2017 Tag Team Tournament, Round 2 / and Black Swan vs. Nyasuu and Pluto

2017 Tag Team Tournament, Round 2 — and Black Swan vs. Nyasuu and Pluto

by and JCee

49.7%
2108 points
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by Julz and Chimaeric

50.3%
2130 points
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Flutterbyes
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# 14   Posted: Apr 12 2017, 05:03 PM
Fukur0 and Jaykat: This was a nice comic about watching TV and chatting.... and fighting flying women who are rendered very nicely.

Julz and Chimaeric: ... wow that got violent. And the dream and creepy power visual effect was super rad and twisted. Although... I don't get why the face gets all cute on page 9, unless I'm misreading which part is the mouth.

Radji
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# 13   Posted: Apr 11 2017, 04:30 AM
team spacekitty:  ...WOWZA
MILLER'S CORPSE TO KINGDOM HIGH! HANGING GUTS !! BLOOD !!! AAAAAAAAHHHH!!!
so Nyasuu gonna be an hermit and shit? poor lil space baby was hurt in the process, it makes me SO MAD

Team french:  seems like things always get fucked up wherever Fool goes... I wanna see this potato be happy ^^ Swan, srsly, the harder you try, the harder you get hit ^^

Jiisuri
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# 12   Posted: Apr 9 2017, 04:08 AM
Team Fukat: Alright so, good work with the art there, and the overall pace of the story. Simple to read and to the point. My only issue here is something that is, unfortunately, vague even to myself so bear with me as I attempt to vocalise this feeling I can't really explain very well. In particular, the plot didn't feel like it had much weight to it. I didn't feel enough of a dramatic stake to the characters and the plot felt like it ended in a way that felt like "well this happened". That said however, it was still a fine comic and I understand that writing is a hard thing to do, so good work!

Team Julric: Pretty good job here! I enjoyed the wild art style at places, and the comic was easy to follow yet dynamic. I will have to point out that somethings it goes TOO dynamic at the cost of reading flow and clarity. For example, Pg 5 panel 4 could be a little wider and with more of Nyasuu's face to make it more clear it's Nyasuu and not some llady's back view with arms on hips, and pg 6 panel 3's word balloons cut into panel 1 and forced my eyes to skip past panel 2. Be careful of these things. Good job otherwise.

Fred v2.0.1
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# 11   Posted: Apr 8 2017, 03:49 PM
Fukat; there's something really odd about this rendition of Fool, it doesn't seem to match what I've come to see her as, and I kinda love it, personally. The overall look is pretty nice in fact, and I enjoyed every line out of Pluto's mouth. The structure of the story was lacking for me, though. It all seemed to be cobbled together from coincidental elements and I'm not a fan of that. For example, Tiga just happens to grumpy by swan, who just goes "oh no, the general direction of my house" and decides that's decidedly a threat.

Julric; your work really does go together beautifully, I think. I like where you were going with the whole horrible bloody mess, but it lacked in dynamism and chaos to really bring it there. It still reads, but I think you could have pushed it .

PyrasTerran
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# 10   Posted: Apr 7 2017, 12:42 PM
Team Darkswan: There's definitely improvement in this one over last time, though not fully consistent, many of the room shots still have confused lighting (it feels like some kind of texture is also fading the lines a bit too much sometimes) and while facial variation for the other characters is good, Fool and Swan's faces feel particularly swappable, one just looks grumpier than the other. But keep at it

Team Spacecat: Balancing this one with the last round it feels like the 2nd half of a Tarantino film, where the plot dives into serious town and gets bloody and visceral. The opposing characters still aren't written too great and feel like a tag along for this plot between pluto and nyasuu that seems to have literally and figuratively blown up, and not sure where it can lead from here. The art is beautiful and I am really into the rough and detail look though i may be in the minority for that, I didn't get lost visually


Happy May 22nd! -Reecer6
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# 9   Posted: Apr 7 2017, 10:25 AM
Fuay - This is another comic where I just have nothing to really say about the art, because it's great and perfect. Especially in the magic hand scenes, the blue glow adds a really nice dramatic mystique. I guess all that I *can* say is that the highlighting on the linework often looks like it's just a very bright day and I'm having a hard time seeing through the sun, especially on a yellow background like Swan's studio, which is a bit prohibitive to me actually being able to look at the art. So I guess I DID have something to say. But it still looks really nice, despite the fact that I keep squinting at it! Story's super fun and the dialogue's great, and also gets across some nice subtle nuances in character, so I have nothing to complain about there.

Chiulz - The style here makes all your energy-filled and psychedelic panels AMAZING! But in return, it does make the rest of the comic a bit loose in comparison, especially to how it was split up last round. I feel like there's probably a bit of texture you could've added to the sky as well, because otherwise, most of your corporeal backgrounds look a smidgen flat, but overall, it still does look great! Storywise, I really feel like this is a vast improvement over round 1 [eyes emoji] [eyes emoji] [eyes emoji] even if it meant compromising space for gags. Less technically happened, but much more was done for Nyasuu and Pluto's characters, and I can actually believe Fool and Swan aren't cleverly orchestrated straw puppets. The bit where Nyasuu takes back control from Tiga ESPECIALLY, MAN that pulled me in.

      Edited Apr 7 2017,  10:28 AM by Happy May 22nd! -Reecer6

Kozispoon
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# 8   Posted: Apr 6 2017, 11:12 PM
TEAM BIRB- Round 2 and as the players narrow down, its cool to see those left taking inspiration from one another and almost turning this into a big ol' epic multi part story. I love the fact y'all start with a news report from the kaiju fight, then ramp it up to the Creamimi tsunami cutting out the footage. I just think its super rad these events are all going down in tandem- really makes the world feel more real that its all not center stage and that there are 'meanwhiles' going on, so good on ya!
Overall, I dug your coloring- especially in the first couple of pages. I dunno if it was its simplicity, warmth or both, but it really made your guys' inkwork stand out all the more this round. Oh, and speaking of inks- your designs for buildings are super keen. You really give your version of void city a nice futuristic feel.
You guys started something intriguing Round 1- especially with sullen old Fool and her myyyysterious means of surviving near anything. I was kind of amped to see the relationship between her and Swan develop and have things unfold, but this round progression wise fell flat for me. Pluto and Fool feel more like an afterthought which I found myself trying to nudge off the page in favor of wanting to go back and see Swan bust out in full windy glory her brawl with Tyga. And when the brawl was brought back home, to see a formidable foe like Tiga get taken out by a falling body, to me, felt anti climactic. If it was that easy, the taxi cab driving Swan would've made short work of her threat and this comic would be crazy short, lol

TEAM STAR KITTY- Hnng these pages were big, but inconveniences aside, I can see why. Y'all packed some seeeerious detail in these- like to the extreme that it makes sense that you'd want the reader to pore over copious details. The opening dream sequence is STUNNING. Like, for reals. I fully expected another gag comic, so it's nice to see these serious and artful beats from you guys. Speaking of plot beats, I'm kind of thrown by dream Nyasuu's outright refusal to help Tiga only to wake from her fever dream and help Tiga? Why do exactly as she was asked after putting up such a rad front saying no? Then we get to the next page where she is doing this for Miller, while simultaneously removing an obstacle for Tiga? I'm just not sure I follow here.
Still for all the personal plot sputterings, I dug the humor and action that went on here. I think you two have found your groove in ridiculousness and tweaked it back some since round 1.


Corn Of The Breads
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# 7   Posted: Apr 6 2017, 01:51 PM
I can already tell this is going to be one of the more closer ones this round, also Dead Miller has died... again, rest well sweet prince you will be missed v.v both the arts and stories for these were so good its hard for me to give critique without going to an area of being somewhat nitpicky sounding, these were both really fun cant wait to see how this plays out.

Rhimwill
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# 6   Posted: Apr 6 2017, 10:29 AM
Fukur0 and Jay: This comic is gorgeous. I really like how you dealt with the city skylines, especially in the first section. There were a few shots where it was not quite clear what was going on. For example, in Page 2 when Pluto says "Seems sturdy enough", I wasn't sure what part of the building she was referring to. Perhaps if she had been moving toward the balcony it would have been clearer. Also, when Nyasuu senses Fool's presence in page 5 it is not quite clear that's what's happening because she appears to be noticing something off-panel without us ever getting to see what it is. A shot of the apartment building might have helped clarify that. I loved all the cute cameos and acknowledgement of all the other TTT plotlines going on. Haha, it's surprising that Void City even has enough emergency operators for Fool's call to get through at the end XD

Julz and Chimaeric: This comic also is gorgeous. The active, energetic characters and psychedelic coloring are choice. The more natural background elements, like trees and rocks, do get a little too rough and sketchy and make it harder to focus on the characters in the landscape-heavy scenes. differentiating the line width and quality between the characters and the background elements might help the characters stand out a little more. I'm really admiring those action sequences. And POOR PLUTO! D': Good thing Desperados are tough enough to take that kind of beating.

Julz
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# 5   Posted: Apr 6 2017, 08:44 AM
I did color and helped with the wtiting aaand the lettering. Eric did the art and editted the script to his liking. ;3 enjoy our masterpiece

Julz
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# 4   Posted: Apr 5 2017, 11:47 AM
submitted ;3

JCee
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# 3   Posted: Apr 3 2017, 08:17 PM
*looks at amount of time remaining*

==HARDCORE CONCENTRATION MODE: ENGAGED==


JCee
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# 2   Posted: Mar 23 2017, 03:02 PM
Well...let's do this then.

MyHatsEatPeople
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# 1   Posted: Mar 23 2017, 02:24 PM
GET FIGHTIN' LADIES.

Comic Details -

 
Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Apr 12th, 2017
Votes Cast: 47
Page Views: 1003
Winner: Julz and Chimaeric
 

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