Intro Story / Ultra 88
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# 7
Posted:
Sep 8 2015, 07:05 PM
i can dig it thanks for taking the time
# 6
Posted:
Sep 5 2015, 09:57 PM
graphicDREAMER:
Edit: no the hooded character is him, the dreaded guy is another character. i have to work on my clarity as im a big fan of works that are open to interpretation for instance "Inception" a movie that not many people like but, hey it is what it is lol.
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And finally, I don't think working traditionally is any kind of detriment at all - quite the contrary, I think people generally give even more credit to traditional art around here.
# 5
Posted:
Sep 5 2015, 05:05 PM
Thanks for the crits dudes. Yea i wanted to keep things vague so i could introduce information later, that way id always have content. I see most people use digital methods to do there comics but im not a big fan of that so ill keep it traditional may cost me points in some peoples eyes but im ok with that. I kinda assumed everyone read the bio's before or after reading the comics. But will keep everything in mind as i start working on my first battle.
Edit: no the hooded character is him, the dreaded guy is another character. i have to work on my clarity as im a big fan of works that are open to interpretation for instance "Inception" a movie that not many people like but, hey it is what it is lol.
Edit: no the hooded character is him, the dreaded guy is another character. i have to work on my clarity as im a big fan of works that are open to interpretation for instance "Inception" a movie that not many people like but, hey it is what it is lol.
# 4
Posted:
Sep 5 2015, 03:30 AM
Welcome to Void, Glad to see you're already going into battle!
I liked the overall composition you had going here, it gave this comic a nice flow. My fave panel has to be the one where the dude's dreads flow outside the box
Dino basically summed up the problems I had with how this guy was being introduced in the comic. Reading his bio does clear things up for the viewer, but if you were reading the intro just by itself it got a little confusing.
The colourless parts of the comic feels unfinished compared to the concert panels. even if you didn't intend to put any colour on, I would suggest maybe a cool shade of grey just to make it pop out a little, use it to help emphasize on the lighting!
I liked the overall composition you had going here, it gave this comic a nice flow. My fave panel has to be the one where the dude's dreads flow outside the box
Dino basically summed up the problems I had with how this guy was being introduced in the comic. Reading his bio does clear things up for the viewer, but if you were reading the intro just by itself it got a little confusing.
The colourless parts of the comic feels unfinished compared to the concert panels. even if you didn't intend to put any colour on, I would suggest maybe a cool shade of grey just to make it pop out a little, use it to help emphasize on the lighting!
# 3
Posted:
Sep 4 2015, 11:12 PM
First off, your traditional inks and colors look fantastic. I love your color choices, and the way you've rendered the band is awesome. Your pacing and the way you handled the transition with the narration and creation imagery juxtaposed with the punk band is brilliant, and perfectly done. My only real gripes are that there's no color at all on the creation stuff. Bathing those panels in like, yellow or something, would have made them feel more visually on-par with the performance shots, while still clearly being separate.
Also, I could have used one more page, just to get a clearer idea of who this character is and what he does. I wasn't sure if he's the guy singing, or the hooded dude in the crowd. And is he actually some extra-terrestrial being, or is that just surreal imagery? Is he on drugs? The comic looks top notch, but just a little bit more context would have helped.
That said, I still love looking at this, and can't wait to see your first battle. And what's more, these pages really just make me want to bust out the sharpies and colored markers, and I think that's about the best thing I can say about a piece.
You're on my hitlist.
Edit: Okay, reading his bio again, I see the hooded figure in the crowd is (apparently) a hallucination. Okay, so I'm with ya now. But I definitely would like to have gotten that information from the comic, not the bio. I really feel like the bio is solely for the benefit of other artists who will be handling your character, and to gain some deeper insight or backstory about the character. The intro should always stand alone, and hit the important bullet points clearly.
Also, I could have used one more page, just to get a clearer idea of who this character is and what he does. I wasn't sure if he's the guy singing, or the hooded dude in the crowd. And is he actually some extra-terrestrial being, or is that just surreal imagery? Is he on drugs? The comic looks top notch, but just a little bit more context would have helped.
That said, I still love looking at this, and can't wait to see your first battle. And what's more, these pages really just make me want to bust out the sharpies and colored markers, and I think that's about the best thing I can say about a piece.
You're on my hitlist.
Edit: Okay, reading his bio again, I see the hooded figure in the crowd is (apparently) a hallucination. Okay, so I'm with ya now. But I definitely would like to have gotten that information from the comic, not the bio. I really feel like the bio is solely for the benefit of other artists who will be handling your character, and to gain some deeper insight or backstory about the character. The intro should always stand alone, and hit the important bullet points clearly.
# 2
Posted:
Sep 4 2015, 02:44 PM
Congrats! Let's see some battles, yo!
# 1
Posted:
Sep 4 2015, 10:52 AM
YAY finally in!!!
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