Light Speed Death Tournament, Round 1 / The Prince of Erbium vs. Flower Power

Light Speed Death Tournament, Round 1 — The Prince of Erbium vs. Flower Power

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Kozispoon
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# 13   Posted: Jan 23 2016, 05:49 PM
FAFF- I'll be honest, it wasn't one of my favorites, but I definitely dug the metallic flower arrangement demise at the end. Rather artful for what I expected to be just an all out brawl.

FLUTTERBYES- Its tough to critique this one because I feel some of the pacing and story issues could've been solved with an extra page or two, but here we are with a three page limit. Still though, I loved your inks and the metallic might of your wee robo-gal.

Fearn
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# 12   Posted: Jan 23 2016, 03:48 PM
faffabout: THOSE CROCS haha

Flutterbyes: oh my such a sad ending

Jetty Jay
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# 11   Posted: Jan 22 2016, 02:19 PM
If anything I love the username matchup here, beautiful.

FAFF: I love your style with the colours and everything! I would definitely recommend colouring on separate layers OR by using the increment tool on your Magic Wand selection to just give yourself an extra pixel if either of those are giving you the white artifact - plenty of people can help with either of those if you're not sure. Careful of your flow through the pages - for example, the first page is a bit muddled because we go from Flower Power's bubble into the thing about the rare flower, rather than into the Prince's speech bubble. Remember reading direction defaults left-right/top-bottom, you have to be sneaky if you want to naturally and easily pull someone's eye differently. I was a bit unclear exactly what was happening in the second last panel of the last page, it might have been better to zoom out and show something extending from the Prince's hand a little clearer - because we hadn't had a close up of him before, the change of something new behind his hand wasn't immediately obvious. Love the little details in the foreground and everything though, and Flower Power's fallen shoe was a really nice detail that a lot of people might not have worried about.
 
FLUTTER: Your linework's so full of energy and well formed here, really strong art and love your greytoning. With your linework being so distinctive though, it's really noticeable when you use a different pattern/texture that you perhaps didn't draw/didn't do at the same time (eg. the flower background in the second panel) - though I can understand the time constraint not allowing you to draw all of that to match. As has been mentioned things get a bit unclear towards the end. Zooming out to show the Prince causing havoc rather than just his hand would have been a big help, as would showing the trowel in closer relation to Flower (it's there, but it seems like a background element rather that your eye skims over rather than something important). I don't understand the last line but maybe I am tired. Really nice compositions though, just need to get them flowing better!

Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
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# 10   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 09:38 PM
faf, You work may be simple but bold enough to remind me of Courage the Cowardly dog. You don't mince around but you gave a veritable solid showing. Perhaps more dynamism as you go along? A good show of force from your side.

Flutter you showed us a powerful first rounder. Strong artwork all round that can be improved further still. The pacing could use more love but in conclusion a good first round.

Jolly good show both of you.

Flutterbyes
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# 9   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 03:42 PM
I'm glad you liked my comic, Faffabout! I really wanted to do your character justice. I had a lot of fun drawing the prince and using his attributes. He turned out to be full of potential for fun imagery!

I love that vibe of "The Little Prince" in your comic. It's so fitting!

Charlie
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# 8   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 03:40 PM
FAFFABOUT - I echo the sentiment from far away the comic's colours look pleasing. I almost thought it was gonna look Brandom Graham-esque from the thumbnails, but when I got into the comic there are a lot of really white artifacts around all the lines from the colours. Are you doing the colouring all on the same layer as the lineart? Either way it was a nice simple comic - good first fight!

FLUTTERBYES - nice black and white comic! the composition of the pages though is hard to distinguish what is going on. I think paying more attention to how each panel should flow into eachother will give you a stronger product, as it became hard to follow along by the end. However the last couple panels were super badass. Real good stuff for a first fight!!


otakutaylor
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# 7   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 01:28 PM
Light Speed Critique: faffabout, I liked the flowers growing out of the panels, but I was a bit confused as to the sudden shifts in tone. from sad to autopissed robot I can accept due to programming, but the princes sorrowful tone rather suddenly shifting to making a joke at her demise, seemed to clash. Flutterbyes, while the cut between panel looks awesome, seriously, that shading and forshortening rock, I did not read that initially as throw.

Fred v2.0.1
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# 6   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 06:07 AM
Faffabout - Your colour palette is lovely from a distance, but he implementation is a bit to soft and sloppy. Your switch from the robot being sad to it attacking was also too abrupt. Take your opponent's transition as an example of how to pace it nicely, by taking a moment to naturally get into the character's emotions to transition, rather than suddenly having an artificial countdown.

Flutterbyes - The ending's a bit odd and over the place in terms of pacing/composition, but the build up is good and I dig the art.

faffabout
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# 5   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 03:07 AM
Hey Flutterbyes. I really like how you drew the prince. I was smiling the whole way through reading this. loved it.

Shen
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# 4   Posted: Jan 20 2016, 09:51 PM
well we usually get more than 4 days lol

Flutterbyes
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# 3   Posted: Jan 20 2016, 08:37 PM
I'm... pretty sure I submitted it. That was a wild ride. How do you all do 15 pages of this torture!?

Flutterbyes
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# 2   Posted: Jan 17 2016, 07:23 PM
Wow, what a match up! What a design! This is going to be super interesting to work on! ^_^ See you in threeish days!

Shen
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# 1   Posted: Jan 17 2016, 02:16 AM
GOOD LUCK!! Im super stoked to read these comics!! =D

Comic Details -

 
Type: Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Jan 23rd, 2016
Votes Cast: 35
Page Views: 655
Winner: Flutterbyes
 

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