OKAY YOU WON! WE GET IT!

ARE YOU HAPPY NOW YA DONG BAG?

Yeah, thanks for totally blowing my efforts out of the water you son of a bitch

Hey, good work everyone.

Not a big fan personally of critting one week battles either to be honest haha. I feel there is always so much that can just be chalked up to time restraints. I think for the time given you guys both did fantastic and I liked both comics so that's pretty much where my thoughts begin and end. Haha

It's totally not weird if you had anything you had anything to say! All critiques are helpful nuggets.

Yo puzzle, thanks a lot dude. You hit the nail on the head with the script as it was the first pass. I wanted to do so much more but due to time I had to just hit the ground running. There even was a few parts I had to cut including a longer showdown with doctor fab but I think I axed the wrong part in favour of concluding my own characters story and setting up for what I was hoping a fresher, more unified and bolder story than I have done with any of my characters on the site. I essentially wanted to turn some joke characters into perhaps my most profound but time got the better of me and I favoured refreshing that instead of what I should have focused on instead which was having that final boss showdown everyone was expecting of me. It was the wrong choice but in a way I don't regret it and don't mind the loss here. I think this is a good point to cap off my void career for real this time as everyone has already pointed it out that it feels like I just want to do my own thing and I think that is definitely where I am heading. While I am still hugely disappointed in what I brought to the table here I have non void ideas that demand my attention and I feel it's about time to try again at the whole self publishing game and see what happens. I hope I can make you proud of what I am cooking up Puzzle as you are by far one of my favourite artists on this site and your words mean loads to me

To my opponents I won't get into critiquing your work as I feel that would be weird on my part. All I can say is I enjoyed both of your comics a lot and I will definitely keep reading what you guys do next . Sorry if there are any typos on this I am posting from my phone.

Next critique!

ROFLQU- I think its clear to anyone you are some Lovecraftian comic horror. TWENTY FIVE PAGES IN ONE WEEK. Like ,even saying that sentence out loud is staggering, I can't imagine actually making it happen. Seriously dude. I thought your previous rounds were content heavy, but way to end with a spectacular bang!

I'm a sucker for black and white, so I'm rather glad this last round was done sans color. I really plays well to the flashbacks with college age Fabulous- who is named Frederic? Mysteries revealed!! I know I already told you this, but I really dug the final design you went with for young Fab. That characteristics we all know and love are still very apparent on his face I knew exactly who he was, even before I got to find out his closely guarded secret first name. The transition to the present time desert wander is definitely a change up from your usual work. You drew the good Doctor with some heavy leanings on detail and a little realism. I'm so used to seeing him to round, jolly and almost toony, it was a good weighty shift to allow for a more serious moment with death. I guess my only complaint would be the placement of your dialogue squares on page 5. You had such a nice descending flow on page four that when you get to the next page- despite your seemingly apparent wealth of panel space, those squares are shifted to the side, or popping out of panel.

I know we talked about your initial story and you were definitely pressed for time due to technical issues, but I think you brought this together despite not getting as deeply into your flashback moments as you intended. Still, without it, I feel that vitriol of Doctor princess doesn't pack the same punch. Well apart from the usual void tropes of 'chance encounter? FIGHT'. I gotta say, my fav page of that sequence has to be page 12 and the exhalation of the laughing gas, or whatever that junk is. You have a real eye for building up a scene and giving your opponent their due in making them look badass. As for pages, the ones following Fabulous getting konked out is some real talk. I think, this right here is what makes comics a real art. Just being able to tell a story and relay this sort of advice- even if its wearing the outfit of a silly speed resurrection tourney, its still significant and poignant in how its portrayed as Morty fights to get to his buddy. So glad you decided this was the sequence to shade because it really drives home that intensity before Fabulous kicks death in the face. Haha, that's just as cool typing it out as it was to see.

Despite the fact you were pressed for time, its mind boggling you managed to pull out the amount of detail and quality that you did. I mean that splash page. That spread. SO KEWL! I noticed you took a couple shortcuts with the infantry hiding them under the cloud cover- but considering this was all done in a week I can understand cutting corners. Just another neat example of making your opponent look like a total force to be reckoned with.

 I think of all of the opponents, you consistently had a solid story to work from and it showed in every round. No doubt why the votes and response from the void community is so in your favor. Its really clear that you've had this idea in your pocket regarding your fighter, so its super great to see you realize that tale in this comic. Whatta journey, right? So glad I got to get a gander behind and in front of the curtain. Hope you had a blast!

         AHHHHHHH! Before I say anything else, I just need to say this. If you guys ever feel like you're not good enough, or you can't do it, just look at this! In 1 WEEK, which cannot be overstated enough, you've each made beautiful, extensive, professional comics. You guys are working on a level, and at a speed, that dwarfs what most people are capable of. You should be so so so so proud, you guys are like gods! Seriously, no matter who wins or what happens, you need to know that you're actually amazing.

         

        @Charlie           -


                        I think that the largest problem with this comic is the dialogue. What you have right now feels like the first pass; it's very to the point: it moves the story forward and tells us exactly what we need to know. Except for Dr. Princess (who speech is appropriately great) there's not alot of each characters personality or voice applied to what's being said. This kind of writing is perfect when you just need to get everything down, but you need to go back afterwards and inject life and style into everything.

                       Especially because life and style are like who you are! Seriously, you just throw it up everywhere so easily. You make everything look so incredibly, effortlessly cool. It's like you don't even need to think about it, your soul is just a distilled guitar riff exploding for eternity. Your shapes, and colours, and movement hrhghgrhghghghghhh. Your art always comes off as a celebration of everything you love. I feel like I'm just holding my breathe for the moment you start something for the whole world to see, because you're just gonna blow up like a star!


        @ROFLQU           -

                               I know this a common sentiment at this point with SDT's (and with all of the comics this round), so you might not believe me when I say it,  but ahhhhh I can't believe you did this all in one week! The only way I was ever able to acheive something even kinda sorta similar I had to make something of way less quality, and with way less characters.

                              The middle bit of the comic has very little focus on backgrounds and settings. I don't know if it was a conscious decision, or if the lack of time influenced your choices, but it ends up forcing you into using very similar bust style camera shots over and over to fill the space with characters rather than emptiness. there's such wonderful variety in the early and late pages, that I think you just got caught up in getting all the story beats out there.

                              But again that story is great. I left this for the last moment because I've been so self-concerned lately, so I haven't gone back and read all the rounds leading up to this (but I will I swear!) but the story is great! (It's soooooo weird seeing Dr. Photon again! Did he become a void character while I was gone?!) In the same way Charlie makes coolness and action seem so easy, you have a similar mastery over cartooning and dialogue. I struggle with that stuff so much, and I want to be great at it so bad, so it's magical for me to see someone so good at it. It's like there's no inventory of genuine, lively expressions in your artistic bank. You just have people, and they're alive.


         @Julz             -

                       One of the hardest things about having to do a short comic in the week is somehow balancing focus between your characters and your opponents, and I can't imagine how difficult that is with two opponents. Most peeps just bring the focus  onto their own characters in the last round, since that's like your last chance to finish their story. You went the opposite though, and I missed the Dr. Princess jokes of horrifying macabre. It's a difficult balance, esp with Dr. Princess since it's easy for her to dominate the story, but don't act like you're not great at writing characters! Your final PPT round was one of the best character driven comics in that whole tournament, so I know you're awesome at writing.

                      It's nice seeing something jokey, since I think it's easy for any of us to get really focused on the idea of a finale and get deathly serious. Josuu~ was great, even if I'm so out of the loop I have no idea what's going on. And the joke of feeding someone his own shoes as a burrito to kill them was so good!

                   Finally, that colour pallete was just lovely. I love love love the orange/purple and how you sort of used that as a base to work out from. Whenever I did colour comics for SDT I could never manage to alter my pallete each page to suit the mood, so it's really impressive to me how you varied it as you went, while still keeping everything unified.



       You guys should be bursting with pride. You should be all filled with it like warm jelly and just oozing it.You're like royalty. Your like Gods. You guys are like Kanye West. Congratulations for making it here everybody!

Agreed completely with everyones crits. I can't write characters very well, which is why my plots suffer. I don't know my own characters well enough to write them into complex situations. I need to do some exercises with my characters in the future to ensure they don't fall through with only basic humor to keep them adrift. Any help or even a finger pointing me in the right direction for writing is always appreciated. (Also thanks to ROFLqu for giving me some good advice) but there is always more to learn and many more perspectives I'd like to explore!

Soooo much to say, so I'll dedicate each of my posts to each comic. First up JULZ!

JULZ- First off, I love the pinky rosy color palate you stick with your your final battle. Its a nice build up to the fabulosity of your opponent as well as Josuu. There's been some crazy productivity for this SRT from all parties involved and you are no exception. Nine pages in full color over the span of one week?? CRAZY!

I gotta say, I dug how you handled Dr. Fabulous. Too often, most people fall into battles and don't really showcase their opponent well, but you seemed to have done a great job. Even in the little things like Fabulous saying 'billfold' on page two  instead of wallet. I want you to know I notice these things and appreciate dems!

The name gag with Ailie Ali'Ayla was awesome. I was waiting for someone to pull that out of their hat. It was so ripe for the taking! It's also neat you took RoflQu's last SRT as a theme and were inspired to meld your own story into it. I will have to agree with the other comments you've gotten that your SRT submissions didn't feel very Doctor Princessy. I feel I was indeed reading Josuu's intro story and Doc P was just the window dressing/catalyst to get him front and center. I had to give all your previous rounds a second look to be sure, but there was really no point where we really got ot know your fighter apart from her 'Hey I just popped in midway into events' sort of deal. I was hoping there would be a payoff in your last round ,but to be honest, I'm more into Josuu than your doctor, and I personally don't think that's the outcome you were going for by way of trying to resurrect a character.

I'm going to do a holistic review/critique of the entire rez tournament. That is also to say that this review/critiques does not reflect my score for how your entries stand by itself in the final round.

@Charlie:
I saw the rez tourney for you as sort of your own personal resurrection, perhaps a spiritual trial of some sort. In the first round you teased the audience with a self-denigrating joke of keeping a consistent quality in your void entries. However, as each round after progressed and you courted defeat by lapsing into the modality of inconsistency. However, you're talented in other areas such as endurance once burning-out became a factor for you and your opponents, which allowed you to keep going. Struggling with exhaustion is a big part of these void tourneys after all. Despite triumphing in the endurance game, previous rounds didn't do much to elucidate much in the way of story progression either, which i think hurt the capacity of your overall story to create the proper build up needed for your explosive final round. But i think your decision to save your energy for the finale was a great decision, as the final round is by far the most important in terms of showmanship- as i feel it was the strongest entry by itself this round, and the strongest recent entry we've seen from you yet. I love the open-ended conclusion (a la ending scene of Afro-Samurai to cite an example) that any action-packed anime worth its salt should have.

@Roflqu: I have got to say you're one of the most brilliant storyteller that's come to and from Void. I personally love your treatment of the concept of death and how it applies to things that really mattered to the character Dr. Fabulous, death of his fantasies, friendships and past relationships, but also used the same concept in a literal sense, as a narrative "way-out" in case you actually were defeated in any of the rounds (hahaha). Also note the key use of foreshadowing of the looming threat of  literal death in the first round to drive hype of the last round that very few voiders let alone storytellers can pull off competently. Throughout the rounds I definitely felt invested in Fabulous's journey back home and the various obstacles he faced, and the fact that there was a time limit in the narrative really drove that sense of urgency into the reader's head, thus making it all the more important. Furthermore, whether this was intentional or not, some of the rounds had an episodic quality to them, which made me speculate to how Fabulous's homecoming will turn out, what happened to his relationship to Morty (answered in the last round), and how hes going to overcome the obstacle of death itself (as foreshadowed in the first round). Its key details like this that differentiates what makes for a good story and a blah story! Anyways I was really pleased and entertained by how your final round all came together and the final resolution to your story. GREAT JOB!

@Julz: Strong-ass darkhorse game. I really jive with the absurdist humor you had in each of your entries. The loose narrative didn't distract from the humor which I saw as the MAIN thing, just saying it could have been a more cohesive experience? Anyways I hope to see more Josuu now that you've hyped him up to this level. I BETTER SEE MORE JOSUU. AND FIGHT HIM.
Also should have said this in the first round but, thanks for the cameo (sorta...)

Really great comics you guys. Both of you were fun in your respective ways and I adored the work that happened.

Charlie: I know you had some struggles with this, but it's great you worked so hard, because it really paid off! I thought your work was strong. Your colors are very good looking, very very good looking. I'd argue that it's kind of necessary for your work, so it really was in your interest to do them. Your stuff looks much stronger with the colors, especially when compared to the Agent Black comic stuff. You also have a good usage of tones there, too. You really have a good handle on that aspect of your art I think and it looks really good with your work.

I like that you continued to follow through with the story you set forth with the tournament and I thought it was cool. A problem I noticed after talking to some people who were unaware, is that your intro comic for this tournament only being posted in the void thread instead of uploaded made the whole 'killed alive' story concept kind of glossed over and not understood. I had read it, so I knew what was happening, but I think it was important to let you know that.

My main problem I have with the comic is the way you told your story. I think the addition of Luna is a misstep. I understand that you had promoted her last round, but it seems like you kind of undermined your story-telling with that. In fact, Luna takes up nearly as much screen-time as Dr. Fabulous and Doctor Princess' appearances combined and definitely does more when compared to them individually. Your own set-up with Dr. Fabulous and Morty as these final villains was already being teased and played with from nearly the very start, but Luna dispatches him easily and really hurts the impact of him as this big final villain. The problem is, you're essentially creating a situation where the tension and the build up is dropped from underneath the audience's feet. If at the end of Return of the Jedi, the Emperor was taken out by Boba Fett and suddenly presented himself as the final challenge for Luke, it'd be a complete drop from the tension, especially when he's set up from the previous movie and the current one.

I know you foreshadowed her and everything, but even still, it seems like her role could honestly be fulfilled by the other opponents. Ultimately, what happens is that AAA is killed and is revived by Ferdinand to come back as the Grim Reaper and do a final powerful attack against the main bad guy, which turned out to be Luna. I guess if your intent was to showcase Luna again, you succeeded, but it just kind of falls flat to me, because she doesn't contribute to the story in a way that either of Doctor Princess or Dr. Fabulous couldn't have done.

Not that I'm upset by his portrayal or how he was dispatched at all, that's fine, but I think it's important to make sure you continue to improve and grow your story-telling muscle.

In a layout issue, I think you don't take the opportunity to showcase any of the other character's deaths in any powerful way either, Doctor Princess dies off-screen, Morty is dead in a tiny panel, and Dr. Fabulous' death is also a pretty tiny panel, too. There's a lack of impact in that I think and I know you're capable of very strong action, (Agent Black for example), but that's just time I'm sure.

Again, your art is really nice looking in this finished state, it's quite possibly your most handsome effort in my recent memory. You're definitely getting better as an artist, especially your colors, which look so much stronger than the last time we rumbled in the Invitational those years ago. If you can improve your story-telling and make strides in that regards, you're only going to get way better. Great job, man. You should be proud.

Julienya: This is really great! I know I talked about his with you at length on Facebook, but you're really growing in your comedic abilities. You're doing your own original humor and it really shined through this tournament. I want to see more from you in this department in the future, because it's honestly great. Doctor Princess became sort of versatile in this tournament, taking her away from the sort of serious nature that she held in her Prettiest Princess Tournament run.

Your colors are looking really pretty in this comic, but I noticed it in particular this round. I'm really in love with how you did all of this. The soft-shading digital paint style is really helped by your texture choice. The purples and orange colors look fantastic and it's a gorgeous color combination, I think.

I think the only thing I wish would happen here is that I wish there was one more page to this comic so that you could better resolve the other two characters. The story doesn't end in a bad way by any means, but I wish you had been able to somehow had that one more page, because the resolution of Dr. Fabulous, Morty, AAA, and her crew leaves a little bit to be desired but that's the only thing I have wrong with it. In every other regards, it's a fun lighthearted comic and it really was a pleasant read. Terrific job, you should be pleased with yourself.




And for the rest of you currently, thanks so much for the critique and comments, I appreciate it.

Sorry I wanted to do more full body but that meant more backgrounds and I aimed too far to try  as it was and make this really slick but I fell more on my face than I anticipated. as for the small text I swear this time I exported and could view it just fine on my screen without trouble so I am confused as to why it's so unreadable for everyone else . I am not even exaggerating but maybe it's something I should look into. Either way I will bump the size in future comics just to avoid that. Still thanks for all the heavy Crit, I have got a lot of it this time around and I am listening.i just can't make my style work on a tough deadline yet and it seems to be my downfall.

Considering this is the last round of SRT, I feel like I should say stuff but I don't want to do a big crit yet.  I have time so I'll just go through what I'm thinking quickly.

Orange, I like your bright colors and I like how you've really made each opponent you've had reflect your style.  I'm not sure I have anything new to say because my critique will probably sound a lot like things I have already said in the past.  Gotta let that art breathe.  You got to pull the camera back every now and then and let us take in the surroundings.  We don't even get that good of a look at Dr. Princess.  Most manga or comics or whatever will at least give us a full view when a new character is introduced.  You can think of it as a pause in it's own way because it lets us take in the details of new people.  As for the writing, I never really felt invested in AAA's story.  Honestly, I feel like she's been the weaker one of your characters.  I was always a big fan of Luna, but AAA's story has just never hit those notes for me.  And your quality score takes a hit for me because of the font size.  

Roflqu, I have loved Dr. fab's story during this tournament.  I've been emotionally invested and I think this ranks as one of your best on the site.  You did tremendous work.  But even so, your inconsistent quality, while understandable, has to affect your score.  I have so many questions and I'm curious about much of Dr. Fab's past.  I'm hoping you put up the parts you weren't able to complete in previous rounds, this story deserves to be complete.  That ending felt very satisfying and I enjoy the friendship of Fab and Morty.  Keep pushing and keep experimenting you've done quite a few interesting things this tournament.  I'm not super sure what impact Leader's place has in the story.  He's just sort of there?  I guess something I would like to see you try is more daring perspective shots.

Julz you've done a great job as well though I feel like you ran out of steam.  To be honest, your story never had a direction but it was silly fun and Josuu has been an entertaining part of it all.  But I feel like he carries the story a bit too much?  Humors a hard thing so I give you props.  I really like what you tried to do on page 5, I'm very much in favor of fun panel work and perspective so I would say keep pushing that sort of thing.  Your figures and characters a bit inconsistent.  I'm not sure whether to chalk it up to the rush of getting this comic out on time or whether you need to polish your style more but maybe it's a bit of both?  Anyways, solid effort.

That goes for all three of you.  I went out like a chump in the first round but you three have seriously put in efforts and skill while dealing with shenanigans (especially you Orange.  You fought a Tornado to get this comic done.).  So you should all be proud of what you did this final round.  Hope to see more from all of you.

Ah yeah there was a bit of a reboot I did of Luna a couple years ago and this was kind of more or less to be the prequel to that. Since it was so long ago I guess I should have expanded more on it. Like I said, so much more I wish I could have done.

Also u guys all fucked up big time jesus

Re Luna, I also thought it was a bit odd.
Like i read ur previous comic and when the last bit was "deploy LUNA" i was like "errr whaaaaa?" Like it felt a bit random.
However, i only really read the invitational Luna comics and i remember her being a weird space creature and not like some kinda satan guys slave weapon. Maybe there was comics inbetween that explained it better? But again, the invitational was years ago and my memory is hazy. Like maybe if the reason or some kinda explanation as to WTH Luna is suddenly here could be good? I mean... WHAT WAS THE REASON?

I did actually really like ur dr fab tho

Tho u know i think this even if there are some weaknesses in the story i think art is amaze. U should be proud!

(I am still waiting for panda girl btw )

Just to clear up why Luna appears suddenly, it isn't so suddenly. The ending of the last comic specifically said she was going to appear in this one. Sure the transition could have been better I admit but the reason for her appearance wasn't just pulled out of a hat. thanks for the Crit tho everyone but honestly most of these issues aside from the text problem people are having are just time crunch issues. I had a lot working against me when making this comic and I am just as disappointed in it as a lot of you are as I know I could have done more if I had nothing else in my life going on.

Also this won't be the last time anyone will see these characters. I will probably make a short comic sometime during the year that has no connection to VOID.

To all three of you; You fellas gave us some really nice end results to this tournament. For the time given, you've all done an incredible job. Thank you!

Now critiques;

CHARLIE:
As mentioned previously, your text was a bit small. Not sure what size you used, but maybe resizing the pages and then adding 9-10 pt would've helped. Adjusting the baseline shift would've also helped readability along, plus eliminated speech bubble real estate so we can get some more reveal on the artwork.

 As for opponent portrayals in your comic, I was a little disappointed on how you portrayed Dr. Fabulous. I think there was a lot of missed opportunities with his persona you could've played with. His dialogue exchange with Ayla came off as typical surly anime super villain. Even though you kept his trademark monocle and boa, it just didn't feel like his character at all.  On the other hand, the one portrayal I really enjoyed was Dr. Princess. Her personality felt more true to her character and I loved her outfit design! The character designs in general were fun, energetic, and well suited to the story.
  The addition to Luna at the last minute jarred the story's flow for me. She just comes in and suddenly wipes out Dr. Fabulous in order to continue some back story exposition between your characters up until the end of the comic. The last 7 pages could've been better off as a Beyond Battle in the event Ayla won the tournament, since this could've been 7 pages where you could tighten up and give more developing time between your opponents and your character personally.
    Out of all your entries this was by far one of your strongest visual pieces. Beautiful colors and tones, panel layouts were a nice display and again the character designs were marvelous eye candy!

ROFLQU:

The fact you managed to pull 25 pages within one week is amazing in itself. Of course, with having limited time to work with such a large page count, some parts of the comic did a little dip. For instance some pages were toned, and some had minimal edits with the line art. But overall, you still managed to keep the comic consistent with having everything inked and adjusted to a finished degree. THAT  is awesome. The other issue is that we do not know exactly why Dr Photon, Leader, and (to some extent) Dr. Princess want Fabulous dead. Hopefully we'll get the full coverage on that in your BB soon!

Your storytelling is super solid with multiple show-stopping moments. ( Morty "rescuing" Dr. Fabulous, the two-page spread, the college flashback...) Dr. Fabulous's narrative felt very personal and bittersweet, right up to the very end. Character interactions were also very fun and engaging. Seemed like everyone played a special role, even the ones getting decked in the face by Morty hahah. So overall, this was an amazing entry. You played some serious high stakes with the page count, but it also helped you understand your limitations better. Wonderful job!

JULZ:  I enjoyed how you tied in the desert scene from Roflqu's comic to continue with your story. You also had some very eye pleasing color palettes and panel layouts were unique in design. What I felt was the weakest points was the character interactivity. Ailie was just...sorta there. Not really sure what her objective was. Panel one on page 9 was reaaally confusing. I wasn't sure if it was Ailie's friend getting zapped or Morty.Also did Dr. Fabulous and Morty end up dead or stranded in the desert? What of Ailie and her dude guy friend? I have to say one of my favorite bits was Morty coming in out of nowhere and socking Jyosuu in the mug, and Dr. Princess getting Ailie's name mixed up gave me a good chuck. Overall though it turned out to be a nicely rounded entry with beautiful color schemes, and the way you draw your opponents were very charming too.

Charlie: This comic is a nonstop monster truck joyride and I love it. Bold lineart, electrifying colors, and nonstop pace really give the feel of an escalating action finale. I especially love the detailed redesigns of each of your opponents and also the guest characters, it gives a really unifying design theme to your world and brings everything together. Your panel layouts work, but I think there's a few cases where panels overlap without gutters and it makes it difficult to separate panels (perhaps an extra white stroke on overlapping panels?). Text is a tad small, but that's easily fixable for next time. Likewise, I think your caption text could be dialed up a notch to give it some real OOMPH, like the caption for Ailie's super attack near the end. Overall this is a solid piece and easily one of my favorite comics in a while. The bottom three panels of page 10 belong in the void history books =D

Julz: Also a nice showing with a fully colored comic! As a nonsequitir gag comic, the risk is always that your medley of jokes will be hit or miss, and I feel some of the gags were kind of tangential and didn't really add anything to the comic (like Dr. Princess flubbing up Ailie's name, or Ferd and 69 playing pokemon), which kind of draws attention away from the main sequence of events. I also would have maybe liked to have seen more input from Dr. Princess herself, perhaps to give her more presence in the comic and to make it more meaningful that Josuu chooses to fly away with her. The first two panels of the last page make it seem as though Josuu was reaching out to Aiylee, so I was a little surprised to see he went flying off with Dr. Princess despite her lack of presence in the last few pages. Then again that might just add unnecessary structure to the gag sequence and take away its random element; this kind of comedy is really difficult to break down! Still, I couldn't help smiling throughout this entire entry; something about pleasant pastel colors does justice to Josuu prancing about.

ROFLQU: I feel like your comic could have benefited from wider panels and stronger establishing shots so you could get more detailed set pieces to help distinguish your backgrounds from each other. Otherwise this was pretty good.

Good job, good effort

fantastic job from all three of you, they all hit professional grade to me

Charlie: Great action and visuals, overall this was alot of fun to watch, very enjoyable for my eyeballs. I feel the biggest weakness is the story. It didn't hit any real big twists or strong emotions for me. I had a good feeling from a few comics back that the loyal Ferdinand would meet his end by the final page, and I didn't like Dr. Fabulous' demeanor and dialogue, it was a bit too basic, standard short form anime end-boss fare. I felt you could have made it more fabulous cause what we got is really just Fabulous in name only. I feel like adding in Luna was the real end threat was a bit of a cop-out to the other two characters in the story, especially since she's already your character. I guess her entry is bittersweet cause it was still cool to see a reappearance.

Roflqu: This story has so much heart it's oozing off the pages, I love your tale of friendship and rebirth. You have some wonderful compositions here. There were some times where the word bubbles started to clutter up, particularly with the flashback I feel like, in the end I didn't really get much from all the stuff they said, and it could have been fine with less chitchat. I'm a little unclear on what Fabulous did to earn their ire, and while it's not necessarily important, a part of me would have liked to know to beat the curiosity. I'm not a fan of the layout of Page 24, with Fabulous and that table, the depth is all wrong, it feels like a paper Fabulous was pasted onto the page over the table.

Julz: What a funny comic, I literally laughed at some of the gags here. The messing up of Ailie's name is comic perfection. It feels complete and colorful. I'm not the biggest fan of the Josuu thing so when that made a return appearance into the comic I kinda tuned out. It ends very abruptly once he does and that saddened me, as the first half of the comic was a hit for me and then it just started to drop off even further narratively and I didn't feel engaged anymore.



As far as I'm concerned you each hit a specific high point for me: Charlie with Quality, ROFLQU with Entertainment, and Julz with Creativity. This was a very enjoyable read overall and one of the best tournament finales I've had the pleasure of reading on the site. You're all winners!

Keep up the good work~

Sorry Sean, I'll try harder to try less hard next time.

I feel let down because I didn't get a three-way default.

Charlie- Your text is so hard to read in this comic; it's too tiny. Sometimes things are so over detailed it's muddled and I can't easily tell what I'm looking at. Page 7 is confusing: I get Dr Fab didn't step out of the way but he was actively doing the same motive so why attack him? It seemed like a ends to a means rather than it being natural. To me this was the boss battle and it kind of fizzled out. Like the battle should have been grander or longer.

Rolfq- 25 fucking pages omg. Like any unfinished business crit I have is just *25 INKED PAGES*
The end did quench my shipping soul and was glad to see them getting brunch. The match-on-action from page 3 to 4 was a good choice. Page 13 on looks like a sweet boss battle end game room. I want to puzzle platform all over it and fight that Reaper man!! Dr Fab is looking a little large on top of page 16 though. Page 19 came out crazy well. The Mr. Sun cameo A++. All-in-all it was a very satisfying ending to this huge comic you've accumulated for SRT.

Julz- The story was pretty meh for me. I feel like you're relying on the Josuu character too much for laughs and should have put more effort into the rest of the plot. Like, he IS FUNNY but not what I'm here for in this SRT match. Some of these drawings need a lot more attention, too.

Charlie:
Pros- Looks really tight, real professional. Story gave me a lot of Shonen Jump and GBA game nostalgia.
        You had awesome redesigns,
        The story tied up the arc real nicely!
Cons- Some stuff look great stylistically but try to push to add a bit more substance behind certain designs.
        You had some issues with clarity and inconsistancies as well.
        Page 9 was kinda hard to figure out where it was in the story. It's pretty avant guarde but I thought we completely switched settings.
       With a guy like Dr. Fab I feel like you could have done more with his personality but that's ok!
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Rofl

PROS- Great story line, I loved the flashback and the greytones.
         Funny Cameo from Mr. Sun!
        Nice way to tie up your character arc!

CONS- Dips in quality due to time constraints
          I feel like you should have compromised to remove bits you had no need for so that other parts dont suffer.
          I wish you could have added more tone or at least rendered areas out with ink and pencil.

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Julz

PROS- Really Hilarious
          Nice color
         I totally forgot about Josuu and seeing him again was great
         I'm really proud you made it to the finals!

Con- I recommend you try drawing with your arm or use a better pen stabilizer because your lines tend to get too warped and loose. Or set a fixed minimum size to your inks so that your lines look more consistent.
Also give your bgs more love.
      YOu also had a few issues in clarity, art and storywise but no worries since it was a one weeker

Sorry that it's not 100 percent consistent. I wanted to, believe me, but my tablet died for this tournament.

There will be no Speed Resurrection for it, because it is an ignoble Bamboo.

Sorry for the delay! Ironically enough, I fixed the issues created by the uploader using the uploader. I guess it just likes me better

(Actually, it deleted a couple of pages randomly and I had to re-upload them, so I think it's just a little bitch.)

There will be a delay in this going up. There were some uploading issues and it's something only Bobo or Toast can fix.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cs5OQrdlq2c

edit: damnit, just copy and paste it I guess.

*vibrates with excitement*

Seriously- good luck everyone!!

I have uploaded my battle, but the uploader is glitching out. So I sent a PM to Angie, Bobo, Red, and Puzzle (in case he happens to see it before anyone with power to fix it just so I know someone has it) with the correct page order. My uploader seems to have wanted to duplicate my pages after I had to reupload them all because switching the page order was acting up on me (I originally had to re-upload one page because I forgot something). Hopefully it uploaded fine though, but just to be safe I'd hate for my comic to go up with a bunch of errors.

Anyway I spent a lot of time on this in between going to work and having the world's worst bad luck spree (including lots of storms and power outages through the week and even tornado warnings the other day), but I persevered and got it done.. For a one week battle there are definitely things I wish I had had more time for, there is one page in particular I apologize for having a lot of text. Unfortunately I didn't have the time to pare it down/split it - but I did try to make the page pretty despite that so I hope it makes up for that. In the end I am happy with what I submitted and I hope you guys enjoy reading it.

Thanks for the tourney.

Uploaded let's do dissss

I want a triple default

o/

Best of luck guys, let's make this a good fight

This is it. The final threeway blowout.
Y'all better make it fan freakin tastic or I will write a strongly worded letter to each of you >=[

GO GO GO!

I WILL ANNIHILATE AILIE ALI'AYLA, CLUB CHARLIE, DECIMATE DOCTOR PRINCESS, AND JAVELIN JULIENYA.

I'M GOING TO KILL YOU.

Most? Who don't you expect great things from?

So much hype

Get to drawing you wonderful bitches! I expect great things from most of you!