I like this story and the idea about the fallen gods, and i'm interested to know what this means for 88. I hope this is the start of seeing more of 88 and zedan comics on the site in the near future!
Nibbles- the finished pages look pretty good, but i think some of the pages could have been laid out better, or at least more interestingly... that evenly split page four is a little weird and probably could be more expressive. also, it might have been a good idea to explain why jack is there protecting her for anyone who's unfamiliar, just cause it's been years since that comic.
BentOne- I like your layouts and the colors on the first page and I wish you could have inked the rest, but you covered a lot of ground in those ten pages. Things miiight be moving too fast though. I'm a bit conflicted on zedan's monologue, it's a bit odd how he's talking to himself but it might be hard to tell what's going on without... maybe if it was fully inked it would be easier to see without all the words... but that being said, it works for the sketches you have. I like how full your panels are. I uh... went away from this comment an hour ago and lost my train of thought.
Nice work guys, keep posting!
Dreams of Change / Eighty-eight vs. Zedan Dromer
Critiques & Comments
# 14
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Nov 2 2015, 03:50 PM
# 13
Posted:
Nov 1 2015, 09:27 AM
Eeeeeeee! Thank you, thank you, thank you! You did the bastard right!
# 12
Posted:
Nov 1 2015, 05:42 AM
Similar to Nibbles, I had some setbacks. Freelance work, training at a new job. But all the pages are there, at least penciled in, with all the dialogue.
I'm gonna sleep for a week.
EDIT: I can't believe I missed the detail of Eighty-Eight now having long hair. DAMMIT.
I'm gonna sleep for a week.
EDIT: I can't believe I missed the detail of Eighty-Eight now having long hair. DAMMIT.
# 11
Posted:
Oct 31 2015, 11:34 PM
Something you all should know before you read--Bent One and I are working off the same agree'd upon script--I have the first bit and he the second. Last time I did that was with Doc Pye. Good night and Happy Halloween! See you in the mornin'!
# 10
Posted:
Oct 31 2015, 12:57 PM
I have a few pages I'm finishing up, but I will be uploading on time.
# 9
Posted:
Oct 31 2015, 12:32 PM
I was going to upload early but the kids ran off with my ink one night (I found it in the VAN, how even?) and I was put down by a migraine the next, so instead I'll merely be on time. See ya tonight!
# 8
Posted:
Oct 17 2015, 02:19 PM
Nibbles: Oh! I just noticed it goes up Halloween! Did you do that on purpose?
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Nope, I didn't notice that either. But my half is gonna be CREEPY
# 7
Posted:
Oct 17 2015, 01:55 PM
Oh! I just noticed it goes up Halloween! Did you do that on purpose?
# 6
Posted:
Oct 12 2015, 12:02 AM
OH YES OH YES
# 5
Posted:
Oct 11 2015, 11:43 AM
oh i havent seen Zedan in so long! Great!
# 4
Posted:
Oct 10 2015, 09:06 PM
Sweet! Glad to see this happen! Good luck to both of you!
# 3
Posted:
Oct 10 2015, 09:01 PM
Dragon dreams can't not be rad.
# 2
Posted:
Oct 10 2015, 08:57 PM
Awesome, I can't wait to see both of these characters back in action. Hope you guys make it rad.
# 1
Posted:
Oct 10 2015, 08:44 PM
Whoohoo! FINALLY advancing Eights' plot!
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Fair points Greg. I'll keep them in mind. Thanks for the critique!