Alrighty thing, shall I get started?

Squidney: PLEASE REMEMBER TO SHRINK YOUR PAGES BEFORE YOU POST THEM. Makes it difficult to read and I can see every bit of teeny mistakes on drawing all over. Do you scan a sheet of brown paper and then use the computer to draw on top of it, or do you do it all by hand? I'm sure it's digital shading on this piece (although previous ones not sure), and if it is, I would recommend you try out textured brushes, especially rough scratchy looking ones to spice up the shading, make it have a more traditional grittier look on it. Don't know how to make what i just say sound like a great idea, but I'm just sayin' just try it out. Especially towards page 6 of 8, it would have benefitted if the black spots didn't have such soft shading.

Pepper Slade: Better than a default, but I think it was not good enough in my standards for efforts. I would have rated you higher if it was just a page of effort, but I docked off points because you thought 'making more pages' would be better than having one with the entire story. I think it would have been much better if all four strips were stuck together in one page. Cutting it out like four was unnecessary.

Squidney   -

    While sometimes the looseness and sketchiness of your artwork is charming and lovely, from the night sequence on your lines start to feel less confident and more rushed. The nightmare itself feels really rough. I feel like you were trying to illustrate the chaotic, panicked feel of what's going on, but it comes off more as simply weak line art. After that point, a lot of your hatching and linework feels more rushed and your lovely forms break down a little. I really do like the idea of using all those lines, but be aware that every line you add should give some sort of information to the viewer. The more random lines you add that don't mean anything, the more you dilute the strength of all other lines on the page. Have you ever checked out Boulet's stuff? He does amazing stuff with thousand of lines, you should totes see if you like it. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fWaTn71JLNc if you just wanna marvel for a second and he has a bunch of comics on his site bouletcorp.


     Also, put some time into your backgrounds dude. I think you use space in a really nice way, like how you position and shoot everyone, but the simplicity and emptiness on your setting really detracts from the visuals/story, when it could be making it so much stronger.

      The rushed linework only really becomes noticeable because it's so easy to tell how nice your characters are, and how fluid and strong the linework is in some spots. The girl with the long hair is especially wonderful. I love like pretty much every pose and expression she pulls. She's funny and charming and cute, like she could have no speech bubbles and I'd still know exactly what she was saying.


      Slade  -

             Sucks that you had to draw up a replacement comic so quickly dude (at least that's what I assume happened based on the tags?) It doesn't really feel fair critiquing something you just had to get out there as quickly as possibly, but I'm really impressed how seriously you took the deadline! If it was me I would've just given up and felt sorry for myself.

New here so take my comments with a half single grain of salt.

Squidney: I do come from graphic design so I can help there a bit. Finding a font that matches your style will help bit time. There a great free font websites, and after reading that someone did it here I found paintfont.com which I think you would love. Your leading (the space between lines of text vertically) could come down. It will give you more space for your beautiful artwork. The two bubbles that should be edited are "Have it your way" and "Take care of her... will you?" Otherwise I envy your posing and art style. I think it's cool how you made a dynamic story that changed settings pretty naturally.

Slade: Color could amp up the "cute" big time. If you're using illustrator there's a pretty quick technique out there using the pathfinder window and some expand appearance or outline stroke techniques. It doesn't require closing all your lines either, you can use the knife tool after that. I like your drawing style and your sunday funnies layout makes me jealous too.

Squidney - Nice fluid lines and expressions. The expressiveness got a little chaotic at times, so the art felt a little rushed in some places, especialy towards the end, but it didn't affect my enjoyment of the story much--just make sure you take your time and and sketchiness is a deliberate choice, not because you're in a hurry. Overall very cool tale and I'm glad these characters made it to Void!

Slade - I like your style, but wish it was more finished looking. With such simple figures I think backgrounds would help fill the space nicely. Cute story, but it's a bit too short and sketchy for a three week draw. Looking forward to seeing Anita's next adventure though!

Both the comics were absolutely beautiful.

Squidney: Although size was definitely hindering the story's flow, the artwork was very good, very nice expressions and I liked the marked difference in style between your character and Slade's which you maintained throughout the comic. The ending felt a tiny bit rushed to me, but that's only my opinion, and the story stills holds up fine. Really good job, and I'm loving the consistency of style.

Slade: Love the clean, cute style that you've employed! Very simply told story, easily understood and very funny. Loved everyone's unique quirk and mannerisms, my only complaint is that it was too short! I would have loved to read more.

This is definitely a well-matched battle. Really happy to have read both of these and best of luck to both of you.

Likewise.

I did not read this because of the large size. Fix plz.

Squidney-Always double check your upoads, because I get the feeling that the sizing here wasn't intentional. Prior to the comic going up you can reupload at any time, just so you know for future comics! You make some good choices in terms of camera angles and I'm glad to see that you vary things up. I would like to see you focus on slowing down and getting your lineart a bit tighter so you'll have better readability.

Slade-What you had was cute and while I'm happy to see you turned in something, I'm really tired of reading your excuses. Let the work speak for itself, because I as the reader don't care what happened when I go to read your comic.

Which program do you use? If it's Photoshop, you go to the 'image' tab, should be an 'image size' option on the dropdown.

Ahhh how do I resize???

ahhh, Squidney your story is probably great but its so hard to tell because the file sizes are so enormous I can barely read it!! T.T I can almost follow it better in the thumbnails, heh! But i think you've got some nice art and a really dramatic story, Im interested more about Hyena Girl's condition!
Slade, a short n sweet lil thing, cute art, cute story, nothing groundbreaking but very pleasant!

uuugggggrgrhh too big Squidney, I can't read this large size U_U

Good news, bad news:

Bad: I got a new external yesterday, so I started to transfer files over... sadly, something hicupped (maybe because of the large transfer all at once) and several files got corrupted. This battle being one of them.

The good? I still got all day to make at least something passable. I won't default.

Bonus? It was fun drawing miss nature queen, so i got an excuse to draw her again... though i can't spend as much time. T3T oh well.

(and yes, the 'black and blue' file was also in there, but there is still plenty of time to recreate that one as not only had i only started on it, but we still have over two weeks for that one.)

Sorry guys, a little bit of an extension. But awesome is still on it's way. X3

EXCITEMENT CAN'T BE CONTAINED.