Don't Worry About The Government / The Introvert
Critiques & Comments
Toxic Toothpick
132 comments
# 6
Posted:
Jan 24 2006, 10:31 PM
The thumbnails are very clever...wouldnt change that,...moving on... i\'m not as hardcore as snakemeat and am missing the backbone to bash the comic down right and straightup, im more laid back. What i will say is that one page 3 the frames are just a little TOO chaotic for mah taste, your style in general is good, you\'ve definalty got the expressions down-pat. I can\'t say the same for your frame flow...yah see, what i like to call the square-by-square look may be just what your into, but to the eyes of some other artists its almost a sure fire sign of a novice at his/her best. Square-by-square frames are usually lacking action...movment...power...thrust........I am by no means calling YOU a novice just noting that in this world, thats how it sometimes ends up, people act crazy and preppy sometimes...go figure...=.=\' Keep up the good work man, I hope to possibley fight you in the future maybe!!!
# 5
Posted:
Jan 13 2006, 01:47 PM
As far as telling the story of how the quality of work progresses from page to page; Yeah, I\'m total agrreement. Those Thumbnails are Awsome.
# 4
Posted:
Jan 10 2006, 08:38 PM
yah, I\'m pretty confused... but those thumbnails are awesome!
# 3
Posted:
Jan 7 2006, 11:41 PM
Actually part of the idea here is to expand upon my admittedly minimal intro comic. Of course the story will develop from this point, but you can\'t expect me to rush it without building a more solid foundation for the plot. Otherwise, I have no idea what you\'re talking about. Except that maybe you\'re feeling groovy?
# 2
Posted:
Jan 7 2006, 10:14 PM
Your Panels are so freeform.
SLow down you move to fast, you gotto make the moments last, just kicken along the cobble stone, haven a good time and feelin groovy.
I\'ve seen work similar to yours in one of those free City Papers full of Advertisements for underground band shows dating services, horescope etc. Don\'t let this get to you remember that recent movie american splender wait no thats not it never mind(my grandmother told me not to say that).
Really guy if this here work had been your intro sequentials?...
I\'m not trying to be bitter. Just Frank. Quite if need be.
I liked the more recent beyond you did.
And keep in mind that I just entered a fighter whom was rejected.
I\'m striving to redoo the whole entry \'cause I like the Character develpment.
You might consider something like that for this here work.
I\'m not even going to vote on this. Perhaps the others will think it work crit-ing.
Please, take no offense.
SLow down you move to fast, you gotto make the moments last, just kicken along the cobble stone, haven a good time and feelin groovy.
I\'ve seen work similar to yours in one of those free City Papers full of Advertisements for underground band shows dating services, horescope etc. Don\'t let this get to you remember that recent movie american splender wait no thats not it never mind(my grandmother told me not to say that).
Really guy if this here work had been your intro sequentials?...
I\'m not trying to be bitter. Just Frank. Quite if need be.
I liked the more recent beyond you did.
And keep in mind that I just entered a fighter whom was rejected.
I\'m striving to redoo the whole entry \'cause I like the Character develpment.
You might consider something like that for this here work.
I\'m not even going to vote on this. Perhaps the others will think it work crit-ing.
Please, take no offense.
# 1
Posted:
Jan 7 2006, 08:41 PM
Hehe... interesting indeed... I love the confusing thumbnails. Anyway, you get really close to gesture drawings with the sketchy action... sketchy is ok as long as its controlled sketchy... we need enough clarity for our tiny reader minds to follow it. Anyway, I\'m interested in the conclusion, keep up the good work!
Beyond Battle
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jan 14th, 2006
Votes Cast:
12
Page Views:
1142
Intro Story
King
@ 3:09 PM Mar 28th
Monsters of Nature
Dairyu vs. Rickter & Gus
@ 2:22 PM Mar 28th
Help Needed
Theakon
@ 8:41 AM Mar 28th
Clash of the Chitin 2 Round 2
Myrmidon vs. Husk vs. Spidella Widows vs. Rod Chirpwood vs. Mizz Bonzai
@ 7:31 AM Mar 27th
The End of Extinction
@ 11:35 AM Mar 26th
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
|
293 Guests, 1 User
Most Online Today: 351.
Most Online Ever: 1,184 (Jan 13, 2020, 06:21 PM)