Nakia: Your pages are too big. When they're big, you see all the mistakes much more clearer. And when I saw these zoomed out, it seems like you neglected the background on a lot of panels. If you want to add a little extra to the backgrounds, you can always consider using speedlines.

Adam@: Beautiful color. Comparing page one and two, seems like the ghost mom gives off a radiant green glow, but is only shown in one panel. Not sure if it's too important, but just something to think about. I don't really have any comment other than that.

Nakia: Aaaagh giant pages! Not bad art, but not cleaned up either unfortunately.

Adam!: Wow so great! Perhaps surprisingly, I'm not a fan of the last page. Feels anti-climactic, I was hoping we'd actually see the kill.

Good job folks~

Nakia        -


            Ahahaha is she channeling Bad Apple?! Helll yessssssss. Your art is really professional that I really don't know what I can say. I wish there was some more backgrounds, but I don't know how you could've possible continued doing that ridiculous nostalgia graveyard and still have submitted the comic in time, it was so incredibly detailed.

            Did you finish adding the dialogue? I only ask because it feels like there should be something, somewhere from page 4 on. I think it all reads totally clearly without talking, but the complete silence feels a little jarring. Maybe even some sound effects would've been enough? I'm not really sure.

           I'm just nitpicking because it's so good, awesome work Nakia!



Adam           -

             Whooooaaaaaaaa, that's lovely! My favorite part is definitely Ghost Mom, just everything about her. She's got such great personality in her features, and I really like how you use coloured lineart on her to make her appear more ethereal. In general I love your expressions, they're so strong and confident. And oh my damn, that gate on the first page was so nice!

           Only thing negative thing I can spot in the face of such great art is that you're writing could use a little proofreading, which is a really lame thing to point out but it's all I've got. Just try reading your comic out load before you finalize the text, or have someone else read it and hand you notes. That's the only way I can avoid posting/turning-in anything that's not complete gibberish, which this comic certainly is not.

Amazing round guys!

Everyone: If someone's pages are too big you can always zoom out in your browser. It's better if the pages are correct, but mistakes happen and it's not that hard to fix it yourself to get a better comic viewing experience.

Nakia: Man, I really wish you'd been able to finish this. I love where you're going with it, and that twist at the end was really chilling and awesome. The junkyard was brilliant, and I love the dynamic you've got between Georgette and her mother. I want to see more of this story, although it's looking like I might not get everything I want. Sorry for messing up that last page.

Adam: I love, love LOOOVE your style, and I'm amazed at how finished your pages are. I felt like the ending was lacking just a little bit somehow, I'm not sure exactly why. I had trouble working out what everything was on that page, although I definitely got the general idea. I love that you included so many past VOID characters, which surprised me because aren't you brand new on the site? Maaaad props for that, dude! I can't wait for round 2!

NOTE: Nakia sent me the pages because they didn't upload properly, and I somehow submitted a cropped version of page 7. The full page is now posted. Sorry Nakia!

Nakia: gaaaaaah! Resize, resize, resize!! recommended Max width is 800, it really breaks the flow in reading when you have to scroll back and forth and up and down just to get what's going on in a panel - such a shame when you have such beautiful artwork

Adam: Wow! Just WOW! Your artwork is simply stunning - I haven't gotten around to read too many of the other battles yet, but I got an inkling I just read the future winner of the Prettiest Princess Death Tournament - Now please go catch the flu* or something so the rest of us have a chance

* Don't catch the flu.. keep posting awesome comics!

Nakia man I love that junkyard. It's pretty big to house the Death Star a girl could get lost in there! You made my princess look wicked i love it! And I also find it funny that we both had a lot in common, great minds if you ask me. Thanks for a great match and a fun character the write for and draw. I will say I totally did not think about grave robbing with my character pre getting paired with you lol.

Damn...I submitted the wrong sized pages. :/

Nakia, you're a beast when you finish, but it looks like you need to learn your limits.

Adam, awesome, but Wingdings?  Really?  Xenotribal or Squiznor or something you scribbled up yourself would've been better.  Anyway, small thing.

Nakia - lol got to admit after you posted your character and write up I felt the same way. I thank whoever paired us up! Even if I don't last past this round this one is going to be a fun one!

It doesn't get much more young blood vs old school than this! Good luck you guys!

YES!!!!!!! I wanted this one sooo bad!!! Good luck Adam@!

This one'll be interesting. Good luck, you two!

Interesting I like it! Bring on the voodoo un-dead goodness!