Hey Joe, sorry my comic wasn't the best. My scanner decided to be a butt and oh man did my comic suffer for it. I love your comic!

Joe.  You mongrel.  God.  I LOVE it.

Literally Nothin!

I’m gonna echo the echoes and say I wasn’t fond radio part and of the non image wordy parts, but I understand time constraints and the like.
BUT
You got the characters pretty much ON point and I love the expressive faces!
Thanks, its always lovely to have someone else draw your characters and I hope I did justice to Mildred.

Well done!

Everybody else who commented. Thankyou SO much for your words. I love feedback and comliments. It’s the lifeblood of keeping me going and keeping super psyched!


Mrnoitaull

Creepy was definitely the intention. Hopefully depth can be conveyed with tone and some more hatching. I did intend to colour this comic so sort of left the lineart less finished unfortunately.


PyrasTerran

I’m glad you found it weird and fun. That’s exactly what I’d want.

Yes I’ve been thinking about how much I cram into a page. I do like the business. I think it just gives it more vitality but I can’t do this to the extent of communication. I think I will experiment with my next comics of lessening some of the amount of panels per page.


Shen

Entertaining Characters is a massive compliment. I am really focusing on writing at the moment. I don’t see myself as an incredible artist but am trying to focus on what I believe my strengths to be. Hopefully storytelling and conveying empotions well.

I’m super glad you liked it. Feels good to be complimented! ☺


neens

Thanks Neens. I will definitely try to focus on more quality. I intend to do my next comic setting out with the intention of it being non colour and that should help me get it looking ‘cleaner’.

So, focus on making an awesomely drawn non-colour comic trying to get more depth with tone and hatching.

Embrace my busy pages but perhaps give a bit more space between panels and maybe do a few pages with larger panels.

I also showed the comic to some of my non-comic family and friends and there were some definite communication failures.

And also super focus on making a killer story and characterization. I want to wrench all your hearts out and make you fall in love with the characters!

Thanks!

joe- nice! wasn't sure what to expect out of these two but you did good here. I like the chaos and pages packed with panels. I think all you really need is to clean your pages up some, and use some more of the grey/black in certain areas to make things pop!

kichi, pretty big let down I'm afraid /: between the text pages and quality of the drawn pages this doesn't have much going for it.

Jpe: Eyy, havent seen you in a while, good to have you back! I wasnt sure what to make of these characters at first, but theyre actually really entertaining! and you fit a LOT in four pages, you have great detail and fill space well! i think this was a solid comic! (and i feel so bad for porckchop losing his bebeh!)

kichi- the text wall at the end was kind of a let down- you could have down the news reporting narration over images, maybe show where Mildred ended up. i do like how you draw the characters, your peggy is actually sort of hilarious looking which contrasts nicely to the style you were going for with Mildred, which is delightfully creepy. I liked having mildred haunt Porckchop into killing peggy, i just wish it had been more show less tell.

JoeNeary: What a weird and fun little story! There's plenty of detail everywhere and that's appreciated. I would watch out how much you cram per page, consider larger gutter space between the panels to make it easier to move from panel to panel without getting lost.

Nothin: Please don't take this the wrong way; this looks like it was drawn on post-it note paper If the paper was yellow, I would recommend now drawing on that again and sticking to a white sheet or grayscale it digitally, even recycled brown like we see in some of these comics would have been preferable. I'm assuming you didn't have time to finish the comic, because the rest of the story is only words. when your stuff is complete, I know it looks really good, so what you really, really need to focus on is time management. You should have been able to complete 6 pages in 2 weeks even with colors.

Keep it up guys!

Both were creepy which Im sure was the intention.

Nothin, I think you wanted to wrap this up without providing panels which Im not sure if that was due to lack of time or continuing off the News reporting, but it kinda worked in a Hitchcock-y kinda way.

Joe, It's clear that you're going for the noisy look, but with the lack of depth conveyed I red some of the later panels as being bunched or too busy.

Unfortunately I'd like to see both progress cus of the characters.

Thanks Charlie!

"I'm so excited. ANd I just can't hide it! I'm about to lose control and I think I like it!!!"

Hey Nothin! Mildred is a babe! Can't wait to start drawing her.

Hey guys I hope you have a good fight! Good luck