@rittzler: I cannot say anything that hasn't been said before, but kudos for, despite it being somewhat sketchy and not complete, still manage to tell an entertaining story! I loved the character interaction between Karrin and Navy, they complement each other so well! And the stakes were high at the battle! Last panel of page 10 is my favorite.

@petarvee: What can I say that is not "absolutely gorgeous"? The camera angles look great and the colors! I love the second panel of page 5, Karrin's face while looking through the hole in the racket Navy made. I agree with Kozispoon that, I know, it is your style and you are really pro, but it'd be interesting to see you try something else too, like maybe lineart with more noticeable line widths? Because I'd love to see how you'd pull it off!

Anyway, great work both of you!

I got an hour and 40 minute to critique this. Also I'm three glasses into a bottle of wine. PERFECT CONDITIONS

RITTZLER- This is a stupendous amount of work. The sheer volume alone is definitely something to note. I'm glad to see that you made the most of your quantity and told a fully realized story. You took not only the big cool concept on campus using the flood, but infused it with the consequences of Mags moonstones. That adversary even looks loosely like a void character that used to tromp around these parts, so it was a nice, if not unintentional homage. You go into these battles expecting the opponents to fight each other, so it was a nice twist on things to see them team up to defeat the big bad.

It's just a shame that due to your quantity, your quality suffered. I get the feeling you worked linear (begining to end) on your comics as the last couple pages dip in quality and panel layout. Your strength definitely lies in the begining pages. I also really wish you'd used more blacks. some fill blacks and shadows would've really broken up all the white you had from page to page. If nothing else it would've enhanced the dynamic you were going for with this teamwork romp.

PETARVEE- That page detailing the boileroom of the ship is grand. you have such an eye for environment and design that made that peek really creative and fun. Also Karrin, you feisty little minx. will every voider pass through your bed before the flood is out?

Speaking of love and good vibes, you've heard it once, twice and you'll hear it again. Definitely agree with the 'theme' of Karrin getting stale. You make your readers arch an eyebrow of interest with the ball league jacket (is it really a ball league? maybe its a gang? or robot ship crew? What is she up to/planning?), but we've talked about this via discord and I've gotten a peek at what you have in store, so its clear you're taking the critique to heart.

Granted you're still new-ish, and you're only a couple comics in. You have such an established method of coloring your pages, and a solid direction, it'd be kinda interesting to see you use void to experiment a little. I'd love to see you shift to a new color palate, or even a different method of coloring altogether. Maybe even try some new inking styles.

Ritzzler: I'm glad to see someone finally incorporate the magic rocks into their flood story! I agree with Elyan that your pages are very over-packed with small panels that are zoomed in too close to see enough of the action. Also, some of the actions are drawn out over more panels than is necessary, like on page 2, when Navy is pointing out the thing floating in the water, the only shot you really needed was panel 5, and you could remove panels 3 and 4. It would save space and drawing time as well as improve the pacing. I also noticed a lot of dialogue that could be edited down to save time and reduce number of panels. Like, in page 7 when Navy says "Okay we're out of the water..." Since the audience already saw them get out of the water, Navy doesn't have to restate it, she can just say "Now what?" Try to focus on what parts of your dialogue are actually giving us new information about the situation or the characters, and trim out the extra. I love all the challenging poses you've got going on because of the action sequences, and I also really like seeing all the experimentation going on in with your panel layouts

Petarvee: As everyone has been saying – beautiful, professional-quality pages. Though I have to agree with Pyras about the plot being very similar to your previous comic with Park. I hope that in the future we get to see Karrin going on some different kinds of adventures. Maybe see some of the repercussions of her habit of sleeping around with some jealous-ex drama? XD

ritzzler: i have one thin to say.... VIOLENCE !!! mWHAHAHAHAHAHA

Pertavee: I absolutly LOVED the colors
and the sass. MY GOD the sass

ritzzler: its amazing how much you got to do page count wise. good comic there. primarly i have to say you could use some more thought in panel design. the angle and zoom in some scenes are just not fitting the panel size which in such high amounts of panels per page gives a really packed but unbalanced impression. some play with extremer zoom in and zoomed out scenes would probably have helped. my other point is the colouring attempt. most people would maybe say its great you at least tried to pack in some colours but this is very rushed and doesnt really fit in with the rest. i´m sure that would have looked better in a strict monochrome style and a bit more blacks to push the contrast and guide the readers eye in places.
anyways. all in all good effort with nice amount of potential

petarvee: that is so solid. i had actually a hard time voting cause i on my side think in your style that pretty much as good as it gets without seeming to forced to be fancy. on the other hand a little more fancy is always something i look at in awe. as i said im not fully sure. but hell this was an sweet entertaining read.
keep it up and hopefully there will be more soon.

rittzler: Good on you to work as hard as you could to get as much of this done as you could. You got a little over-ambitious, this story could be told with fewer pages, and the shark monster's design doesn't seem like it was fully thought out as it changes from scene to scene. Your effort is however recognized and appreciated, the last comic she was in was really just a big fight so it's great to see some character start to shine with this girl. Excited to see your next battle

petarvee: you know that really it's just the rest of us taking notes on your pages rather than the other way around right?? Just like last time these pages are beautiful. Narrative-wise though I am hoping that for your next battle the dynamic of the relationship between the two characters is a little fresher, as this one feels derivative of your last battle (I'd know, I was there!) and plays out with many of the same beats

Keep on rocking you two!

WHOOF ok i couldn't get it 100% but it's close enough
i only hope that it's adequate lol

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