Intro Story / Kruger
Critiques & Comments
# 9
Posted:
Feb 10 2013, 10:09 AM
I'm looking forward to more from this guy! I do have to echo Zest, though, because without knowing Kruger's abilities, this comic would have made very little sense to me. Show, don't tell!
# 8
Posted:
Feb 9 2013, 08:57 AM
Cool character design, sharp linework, nice perspective, rockin' comic.
Welcome Kruger!
Welcome Kruger!
# 7
Posted:
Feb 6 2013, 06:12 AM
He's a pretty cool character! I wonder just how strong he'll get @_@ The gorillas totally had it coming.
# 6
Posted:
Feb 5 2013, 06:45 PM
Welcome to Void, Kruger! This entry was short an sweet, for the most part. Nice posing on the first panel and last page, great inks to go along with it. However, the typeface you're using for your speech bubbles doesn't work for me- it feels too cold and boring. I'd suggest checking out some other typefaces that mesh with your art better or even try hand-written type. I was also a bit confused by the blood and the quick aftermath. I assumed that the blood was important, but didn't see how until I read the bio. If your character is supposed to have awesome blood-soaked powers, show 'em off! You had a perfect panel to show the full aftermath of Kruger's powers, it'd have been excellent to show it in action.
# 5
Posted:
Feb 4 2013, 11:16 PM
Hooray! He's in! Can't wait to see what rockstar splash Kruger has in store for Void City!
# 4
Posted:
Feb 4 2013, 06:37 AM
The photo realism is great -especially on the first page. Although I find it inconsistent with this theme that orangutan has X on his eyes instead of pure black - was he a toon orangutan and just the gorilla was a furry?
Your hands looks realistic on the second page, but his right one holding that sheet of paper disappears on the second panel for no other reason than to make the written text more clear and I don't think we really need to see all the crossed out places.
I really wish that the last panel had more detail to it - shading on the face at least, since everything else seems so well placed - his neck has shade from his hair and chin, but his forehead doesn't get the same benefit?
Overall, I like it. You're on my hit list, I gave what I'd call high notes, but since it's a intro story I expect more, since for some people the intro sometimes is the best comics they ever do on Void - I hope you won't fall into that category and keep on delivering and battling.
Your hands looks realistic on the second page, but his right one holding that sheet of paper disappears on the second panel for no other reason than to make the written text more clear and I don't think we really need to see all the crossed out places.
I really wish that the last panel had more detail to it - shading on the face at least, since everything else seems so well placed - his neck has shade from his hair and chin, but his forehead doesn't get the same benefit?
Overall, I like it. You're on my hit list, I gave what I'd call high notes, but since it's a intro story I expect more, since for some people the intro sometimes is the best comics they ever do on Void - I hope you won't fall into that category and keep on delivering and battling.
# 3
Posted:
Feb 4 2013, 02:52 AM
AH! Hes in! That amazing! I can't wait to see some comics from you!
# 2
Posted:
Feb 3 2013, 09:54 PM
SHIT YES HITLISTED SO HARD.
# 1
Posted:
Feb 3 2013, 09:53 PM
I HIT THAT HITLIST BUTTON SO FAST THERE WAS A SONIC BOOM. SO glad this character is in!
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Fun intro comic, want to see more of this due. I personally think that id you switched the last two panels, the impact of the busted up gorillapeeps would have much more impact.
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