Intro Story / Meridia Oricon

Intro Story — Meridia Oricon


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Kozispoon
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# 4   Posted: Aug 10 2012, 11:41 PM
Interested, but I don't feel your pages really tells us anything about your fighter apart from what's included in the narration. I do hope to see more though- that last page was pretty groovy.

Pocketmouse
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# 3   Posted: Aug 8 2012, 01:48 AM
This character looks interesting, but I feel like the introduction could have added a lot more.
It kind of only shows her arriving, and I feel like it only says what her bio already tells everyone. I guess I'd have rather seen some interpretation of her powers, some idea of her personality or the way she interacts with others?  Though having said that the idea of what Void City arrivals terminal must be like is exciting.
I mean you can pretty much do whatever for the intro comics so I guess all I'm saying it only re-iterate the important bits, but really go for the storytelling side in the future. I'd like to see what she can do, since there's a lot of stuff for you to play about with :') So I am looking forward to where she goes next!

Other than that I think your lines are a little inconsistent at times and they feel a little clunky in places; they are varied in terms of some are thicker and some are thinner but it might be nice to see you have variation in thickness of a single line, I hope that makes sense (I can elaborate if you need it, sorry) but I do like where you're dropping large dense areas of black. It might be fun for you to try building some figures/environments out of just black and white shapes. either dense/broad areas of ink or cut-out shapes of paper or what-not. It could be fun and I would be really intrigued to see what that might bring out in your style.

Anyway, This probably has seemed a little harsh but I promise it's because I like what I'm seeing and want to see where it goes next :')
Good luck with whatever you do next!

The Bent One
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# 2   Posted: Aug 6 2012, 10:13 PM
I'm getting some TRANSMETROPOLITAN vibes from the last page. I LIKE IT!

Video320
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114 comments
# 1   Posted: Aug 6 2012, 09:54 PM
interesting. I REALLY like the last page. Looking forward to see more Meridia.

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