2016 Invitational: Round 1 / Vespa Valencia vs. Jacques

2016 Invitational: Round 1 — Vespa Valencia vs. Jacques

52.3%
1093 points
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by Qsy

47.7%
998 points
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Ishtar Dragon
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# 16   Posted: Jul 4 2016, 07:28 PM
@Flutterbyes - I think all the chat already has heard me gushing about this ship, but let me gush about this ship a bit more. It was such an amazing way to end this comic. Speaking of which, I also found pretty interesting how you started the comic, right into the action! The characters were so vividly written too! And it was so funny! Special mentions: Vespa's tiny stabby knife, THE CAMEOS (Havoc's face and Kao5 almost having a heart attack in the bg omg), FREAKING GUMSHOE, DALE, omg this was so much fun. I loved it.

@Qsy - oh my god, your art is so beautiful as usual! Cute and charming story, talk about "short and sweet"! And I love the last panel in page 3! Great work!

Kozispoon
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# 15   Posted: Jul 3 2016, 10:53 PM
Amazing effort from the both of you. not only did both battles have really great art, but both stories were really robust and rather funny!

FLUTTERBYES- You are coming into another tournament yet again as a heavyweight. You have such a great knack for comics, humor and interpreting other peoples characters- not to mention your own. I think Vespa is quickly going to become one of my favorites. Your lineart is polished ,but still carries that effortless loosey goosey feel that lends itself to a flow from page to page. This is definitely another showing of impressive pagecount for the week deadline you were alotted, so kudos. I can't wait to see more from you.

QSY- I was ecstatic when you decided to join the invitational and this first round is definitely an indication of what I expected. your traditional work dazzles in all your art and pin ups, and does the same in spades when its in comic form. Its clear your coloring and style is labor and time intensive, so I hope you find a happy medium that works well, but also allows you you bust out some fully complete comics. You're no stranger to comic tournaments though, so I have no doubt you are going to come back in your next battle much stronger.

mortooncian
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# 14   Posted: Jul 1 2016, 10:20 AM
Flutterbyes: DAT GUMSHOE AND DALE

so good. I'm so glad. The lineart is extremely polished and though you could use more backgrounds, the composition and presentation is so well-organized, I don't even mind!

Qsy: The colors are very smooth and solid-- the only thing is, the story is pretty lacking and minimal. it IS possible to tell a compelling story in very few pages-- a good example of this to read is the LSDT/Light Speed Death Tournament. Once you can present a strong enough narrative, you'll be an intimidating opponent to face!

Great job!

Futreblot
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# 13   Posted: Jul 1 2016, 08:23 AM
I can not critique these, I am not worthy!

Astro Sean
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# 12   Posted: Jun 30 2016, 11:14 AM
DALE CAMEO! YES!

MaxieWest
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# 11   Posted: Jun 29 2016, 08:30 PM
@Flutterbyes; As the others said I would have really loved to see some backgrounds in your comic, but it didn't suffer too much without them. You're expressions and line quality were really great to see and I just had a really fun time reading it.

@Qsy; Short but sweet. I wish that it was fully colored but what you have is great. In particular I'm in love with your lineart its bold and clean and it really feels professional. Your story was really fun and unique as well.

Rainbow Ichi
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# 10   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 11:20 PM
Flutterbyes:
I loved page 4, creative use of single panel with several actions <3

Qsy:
Your inking and coloring is top notch :D

Kizuato
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# 9   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 09:31 PM
...looks like i need to pull out the good markers to compete with this

Shen
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# 8   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 05:05 PM
oh my god i ship it so much XD

Inksword
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# 7   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 01:57 PM
@Flutterbys: This comic is an ambitious length for a week and you pulled it off without too much of a drop in quality! The gags were all funny and you had a great dynamic going between the two of them. I do wish a few more pages were like page 6, with less white space and a fuller range of shades. Also yes what Bobo said about backgrounds.

@Qsy: A simple but effective story! I really like the strong blacks you used on page one, maybe even more on the panel(s) that didn't have the white highlights on them. I was disappointed to see them disappear on the unfinished pages but what can you do :P You do good posing and your characters are super consistent so kudos on that!

Bobo
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# 6   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 12:27 PM
@Flutterbyes: That was a cute comic! The story was simple, but fun, and the gags were as charming as they were funny. All I want to see from you (other than just more comics in general) is greater attention to detail on your backgrounds. Zoom out, give us a sense of place; make sure we don't get lost. That wasn't a huge deal in this comic because the place was kind of unimportant to the plot, but a comic can always be improved with some nice establishing shots and good backgrounds!

@Qsy: What a fun read! It was really short, but I loved the way these two characters interacted. Your traditional coloring is still awesome, and I wish you'd been able to finish it all. I'd give you similar advice to Flutterbyes, which is to zoom out some more and give us a little more background to help establish location better. You actually had some decent backgrounds, so I think it's more about just zooming out so we can see the bigger picture of where everyone is and stuff. Anyways, I'm excited to see what other comics you make here on VOID in the future!

Bobo
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# 5   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 08:15 AM
Fixed Qsy's page order. Sorry for the technical difficulties!

Qsy
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# 4   Posted: Jun 28 2016, 06:54 AM
oh boy the ship is strong.
I can't beat that >8U

      Edited Jun 28 2016,  06:54 AM by Qsy

Julz
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# 3   Posted: Jun 22 2016, 04:22 PM
manage your time wisely!! I hope to see great things from both of you.

Kozispoon
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# 2   Posted: Jun 20 2016, 06:22 PM
Oh no, I love both of these characters.
 WHY MUST YOU BATTLE TO BREAK my HEART? ;3;

Shen
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# 1   Posted: Jun 20 2016, 05:28 PM
AAA good luck!!

Comic Details -

 
Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Jul 4th, 2016
Votes Cast: 50
Page Views: 685
Winner: Flutterbyes
 

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