Intro Story / Gale Garland

Intro Story — Gale Garland

by Rikun


65%
Page 1Page 2Page 3Page 4

Crit level: No preference



Critiques & Comments
Please register or log in to comment


Kozispoon
Approval Committee
icon
1046 comments
# 6   Posted: Sep 2 2016, 08:27 PM
Oh you know my thinks- I typed at length in your feedback email when this was in approvals, so no sense repeating myself. Suffice to say-welcome! Hope this little Gale raises hell ;D

Shen
Global Moderator
icon
1274 comments
# 5   Posted: Aug 29 2016, 09:03 PM
You finally got her in! Great job! Aside from the occasional wonky perspective I think this is among the highest quality comics youve produced on the site, cant wait to see gale in action!

PyrasTerran
Community Manager
icon
1413 comments
# 4   Posted: Aug 29 2016, 03:13 PM
this is a great piece of work coming from you and I hope we see this level of quality moving forward. Listen to folks' advice, take what you can, and keep on improving, hope to see this girl in a battle sooner rather than later


petarvee
Artist
icon
83 comments
# 3   Posted: Aug 28 2016, 03:35 PM
You made The Wizard of Oz fresh and interesting without feeling too much like a rip-off. So kudos to you on that! And on page 2, that twister's lookin fresh-as-fuk. My two big notes are faces and architecture. You've got a better handle on figures and actions than on facial expressions. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing. But seeing the really nice shots of Gale running and cowering right next to her "shocked" face, really highlights the gap. Mostly that the expressions look a bit generic. Like they'd fit anyones face, or like they came out of a book. There's nothing about Gale's big expressions that reads unique to Gale. She could be an ugly crier, a fainter, someone who pales at the sight of danger, she could get barfy, she could bite her lip, she could grind her teeth, etc. Little things unique to her to really convince us she's a person over a character. And the other note is to just put a bit more time into your cityscapes. The shot of Void City on the last page looks comparatively wonky, especially for something made of concrete and steel. But overall, good job!

Elyan
Artist
icon
70 comments
# 2   Posted: Aug 28 2016, 10:54 AM
i think this is great as an intro. the wizard of oz vibe really comes along. i somehow would have liked her forms be shown in that little running sequence as memories popping up... but its in the ref.
i believe you could have found a better way to paint that tornado but other than that i think you did a good job over all.
keep practicing those effects and backgrounds and this will get even better.

i´m curious how you play her out.

Radji
Artist
icon
518 comments
# 1   Posted: Aug 27 2016, 12:26 PM
daaaaaamn, unfortunatly for you Gale, Void is no Oz... it's not even in Kansas, lol ^^
we had a diminishing ratio of magicals lately, glad to see even more of them come to magic up things !

Comic Details -

 
Ended: Sep 3rd, 2016
Votes Cast: 25
Page Views: 557
 

Add to Playlist -

 
 

Newest Comments -


Newest Characters -

 
Elijah (Eli) MikhailovDairyuRae and BlueCharlie Rosenberg"Faceless" FurioIrene VilanovaHajire Cloud & BeamSteinBombotCount BurmeisterVincent VasquezKoop & El Cuervo JR.
 

Open Challenges -

 
No open challenges
Create a new challenge
 

Random Comic -



Latest Topics -

 
All News, All The Time 
Last updated: Staff Bot - Jul 18, 2019, 02:20 PM
LGBT+ Jam 
Last updated: js4544329 - Jul 18, 2019, 04:54 AM
The June-July 2019 Blind Date Jam 
Last updated: G.Lo - Jul 16, 2019, 08:20 AM
BOOTCAMP ROUND ROBIN EVENT Signup Thread 
Last updated: Orion - Jul 16, 2019, 12:20 AM
Hello to everyone 
Last updated: ruti - Jul 12, 2019, 04:44 AM
 

Latest Members -


Users online -

 
48 Guests, 2 Users


[]

Most Online Today: 98.
Most Online Ever: 1,050 (Aug 30, 2015, 02:43 AM)

 

Original site Copyright 2002-2017 Kevin Birtcher All characters and content Copyright 2002-2017 their respective owners Theme by SMFTricks - Modified by Brittney Scott & Jordan Bobo