SlimeGirls never die... / Smiley the Slime Goo Thingy
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# 2
Posted:
Sep 12 2016, 08:25 AM
SLIME TIME
# 1
Posted:
Sep 12 2016, 07:10 AM
Ohoho! Damn creepy! But Smiley is so adorable! Your lineart and panels get better and better each comic, as well as your shading and coloring! Page 3 was my favorite, great use of perspective and camera angles! XD
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I'd say the biggest crit I've got is with your shading. Using black as a shadow color tends to flatten things out a bit, or give it a very sorta generic light-source. It's a sewer! Maybe light reflecting off the sewer water gives the whole place a dim blue glow; then just use the opposite color to shade! Blue light? Warm shadows. Yellow light? Cool shadows. It might seem a bit backwards, but it really helps flesh out the world a bit and make it pop.
And I'm a big fan of your venture into cool, gorey, panels, but they definitely work better with a slow build. Like, having the flesh and muscle slowly peel away like paint, or bubble off into a puddle like an egg. That's the stuff. Otherwise it's over too quick before the audience has time to register the "Oh Sweet Jesus No" factor. And maybe consult those old-timey anatomical drawings for their super-tight-detail in the muscles. The real-er it feels, the better.
But overall, a totally marked improvement from your previous stuff, and I'm always down to see more!