Artist
icon
179 comments
# 6   Posted: Nov 13 2017, 12:20 PM
Thanks so much kent! Your comic was awesome~ and I sincerely appreciate that you went back and did so much with Tsumi's story. It means a lot to me to know what happened back in upheaval was interesting enough to bring up again. ^_^

I'm glad you lined Jane's wire trick. Tried to think of something for how a ex-spy might fall back into an old habit. Namely, looking sexy while saving peoples lives. hehe.

Mister Kent
Artist
icon
941 comments
# 5   Posted: Nov 13 2017, 07:14 AM
Thanks for the challenge OtakuTaylor! I lobe drawing Tsumi and hope I did her justice!

I love your use of Jane--rappelling down in just a towel is definitely something Jane would do! :) I thought you had some good perspective use too. Great job!

otakutaylor
Artist
icon
179 comments
# 4   Posted: Nov 12 2017, 05:29 PM
Ah, sorry guys. I guess I didn't realize how much stuff I tried to imply happened that didn't come across. Especially with the lead in from the previous comic.  To clarify: Tsumi's outfit comes from her being a member of Wulf, and it was introduced in the summer collab, though it's abilities are being first demonstrated here.  And her being left behind was because in the previous comic she had collapsed, and was still recovering.  Both things I should have tried to communicate better.

Pita
Think Tank
icon
168 comments
# 3   Posted: Nov 12 2017, 05:16 PM
OK LET'S DIG INTO THIS!

TAYLOR--Your visuals are pretty good, but I don't quite grasp what's going on.  I know this is following right after your round with Gossamer Swan, but why can't Tsumi leave with the rest of WULF?  Do they not notice that she's gone from their ranks?
But that's a good use of her barrier ability to trampoline to the inter-dimensional rift in the sky.  That was some smart thinking!

KENT-- I like that you used Tsumi's mortality as a drive to approach Jane's workplace.  I like that Jane Blonde extended a hand out to her to create a greater impact on the world as a do-gooder.  And I like that Tsumi decided herself to forgive her sister for such a high-stress situation that would cause a deep rift between them.  It played to my sensitive side pretty dang well.
I would have liked to have seen the actual closure between the sisters, tho.  Tsumi's time is limited.

Desichan
Think Tank
icon
181 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 12 2017, 05:15 PM
@Otakutaylor

I actually genuinely wonder what that outfit Tsumi has is for. I get the feeling the story in the comics you've been making, need a lot of prior knowledge from some of her older comics. As a result I don't think I got as much enjoyment as other people. You clearly have a really good grasp on anatomy and story telling and the like and its super impressive, but I feel like your coloring could use some work. A lot of the comics look very dull, but then you see one of the main characters who are incredibly bright. The palettes don't hurt my eyes, but I feel like they could definitely use work. I think if you research and experiment with coloring, it'd really help you even figure out ways to use it to bring more impact into your work, and make things stand out more. But yeah again, its really impressive to see how you draw musculature, and I'm pretty amazed by your skill at that.

Mister Kent,

I actually really like your compositions for the pages, and your usage of perspective is immensely impressive. I feel like some things to work on would be your line width. It varies a lot at times, but not always in a good way. For example on page two, at the top right, the lines are WAY too thick, and its a huge contrast to other pages. It may be something good to play with, but either way your comic was pretty neat to see.

JCee
Artist
icon
358 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 4 2017, 03:02 PM
YAAASS

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Nov 18th, 2017
Votes Cast: 19
Page Views: 487
Winner: Mister Kent
 

Add to Playlist -

 
 

Newest Comments -


Newest Characters -

 
Elijah (Eli) MikhailovDairyuRae and BlueCharlie Rosenberg"Faceless" FurioIrene VilanovaHajire Cloud & BeamSteinBombotCount BurmeisterVincent VasquezKoop & El Cuervo JR.
 

Open Challenges -

 
No open challenges
Create a new challenge
 

Random Comic -



Latest Topics -

 
All News, All The Time 
Last updated: Staff Bot - Jul 18, 2019, 02:20 PM
LGBT+ Jam 
Last updated: js4544329 - Jul 18, 2019, 04:54 AM
The June-July 2019 Blind Date Jam 
Last updated: G.Lo - Jul 16, 2019, 08:20 AM
BOOTCAMP ROUND ROBIN EVENT Signup Thread 
Last updated: Orion - Jul 16, 2019, 12:20 AM
Hello to everyone 
Last updated: ruti - Jul 12, 2019, 04:44 AM
 

Latest Members -


Users online -

 
77 Guests, 1 User


[]

Most Online Today: 116.
Most Online Ever: 1,050 (Aug 30, 2015, 02:43 AM)

 

Original site Copyright 2002-2017 Kevin Birtcher All characters and content Copyright 2002-2017 their respective owners Theme by SMFTricks - Modified by Brittney Scott & Jordan Bobo