Fooray VS Sushi / Sushi

Fooray VS Sushi — Sushi


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jesse
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# 6   Posted: Dec 3 2006, 10:01 PM
Um... since you didn\'t have a time limit, this being a BB and all... why didn\'t you post something finished?

luniara
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# 5   Posted: Nov 29 2006, 12:05 AM
Prob the first person I\'ve seen to actually go through with posting it as a beyond battle. (You should put -continued in Sushi vs Fooray- or something.

Anyways, third and forth page- I was like \"wtf just happened\". You need some work with explaining whats goin on in your panels. For example- Show him just crashing through- a reaction shot- then him on the ground. To me it just looks like he was there already despite how you have a sound effect on page 3. Also- BIGGER panels. Show some details and BIGNESS! <3

 Both you and Foo shoulda gave more reasoning as to why the brute and Foo are fighting. Maybe you\'ll do that later on so it\'s cool. Helpful advice rather then a hard crit, my dear. Wonderful work! I\'d like to see you around Void more.

YaRoof
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# 4   Posted: Nov 28 2006, 09:25 PM
glad you finally got something up. . .a little sad its only half of what i expected but im glad all the same. hope to see more in the future. . yur line work here was really a step up from what ive seen from you. proud of ya, but keep em comin

-FoO

Hero Karma
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# 3   Posted: Nov 28 2006, 08:32 PM
it was orginally a 2 part story between sushi and fooray, but sushi didn\'t get her stuff in on time or something.  See Fooray for the other half.

DeB
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# 2   Posted: Nov 28 2006, 07:54 PM
I feel stupid :P there was no oponant!!!!
LOL

DeB
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# 1   Posted: Nov 28 2006, 07:52 PM
not bad on the technique, the drawing is GOOD. but to be honest, the story telling and pacing need a lot of improvement. I almost coudn\'t follow you story.

to bad you opponant didn\'t show uo!

peace
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