You really bogged this thing down with the texture effects. I think there would have been a much happier middle ground with a lower opacity & better readability. Here it just felt like something to do rather than an actual aesthetic choice.

There are points where you are doing really good things to lead the eye but then there are other points like them running right to left at the bottom of page 8 I think that kind of work againet the flow you are building

I felt the story flowed very well, there was only one point where I got a little mixed up, and that was on page 8.  In the lower left, I guess the third panel on the page, the left edge is perfectly lined up with the panel beneath it.  Because of this I got a little confused with order and read the 'Got 'Im' panel before the 4th and 5th panels, which then brought me back to that text and I understood.

In this case I think it was caused by the sameness of the border colour to the colours within the panels themselves, I barely noticed the division and only realized they were separate panels after checking over.

This was coming along very nicely, thanks very much for taking the time to upload the progress here.

     I think the tone is really middling throughout the comic, and it makes the characters sort of dissolve into the setting. I think you avoided that really well in the first page, by having the character a much more saturated colour than his surroundings, but after that you default to different levels of beige. I really really like the sort of mottled, oil slick colour/texture going on underneath everything though.

     I really like your shot choices and how you tell the story visually. I actually thought their dialect felt really natural to read, which is crazy for me because I usually hate phoneticized accents. I thought page 5 was pretty sweet, and it's such a short chaotic moment that I think it works as a slightly confusing page. I didn't like the first panel though. Not because it's not pretty, because it is, but because it's like an establishing shot for an environment that's unimportant in the narrative. I think it would've been way strong if you had placed the camera at the base of the windmill and shot upwards at it, like a child looking up at it. Illustrate the windmill as the imposing structure the kid see's it as, so we feel what he's saying as he says it.

      Also while I was reading it, I realized it was hand lettered. Holy shit dude. Overall it's a great comic, and I hope now that this is out there you come back and make some more comics.

I actually quite enjoyed this comic, despite it being unfinished. Your facial expressions are always great, and the story was very entertaining so far - I was rather disappointed when the comic ended just as it got really exciting!
I liked the style of lineart, although it can be a little chunky and unclear at times. The texture is nice, but possibly a little too heavy? It makes the lines rather grey, which makes them sort of...harder to see? Especially with your soft, grey tones. It might just be my eyes though.
I also concur with Glasses concerning having to read a page a couple of times to understand what was occurring. Page 5,  although very dynamic, is rather confusing. I didn't even catch that a piece of his clothing had been torn off (?) until my 2nd or 3rd read through the comic. I'm also not entirely sure who's doing what in Page 3, but again, that could just be me.

I really hope to see more completed comics from you  c:

you need to keep using and working with this particular inking style/method......certain parts really shine thru and show a great deal of potential.........with more practice and attention to detail you can easily overcome the shortcomings that are present.....frequently too loose and indescriminately chunky or blobby..... often in the same panel or on the same page where sharper lines and shapes or finer details are present

however with more practice and greater effort you should have no difficulty overcoming what is otherwise very disruptive to the flow of the visuals

(Oh my god it double posts every time I comment!)
While I've got this extra space, I will say that there were times I had to read a page twice to really understand the events, but I'm not sure I could say why.  That could just be on me.

Oh wow, this was coming along really well!  I'm glad you put it up, unfinished as it is.  Woulda blown mine out of the water for sure!  And as I said before, I'm sorry to hear about your grandmother, and I completely understand how that would make it untenable to keep working on this story.  As always I love your expressions and poses, and it's neat to see how you did KJV, with all her bitterness and craftiness.