Negotiations / Veronica Nightingale vs. Jane Blonde

Negotiations — Veronica Nightingale vs. Jane Blonde

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Julz
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# 16   Posted: Nov 26 2014, 12:15 PM
Kura, this comic felt rushed. Half the time the people just looked really incomplete. I feel like more detail was put into the action sequences then anything else. Where I liked the action, specifically page 7, lots of great angles, action lines, and dust clouds, it all looks good but man it's so quiet! I would expect some clashing sounds, explosions, scuffing floors, anything, its all just like watching an action movie on mute. I guess some people can just fill it in themselves with their imagination, but when I'm reading a comic I'm lazy. Looking forward to seeing what this Heimium is doing to Veronica. Stay on top of your game!

Kent, great flow, but really really short! Not much to judge here.

Dechado
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# 15   Posted: Nov 25 2014, 07:47 AM
Kura: I liked this comic. The action is spot on as always, and lines look pretty clean from what I can tell. Though, I do feel movement lines are abused, when there could have been something else. Like dialogue.
Yeah, what's up with that? I see lack of dialogue, and I ask why? Your writing is usually really good. I suppose a misleading title for "Negotations"
Another thing that bewilders me is the ending. Though, I suppose you'll talk about that on your next story.
I'm also going to jump into the popular bandwagon and tell you to stop being so hard on yourself.

Kent: Nice comic, a shame it isn't complete.
But you're always able to tell your stories later, so I am not worried about the unexpected cliffhanger.
Hope your schedule becomes easier and allow you to finish this. :)

PyrasTerran
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# 14   Posted: Nov 24 2014, 01:14 PM
Kura: cool action and I like how you set up parameters of the fight (new calibrations preventing Nightingale from going all out, making it a more gripping fight against the more experienced Jane Blonde). I wanna say I like the twist but I'm not really sure what the twist is XD hopefully the next one will help explain it, even if it's just another page or whatever I can't wait for that full reveal. What I want to see from your next comics is more facial variation between your women. Different jawlines, different noses, and different lips too; sometimes you forgo defined lips even when the character would have colored lips because of makeup or otherwise, and that's part of what causes many of your female faces to be hard to distinguish from. Face another female fighter in your next battle so you can practice this~

All n all an entertaining and engaging comic though

Kent: dangit man it's getting frustrating the amount of times you're dropping the ball this quarter XD we know you can produce some superb stuff so gauge your responsibilities next time to make sure you'll be able to deliver a cool comic as well without screwing with your life duties.

Excited to see where this all leads

MyHatsEatPeople
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393 comments
# 13   Posted: Nov 24 2014, 01:16 AM
Kura you know what you need to do to improve but please don't be too hard on yourself, I know your disappointed but there are some great panels in this comic, though this story does fall apart use this comic to encourage yourself to do better not to put yourself off. You HAVE improved a shit tonne since I've been following your comics and I always look forward to what you produce.

Kent: good two pages but shame you never had time for more!

DEDieckmann (SkullcapComix)
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# 12   Posted: Nov 23 2014, 02:24 PM
KURA: I was VERY confused by Kura's comment below for a few moments.... I thought you got hacked or something.... Decent comic, but at the same time, as you already pointed out (WAY more harshly than I would have), there is room for improvement. It appears you already know what needs work, so I guess we will see some of those things in battle #71!

MR. Kent: Sad to see this was incomplete. There are a few anatomy/proportion problems here and there, but overall not bad, aside from being only a set up with no conclusion. Hope to see more next time!!!!

DragonHeart
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# 11   Posted: Nov 23 2014, 11:18 AM
I'm so confused...

Majikura
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466 comments
# 10   Posted: Nov 23 2014, 11:08 AM
This comic is one huge mess.  Not only is there a page missing to wrap up whatever the hell the storyline is, but the lack of backgrounds and the random disappearing and reappearing room features makes it incredibly hard to tell who is where and what the actual stage looks likes.  Battle effects are obviously a cheap way to cover up for this lack of backgrounds and generally terrible anatomy.  Your lack of understanding how to draw ANYTHING combined with the failure to give Veronica, Jane, and Kale two different faces means this comic is one inconsistent mess of anime girlst duking it out with each other for reasons you didn't even wrap up.  I also don't understand why you think it's necessary to shade in some panels but not others so I'm going to attribute this selective shading as the fact that you cannot time management worth shit.  Face it Kura: you are NOT cut out for actually drawing comics because despite your long history of battling you improve slower than a sloth with ADHD.  Fuck you Kura.


Joeneary - My feelings aren't hurt by harsh words Joe,  because nobody points our my flaws harsher than me,



Keep the flames comin,  I can take it.

DragonHeart
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# 9   Posted: Nov 23 2014, 10:22 AM
Majikura-
I wanted to say that you obviously have a fondness for lots of action packed effects, and this isn't a taste thing, I think they're pretty great, but I think they are a bit too overused here. It sort of becomes a bit muddied and unfocused. Or at least, use them, but just make sure that the main focus of the panel, for example the characters, have a bit more rendering to them. For example, the hundreds of lines that go into the effects, overshadow the characters who really don't have that much shading, or definition to their form in comparison.

Saying that i thought the last page was a great use of effects to give an overall atmosphere, but that is exactly what it created, atmosphere. It wasn't, I'm guessing, supposed to communicate clearly every single detail of this "flashback"(?).

Honestly, it seems a bit harsh, because it did communicate well, I just thing it is a bit imbalanced right now and it would help to pay more attention to your characters and locations now.

Maria Rustwood
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# 8   Posted: Nov 23 2014, 09:33 AM
Oooooh crap I hope Veronica's gonna be ok after the last page. O_O

Mister Kent
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941 comments
# 7   Posted: Nov 15 2014, 01:07 PM
One week left! Ah I can't wait for 'gotiations!!!!

PyrasTerran
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1406 comments
# 6   Posted: Nov 4 2014, 03:08 PM
2 of the 3 Queens of Void face off!

      Edited Nov 4 2014,  03:09 PM by PyrasTerran

Majikura
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466 comments
# 5   Posted: Nov 3 2014, 05:01 PM
This is also my 70th battle.

So yeah, definitely no pressure or anything...

Shen
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1269 comments
# 4   Posted: Nov 2 2014, 04:31 PM
oh snap hes right, and you're also ranked 1 and 2 on the site lol no pressure but this battle better be amazing XD

Mister Kent
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941 comments
# 3   Posted: Nov 2 2014, 02:11 PM
Oh wow--whoever wins, it will be their 45th WIN! We're totally beasts Kura

otakutaylor
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179 comments
# 2   Posted: Nov 2 2014, 09:05 AM
Let the big blonde business beatdown begin!

Shen
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1269 comments
# 1   Posted: Nov 1 2014, 10:55 PM
Hell yeah! About time!

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Nov 29th, 2014
Votes Cast: 15
Page Views: 1457
Winner: Majikura
 

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